Sunday 23 October 2011

Until now

i walk along in my faded sweatpants 
slender trees along the river framing 

clear water rushing downstream
beside the long abandoned farm mill

a blanket of solitude, thick and blue
wrapped my cold shoulders this morning

i thought i heard your footsteps
follow my trail towards the thick forest

glades we love to get lost and camped, 
just the two of us, don't you remember?

but no, it was just the hoot of birds
and swish tail of the frightened deer

your footprints were long covered
by mulch of shrivelled maple leaves, 

fallen apples pecked by black crows,  
mud of travellers searching for solace,

answers among the whispering winds,
wild flowers, black bats kneeling in prayer  

still, i take these early morning walks
autumn has arrived, but until now,  

i don't understand why you left 

without saying 

goodbye 



Posted for The Gooseberry Garden:   Poetry Picnic Week 10: Nature, Forest, Rivers, and Mountains

Shared with Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - OpenLinkNight Monday


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29 comments:

  1. left without saying goodbye,

    sad, well put.
    the way you send your message is beautiful.

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  2. a trail of love and loss,
    beautiful forests imagery,

    brilliant entry.
    ;)

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  3. This hit a nerve. I've been there.

    Beautifully written piece.

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  4. a blanket of solitude, thick and blue
    wrapped my cold shoulders this morning

    love this part

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  5. Really upped the visuals on this one. Sad too, as many have been there.

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  6. The best one I've seen from you so far!

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  7. Beautiful write. Sad and touching.

    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/10/23/the-wolf-and-the-rose/

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  8. So sad, but you have brought the sounds of nature and feelings of the broken-hearted to life in this poem.

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  9. this is a rather haunting season...and for someone to leave without saying goodbye would certainly be a haunting memory as well...nicely done heaven...

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  10. I think Autumn compells us to reflect, I'm not sure why.

    I can relate to this, very much. Well written, lots of genuine feeling.

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  11. Hello.
    A sad & compelling piece.
    "a blanket of solitude, thick and blue
    wrapped my cold shoulders this morning"...love how you express this.

    Nicely done!

    Thanks for sharing & for your visit/comment. I appreciate them.

    The Quiet Winds Of The Night

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  12. Nostalgic and beautiful...

    I can so relate to this right now!

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  13. Poignant poem - you have a beautifully light touch

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  14. This is sweet and sad - and I wonder if it can be understood, why someone would leave without saying goodbye... not by the one left behind anyway.

    Love this:

    a blanket of solitude, thick and blue
    wrapped my cold shoulders this morning

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  15. You have captured the melancholy of season's change, beautiful evocative writing.

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  16. Oh this is so touching and beautiful. Poignant, especially the final lines. I could see the forest clearly - your line "black bats kneeling in prayer" is stunning.......lovely writing.

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  17. I love these two lines:

    slender trees along the river framing
    clear water rushing downstream


    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  18. Leaving without saying goodbye is one of the worst ways to leave someone.

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  19. "black bats kneeling in prayer"

    wow!

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  20. Fascinating and poignant write. Heartbreaking.

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  21. So lovely Haven : ))
    ...black bats kneeling in prayer...blanket of solitude...my favourite words, but all wonderful.

    This prompt has inspired you in a gorgeous way...

    Beautifully done!
    -Sista Eva : )
    P.S. Sorry I have been MIA! But, have read and loved each of your poems through email feed ; )

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  22. so sad and yet so lovely...how you connected such feelings to the season...

    http://preciousnotesmundanethoughts.blogspot.com/

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  23. This is so very sad. I felt like I walked what is in the beginning a lovely walk through a forest, promising interesting wild life and scenic camping grounds, down to a lonely path that is too quiet and dark suddenly.

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  24. Your last lines are so simple and so powerful... left that idyllic paradise without saying goodbye? ouch...

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  25. love your writing, Heaven! unfortunately, i had that happen once and it is devastating not to have at least the closure of a goodbye.

    dani ♥ {formerly haiku love songs}

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  26. Sad and beautiful~ Your imagery had me wanting to visit the path, till I saw the sorrow~

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  27. lovely write, so very sad, not scary; heart-felt and a little depressing.

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