Thursday, 1 November 2012
The ghost of you
not a leaf nor limb
swayed in breeze
I heard you breathing at the window
mug beside empty chair
and upturned book
At first the goodbye had a lilt to it—
maybe just a couple of months—
but it was a beheading
-sword slow motion-
Lines from Ghost Elephant by Jean Valentine
Posted for: Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - Hallow's Edge
and Poetry Jam: Choices
and Flash Fiction Friday - a post in 55 words - for the G-man
picture credit: here
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Wow this is insanely awesome Heaven. I love the sadness tinged with love that eventually fades as time goes by, it's such a beautiful piece of writing, the concept of being haunted by the ghost of a lover is an amazing one even if you look at the ghost as being symbolic, reading this has made my morning Heaven, all I can say is wow!ReplyDelete
Thank you for the lovely words and visit Matthew ~Delete
Haunting... sad...beautiful. Wanting a quick death in separation but instead, suffering the agony of broken lover's heartache.ReplyDelete
Good stuff Heaven.
Thank you Bren ~ Have a good week ~Delete
powerfully dark! i absolutely love the words you've chosen to depict this wonderfully haunting moment. nice. very!
I love the picture too ~ Thank you ~Delete
oy yeah, give it to me quick rather than slow....dont leave a bit of hope to haunt me....very nice grace, evocative....ReplyDelete
You always get what I'm trying to say Brian ~ Thank you for the support and encouragement ~Delete
written with last breath... or so it seems...ReplyDelete
Not yet Dez ~ Thanks for the visit and treats at your show ~Delete
Your quoted words fit seamlessly into the finished product - another wowzer from you, Heaven.ReplyDelete
Thank you Kerry ~Delete
Sweetly cruel-what a great mix.ReplyDelete
Thank you Anne ~Delete
Ooooooo, this oozes 'haunt.'ReplyDelete
The picture does the trick too ~ Thanks Helen ~Delete
But in a good way
The transition from ghost to lover gone was like the window opening.
I used ghost as a metaphor rather than an actual one ~ Thanks for the visit Rick ~Delete
Intense mood, perfectly portrayed. Great writing, kiddo.ReplyDelete
Thanks Sherry ~ Your real life ghost story was chilling too ~Delete
Love that forever haunts the memory and the heart. Thank you, Heaven.ReplyDelete
A haunting and captivating write Heaven! :-)ReplyDelete
lopped right off! good one :)ReplyDelete
Text as swirling as the ghostly veil.ReplyDelete
Wow this is very intense and haunting to me. Excellent picture to go with it as well. Really sets a mood.ReplyDelete
Oh my. We really don't want that to be slow.ReplyDelete
This had such a Poe-ish feel to it Grace.ReplyDelete
Great post for the season.
The prodigal daughter has returned!
Loved your decapitaing 55
Thanks for playing, you are always a Classy Treat.
Have a Kick Ass Week-End
"Scary" good :-)ReplyDelete
Spooky good, indeed! Like the image too.ReplyDelete
Whew, a bit eerie....but then again it was just Halloween!! Thanks for taking part in Poetry Jam.ReplyDelete
Haunting and sad are the worst goodbyes.ReplyDelete
Dark and haunting~ It had a breathless feel...the photo added so much~ReplyDelete
Yikes! Very creepy one (in a good way).ReplyDelete
hauntingly beautiful! that numb feeling only makes one think of ending his/her life ad soon, quickly!ReplyDelete
weekend hugs xoxo
There are nights when the wolves are silent and only the moon howls.ReplyDelete
As spirits roam the neighborhoods at night,
Let loose upon the Earth till it be light...
Have a great weekend, stay warm and keep a song in your heart.
i can think of a time or two when i felt like a quick death would be better than what i was actually facing. great poem, Heaven!ReplyDelete
thanks for participating at Poetry Jam!
Wow nice piece! Up turned or overturned book ?-I viewed it splayedReplyDelete
over the the arm- and then had to stop and think...
Very dark and spooky atmosphere in this!ReplyDelete
Sometimes the slow endings are the most painful. Nice dual meanings here!ReplyDelete
Great take on the picture prompt. You wrote some stuff out of Criminal Minds and you truly rock this!! Great stuff, Heaven. Mine is hereReplyDelete
Have you a TRULY BLESSED WEEK!!!
Wow. A bit late I am, but this still sends chills. Yes, sometimes a quick ending is best. Awesome write.ReplyDelete