Monday 17 October 2011

Soundless

tears fall
soundless sorrow
boundless despair bearing
wrinkled face; on firm arms of son,

he cries

pleading
his heart away
if only she breathes free; 
he couldn't stand thought of being 


alone


~0~0~0~

she prayed 
soundless words, pleas
forgiveness for her, him
face of devotion, she submits

God's will  
  



Poetry form:   Cinquain - 5 lines of 2,4,6,8,2 syllables.  
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This post came from my visiting my family last week.  The first part is seeing my dad, a proud man, crying upon learning of my mom's grave condition.   The second part is witnessing my mom, praying before her procedure.  She is better now though she is still in the hospital.    

picture credit:   http://vi.sualize.us/beuchampniven/sadness/?sort=title_asc

40 comments:

  1. Or Nature's. Always enjoyable to come and see what you've created, Heaven.

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  2. it's been awhile since i've had
    a chance to read you.

    wow. still colored impressed.

    xo

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  3. Beautiful words. Very touching!

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  4. And I pray that your mother will recover well.

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  5. very well written. hugs, prayers and good thoughts sent your way.

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  6. sorry heaven. health issues can bring the strongest to their knees and it is hard to see. i hope continued improvement for your mother...i am glad you got to go see them...

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  7. No matter how strong health issues can affect us all, great piece and hope all continues to get better.

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  8. Heaven, my heart goes out to you. I have been in your shoes...I pray that things improve and get better. Beautiful poem.

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  9. I am sorry dear friend, health issues can bring the strongest person to their knees....sending prayers and hugs :)

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  10. You use the form so well to take us into the angst of the moment. I think when we write from a real experience, it has so much more feeling.

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  11. This gave me a cold shiver down my spine.. You have made the form your own in a big way, and the words expressed here carry the poem deep into my heart.

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  12. Young Lady....
    You have been missed on Fridays!!
    Well wishes for your Mom....G

    Loved your poem!

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  13. Life never taught us ho to face life itself... in moments when all strength seems to disappear, still we can deal with it
    hope all gets well soon

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  14. I pray your mom can make a good recovery but, nothing hurts so much a losing someone we dearly love.
    Very heartfelt, eloquent, emotional words. Beautiful, for all their sadness.

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  15. Heaven, every stanza stands strong alone- the second one in particular, in that particular case alone resonates strong. and put together the dangling lines make their own poem- He Cries/alone/God's will. And sometimes this is so true. Great read, liked it a lot. Thanks

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  16. already here so just swinging through to say hi...hope you settle back in soon after your trip...have a lovely OLN

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  17. such a heartfelt write dear heaven ~ read the ither comments I am so sorry you are having such a hard time ~ warming thoughts and love
    Lib x

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  18. ugh, there is nothing harder than watching your father cry. It is a difficult thing to watch your parents go through difficult times. Prayers for your mother to continue healing. Thanks for sharing such private times with us. Beautifully and powerfully written.

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  19. Fantastic read as ever !!
    expressions r lovely

    PS: visiting after a long time.. hope u doin fine

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  20. This is evocative and moving, portraying one of those moments that however painful, seem to me to deepen our compassion and hence infect our writing in good ways...xxxj

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  21. glad to hear your mom is better, not easy to see them in hospital - esp. the first part about your dad is very moving...wishing both of them all the best and lots of strength

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  22. so tender - I am glad your mom is recovering. God bless them both and you, too.

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  23. Your poetry is so beautiful, and I can always relate to your words, as if I wrote the poem myself. Thanks so much for sharing your beautiful talent. :)

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  24. My heart goes out to all of you, and let me add my best wishes for your mother's recovery. In this poem I am especially touched by your father's tears. I'm sure he would gladly trade places with his partner.

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  25. A strong trology of images in these cinquains. Best wishes for your family, Heaven.

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  26. Best wishes for you and your family, a speedy recovery for your mom.

    Very strong emotions conveyed through words and form in this poem.

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  27. Thoughts and best wishes for you and your family; it can't be an easy time.

    You have a very powerful voice, I'm glad I found your blog.

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  28. Heartfelt.

    My thoughts and prayers with you and your family.

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  29. For myself, I don't like writing to "forms", but your responses here are very interesting.

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  30. A strong and thoughtful group of poems....Hope your mother is better now.

    Hugs,

    Lady Nyo

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  31. I am so happy your Mom is better now and I really feel for you. My Mom just had surgery this week and I know how hard it is when they are sick my Dad is not doing so well but seem to be improving I wish the best for your Mom and a speedy recovery and all is well
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/18/farewell-my-three-legged-friend/

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  32. those words were self explanatory. u didnt have to tell they were heartfelt.

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  33. Beautifully written heartbreaking words.

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  34. ..pleasingly dark but always has a touch of hope and faith my friend... i think that’s an inherent characteristic of your writing... enjoyed it!(:

    Brightest blessings!

    ~Kelvin

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  35. This one - heart wrenching. Both for the one crying and the one watching him cry. And me.

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  36. This is truly heartbreaking.. My prayers are still with you Heaven.....

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  37. Oh hell yes....wow. The sadness and desperation, then the silence and loneliness...then the acceptance, hopefully. What a heartbreaker.

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