i heard your sharp
saw your eyes misty,
soft lips quivering,
racing heart against mine
tell me what is
on your mind ?
you are stepping
on my foot.
Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - Poetics hosted by Claudia. Prompt is call and response.
This is based on an actual conversation.... reality check, okay.
and Sunday 160 - write a post in exactly 160 characters.
Shared with Poets United- The Poetry Pantry.
Picture credit: http://sweetsurrender68.tumblr.com/post/8973497324
lol didn't expect that Heaven ~ Ouch ~ 'hops' 'you're standing on my foot' ~ had a real moment there too :)) ~ReplyDelete
haha - good one heaven..did you wear heels..? smilesReplyDelete
hot, you are very good at this.ReplyDelete
haha....fun ending heaven...thought it might have been a leg cramp...smiles.ReplyDelete
hahaha loved the ending, such a fun spinReplyDelete
I laughed out loud. That was funny.ReplyDelete
I love this kind of humor.Thanks for making it a part of the Sunday 160.ReplyDelete
Ha funny piece.ReplyDelete
so sensuous coming in, then 'bam' the twist at the end.
slap stick poetry, and I like the shock.
i love these ASSumption poems, when someone is assuming one thing and it's ....ReplyDelete
Haha! You got us all with the image & the ending!
Nice one, Heaven!
Thanks for sharing & visiting.
The Beautiful Winds Of India
LOL! I loved your surprise punchline!ReplyDelete
You got me :) I didn't expect it...nice :)ReplyDelete
Like the touch with the misty eyes.ReplyDelete
Ohh yeah!!! Lovely, with that end twist! :)ReplyDelete
Highly original and creative idea of someone treading on someone else's feet, although somehow strangely familiar.Where do you get your inspiration?ReplyDelete
yes ...your poems moveReplyDelete
Ha ha! Oh, what a wicked undercut.ReplyDelete