kiss me anew, here
before the last maple leaf
falls, and first snowflake
wets my pale lips, stilling time
twisted in salty drenched arms
hurl me anew, here
before the last rose petal
dips, and first winter
drop caresses my bare hips
unfolding, clinging to you
Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - Form for All - Man’yoshu Poetry – Hosted today by Jane Kohut-Bartels (Lady Nyo). The challenge is to write the Somon category of Man’yoshu Japanese Poetry. In this category, the tanka style poems refer to love and longing.
and Poetry United: Thursday Think Tank - Waning days of Fall
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These have such a lovely flow like the floating feeling of being in love.ReplyDelete
This is beautiful!ReplyDelete
Heaven, this is so delicious. Thank you.ReplyDelete
I agree... absolutely lovely. I especially like the first stanza.ReplyDelete
Another great verse, I'll take that kidn of cling any time..hahaReplyDelete
Truly beautiful autumn love poem! Sensual and sweet.ReplyDelete
Such beautiful words to bid farewell to golden Autumn and welcome the coolness of Winter!ReplyDelete
i like the image of "my bare hipsReplyDelete
unfolding, clinging to you"
Romantic and sensual...ReplyDelete
Such a smooth piece to read...
mmm...nice heaven...knew this one would be right up your alley...sensual and a nice dance...ReplyDelete
Exactly right. Nothing forced, so delicate, the touch so gentle, so loving, interspersed with seasonal images not used as metaphors, only sounds to reinforce the silky touch of the poem. Well done.ReplyDelete
Lusciously romantic! Beautifully said.ReplyDelete
Clinging to you; I love that~ReplyDelete
Really wonderful imagery! Well Done~
loves is that what is dripping and clinging..ReplyDelete
A nice poem to let the feel of romance grow deep as the season transits..
Sensuality rules, and heat in autumn is always a good thing.ReplyDelete
lovely, sensual tanka.ReplyDelete
That's gorgeous! What a lovely, unexpected use of the prompt.ReplyDelete
(The autumn leaf prompt, that is. Perfect for the Man'yoshu.))ReplyDelete
You got me with the second line all the way to the end...ReplyDelete
wonderful wonderful poem.
Just adore it.
Siggi In Downeast Maine
I think you hit just about every right cylindar with this poem!ReplyDelete
Beautiful....the mention of season, the way you intertwine it and lust, well, this certainly is in the spirit of the Man'yoshu.
You can really feel the desire and passion in this poem - powerful!ReplyDelete
I love the passion! Really enjoyed this, Heaven.ReplyDelete
All the reasons I'm not allowed to travel alone. Very romantic, sensual on content, but very well written poetically; great word choices, combinations, images, reader involement, and line work.ReplyDelete
a very elegantly sexy presentation of this form.
i like how you weave season and lust together..sensual and elegantReplyDelete
Race against time...for love is transient as the seasons...ReplyDelete
beautiful choice of words!ReplyDelete
Why did the maple leaves make me think that this was a very personal poem?ReplyDelete
Very fitting for both the season, and my current mood. GET OUT OF MY HEAD HEAVEN! ^_^
Beautiful and sensual, thoroughly enjoyed! :)ReplyDelete
Wow, this section reads of incense:ReplyDelete
"before the last rose petal
dips, and first winter
drop caresses my bare hips"
Gentle sensuality in a nicely executed form.ReplyDelete
Kind of interior rhyme here which is lovely.ReplyDelete
this poem paints a beautiful picture in my mind! a joy to experience :)ReplyDelete
So beautifully expressed passion....brilliant.ReplyDelete
This poem is sumptuously erotic - I love that it is in the female voice, and that her sexuality is not under-stated.ReplyDelete
Well, how awesome is this Heaven! I just came from Lady Nyo's. Getting a double dose of love poetry and influence by Japan.ReplyDelete
mmm... very sensuous and delicious! ♥ReplyDelete
Just how I love my poems...hot, short and deep!ReplyDelete
hot waves of emotions, well done.ReplyDelete