Monday 5 December 2011

Wild beat

pale moon

bear me down gently
sea bed alight with copper sand
sinking stern
drowning salty spray our lips
wrapping  crescent  hips  arching


deep blue 


                                                                   


fierce sun

lift me up quickly
crimson mountain jutting teal sky
burning bow
as soft lips caress red silk skin
unfurling plump cheeks writhing

wild beat



Author's Note:   Poetry form is cameo, a purely syllabic form consisting of six lines with the following syllable count: 2, 5, 8, 3, 8, 7, 2.  Thanks Kerry, I had fun with this form ~

For the Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - OpenLinkNight - Monday
and D'verse Poets Pub - OpenLinkNight - Tuesday  - Hosted by the lovely Natasha Head.


Picture credit:  here

34 comments:

  1. drowning salty spray our lips
    wrapping crescent hips arching

    nice, love those lines...you play this well to form and still make it warm...smiles.

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  2. Really gorgeous writing to compliment the beautiful picture of night kissing day. Your metaphor is handled with a subtle touch - words well-chosen.

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  3. Beautiful rendition Heaven! Sensuously expressed and great play of words!

    Hank

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  4. Love this...you handled the cameo style well...I haven't even attempted it :)

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  5. Vivid colors and imagery. Nicely done in form. :) Enjoyed it.

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  6. It was very productive fun that you had. The outcome is entertaining and a joy to read.

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  7. Wow beautifully done, really like how you played with the first bit and then hit it home with the second one.

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  8. Heaven ... so glad that you joined Real Toads. These two Cameos are wonderful. They are filled with gentleness and work well.

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  9. Even with such rules in your poetry, it seems like it just flowed out. Well written!

    Erick Flores

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  10. Wonderful use of words!
    Loved this, Heaven.

    Margie :)

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  11. I've done that on the beach...but you find sand in the strangest places for days afterward!

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  12. I can feel the longing and desire in this ~ it made my mind wander to memories ~ beautifully written

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  13. Phhewwwww hot hot hot! Very Nice!

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  14. Hot and sassy, yet oh so classy! You write of intimacy with such a poised pen. (One that allows me to control my blush!lol) Love the imagery woven through, and the form (a new one for me) is certainly intriguing!

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  15. Love the lines here, lovely!

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  16. A very sensual use of the form, very well done!

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  17. Oh these are beautiful, Heaven. I agree about the sensuality - the word AND the pictures. Lovely.

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  18. interesting. i've never heard of cameo form before. thanks!

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  19. Amazing images, both words and photo. You know how to write intimacy with such beauty and figurative speech.

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  20. So nice the way words and landscape parallel each other. K.

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  21. Very clever cameos. The image is quite amazing, too.

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  22. love the salty spray our lips...hmmmm...can feel it.. the pic is very cool too..kissed by nature..

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  23. This was a very well executed poem :) I loved it :)

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  24. Lovely, sensual poem.

    I've never heard of this form....lovely, though.

    Lady Nyo

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  25. Well! my first reading of a 'cameo' …just Heavenly.
    I like the concretism of the lines….love in the concrete.
    great job!

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  26. You've mastered the cameo form beautifully!

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  27. Oh my gosh, that first section is amazing! This is my favorite:

    "bear me down gently
    sea bed alight with copper sand"

    And that image is breathtaking.

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  28. Lovely. Wonderfully sensuous. Interesting form that seems to serve this one in its symmetry. Enjoyed this!

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  29. The image got me ... and the first line and the last made it beautiful.. thanks I enjoyed it so much...


    Shashi
    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/12/whispers-buddha-song.html
    At Twitter @VerseEveryDay

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  30. Excellent tension/contrast here. Filled with images. I admire the way you've packed this into the form. Excellent poetry. By the way, thanks for the recommendation to the other site. I saw it too late to qualify for this week, I believe.

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  31. Nice to see this kinda writting from you..enjoyed it.

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  32. the words, the image, they form super hot and magical imagery.

    another excellent poetry on lust and nature.

    smiles.

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  33. your writing is brilliantly vivid.

    nicely done heaven! *kisses*

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