she is
dreaming
of his face drawn
silver and shadow, turning
towards her by the window-
at last, the mystery will be revealed
holding her breath, she imagines a
cold mask of death, when at last
the moon's gaze is complete
she is awed by his soulful
eyes, color of sadness
equal to her
own
Posted for D'verse Poets Pub and Flash Fiction Friday for the G-man- 55 Words
Picture credit: Elena Kalis
awed by his soulful eyes...there's a nice magic and mystery in this.. the mask of death sent a little shiver down my spine....beautifully penned grace
ReplyDeletewow.. I love shape-poetry.. and that moon, I saw across the roofs yesterday.... Love it, as smooth as butter.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your poem (and its shape), which so well accompanied the picture. Love 'color of sadness equal to her own.'
ReplyDeleteMagical, entrancing.
ReplyDeletebeautiful words, wonderful imagery, 'silver and shadow'
ReplyDeletelove the shape as well~
Magical, mystical... lovely write. Somehow, you reminded me of a cinquain I wrote yesterday of the beauty of sadness.
ReplyDeleteThis is a study in silvered paper photographed in black and white. The effect is magnetic and eerie.
ReplyDeleteWow, not only did you rock the pub with the nature of your 55, soulful & sad & so very blue, you came up with a delicious geometric shape for it; reminiscent of the Form For All challenge recently at dVerse. Very impressive; thanks.
ReplyDeleteKind of...in love with this.so much mystery and affection left in the reader's mind.
ReplyDeleteyou know...it is often our trials and our sadness that can bring us together...i like how you made it the color of his eyes....very nice grace....
ReplyDeleteI saw that blue moon the other night--amazing in our part of Texas. The moon & love forever linked....
ReplyDeleteThe eyes get me every time.
ReplyDeleteCountless moments in my life--holding my breath. until a certain mystery is revealed. Image that the final one would be the mystery of death...which could be REAL LIFE, at last.
ReplyDeleteGrace, this had special meaning for me.
Thank you Steve ~
Deletehopefully helping each along the way
ReplyDeleteDitto to what Steve said...and soulful eyes...perceptive as usual, Grace..
ReplyDeleteNice balance of magic and mystery!
ReplyDeleteThe color of sadness - ah- this is wonderful!
ReplyDeletebeautiful words, beautiful shape, and these last nights the moon has haunted here
ReplyDeletesilver and shadow .... like moon and the night...
ReplyDeleteMisery loves company, seems to be the way to bring many together
ReplyDeleteAt least they can come together in their sadness...the eyes always show through the mask. Nice
ReplyDeleteI was so surprised to see this photo as I am following this photographer on Instagram... I rarely follower people I don't know on Instagram .... my circle there is very small. But then I remembered.. we probably both were introduced to her through Tess's Magpie Tales :) Nighttime is considered by many to be "scary" and I think the full moon gets a bum rap! I love it on my evening walks with the dogs.
ReplyDeleteHi Margaret ~ Yes, I discovered her through Tess's Magpie last Sunday ~ Thanks for the visit ~
DeleteEverything moon shaped: the verse, the theme - marvelous :)
ReplyDeleteVery well done--sometimes moon-gazing brings out the sadness. Lovely words and form.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful magic. The shape just adds to the magic. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteGrace...
ReplyDeleteIt's always a thrill to see that you have honoured
the Funfest once again. Always a masterpiece.
This took away my breath with it's morose perfection.
Loved your Lunar 55.
Thanks for your usual brilliance, Have a Kick Ass Week-End
Lovely and soulful capture of the moon, which has certainly been inspiring the past few nights! The centering of the words works well for this piece.
ReplyDeleteJust so beautiful and haunting... a diamond for sure
ReplyDeletethe moon so understands our sadness
ReplyDeletebeautiful poem, perfect shape to contain it
she imagines a
ReplyDeletecold mask of death, when at last
the moon's gaze is complete
What inspired you to write this incredible poem?
This poem is powerful and stunning! :)
I wanted to write about the full moon outside my window ~ Thanks for the visit ~
DeleteMelancholy perfection in word and form - really there's nothing more I can say.
ReplyDeleteWow...this was amazing! The tension of the emotion and the shape worked perfectly together.
ReplyDeleteLife and soul exists where we least expect it! ANd the moon, could it truly be the mirror, te biggest of them all?
ReplyDeleteyou have mirrored the grief here so well. Nothing else soothes than the moon hoping for some light there perhaps!
ReplyDeleteSo delicate and beautiful and sad. Loved it, Heaven.
ReplyDeleteI liked the emotional links between
ReplyDeletethe characters...soulful indeed.
...Grace, both your words & the photo are elegant in so many ways... and yet so sad... i loved your title here... there's really something about the moon & the night & the stars that always bring sadness.... mesmerizing write... smiles...
ReplyDeleteBeautifully penned, Grace. The last line is fantastic!
ReplyDeletephew - this took my breath away! Lovely write.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful, poignan, perfect.
ReplyDeleteBeauty, as they say, is in the eye of the one beholding no matter the color of depth of sadness. This falls into the spectrum, Grace. Thank you for this!
ReplyDeleteEnthralled with your writing!
ReplyDeletegI so much enjoy your writing Grace. This one is full of yearning, a sad love but beautiful. Kepp doing what you're doing. You excel.
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful, dramatic piece!
ReplyDeleteNice play with colors, light, form...read couple times :)
ReplyDeleteThe photo with the lovely writing is just such a perfect combination, adore this.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful! I love how you coupled the 55 word limit with shape poetry. :) Peace, Linda
ReplyDeleteThis is like a myth or old ballad--lots of them where the lover's face is obscured..but of course, she has to see...this is very tranquil though, full of serenity.
ReplyDeletenice imagery & I love the format
ReplyDeleteI echo everyones comments - loved the shape and poem - and such a great title! K
ReplyDeleteThere is mystery and suspense in this piece, Grace. I h ope there is a happy ending for them. :-) And yes, I admire the shape of your poem.
ReplyDeleteGreat poem with a great shape. I loved his eyes having the color of sadness equal to her own.
ReplyDeletebeautiful. I like the way you've shaped it and kept it moving with a hook
ReplyDeleteI have no words. You took my breath away with this one! Well done!!
ReplyDeleteI hope you had a beautiful weekend!!