Friday 17 August 2012

Dreaming


Photo by Chapala Dmitry

                   she sees

                   dragon-sun rising from the west,  
                   silk-clouds gliding towards earth 

                   time moving backwards,
                   spider webs undulating to sky    

                   youth: wiser and prudent 
                   aged: carefree, daring

                   caught in a dream, 
                   tangled, she took her pills and went back to bed 

                   her nightmares were more bearable
                   than the reality bearing down on her,

                   harsh and unforgiving 


Posted for:   Poets United:   Dream Catcher - Playing with the ideas of dreams/nightmare.
and Flash Fiction Friday -  A story in 55 words for the G-man.  Sorry, I am late.   I was so tired playing lawn garden bowling in the hot (Thursday) afternoon, sponsored by my company.   It was so much fun though ~   

Picture credit:    here 

39 comments:

  1. A rather serious and frightening aspect, when nightmares are more bearable than reality. Very much like how you painted the sun and sky with those words in the first couple of lines. There's an interesting progression of fiery colors to gentle, to something rather dark. Very interesting. :)

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  2. harsh and unforgiving...i know a few of those people...but then we are talking about days and life, reality vs nightmare....yep if the nightmare is better than life cant imagine it being much worth it...

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    1. Thanks for the visit and support Brian ~ I appreciate it ~

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  3. When dreams are less scary than real life so that you want to stay asleep, that i a true wake up call to try to do something to change our lives. Powerful yet also gentle imagery in this Grace.

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    1. I like that...to try to change our reality ~ Thanks Bren ~

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  4. I like the way you switched reality for young and old. Wise and prudent as a youth would take time travel for me. Carefree would take a miracle for me now, but daring that I can do.

    And sometimes the stuff of dreams becomes the stuff of reality and there's no waking up from it and there's no where to hide. Neither dreaming nor waking will do.

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    1. How I wish that the older folks are more daring..but its my dream.

      To be caught between dreaming and waking is a nightmare.

      Thanks for the visit Anne ~ I appreciate it ~

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  5. Not a lawn-bowling poem! Reality is pretty harsh and can't really be woken up from! Well-depicted. k.

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    1. I need another post for the lawn bowling game, so much fun ~

      You got it K ~ Thanks for the visit ~

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  6. Caught in such a place would really suck, I'll take the nightmare, at least I can wake up from that.

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    1. You would...okay Pat ~ Have a good day ~

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  7. Grace...
    You are always so unique with your imagry.
    Thats part of what makes you such a special talent.
    Loved your Hypnagogic 55
    Thanks for playing, thanks for your FANTASTIC support, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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    1. Thanks for the lovely compliments G-man ~

      Have a great weekend too ~

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  8. Very strong imagery, great piece.

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  9. quite strong from your usual free flow style...

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    1. Thanks Ashok ~ Have to say it in 55 words, that is why ~

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  10. oh, the first stanza is so opulent and luxurious in imagery!

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  11. Whew, this is really intense. I do think it is true that some people's lives ARE worse than the stuff of nightmares. Your poem expressed this so well.

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    1. Thank you for the lovely words Mary ~ I believe some people's lives are a living nightmare ~

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  12. Whoa! To have to choose between nightmares and reality can be a bitch. I loved tho, how the aged and young swapped characteristics. I think you're on to something.
    Lovely as always, grace

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    1. Well in our lawn garden bowling, the volunteers were in their 70s and 80's and quite lively in their mentoring. I think as we grow older we should be more bolder and daring.

      Thanks for the visit Rick ~

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  13. "caught in a dream,
    tangled, she took her pills and went back to bed"

    Okay, so I agree that it is not good to stay asleep, but the ability to choose to continue with a dream instead of waking--maybe on a Saturday morning--could be a god thing, right? "tangled" seems to make it feel negative, as does the reflection at the end. But this is not the ordinary dream! When she wakes, she can look forward to growing into a youthful freedom. Unless of course this line is to mean she took too many pills?

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    1. A youthful freedom is a nice interpretation ~ Thanks for the visit and lively comments Susan ~

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  14. Dream away and be happy with the array of dreams hoping more of the good ones. It's a respite than facing the current nightmares. But just initially though for they need to be met head-on later!

    Hank

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    1. I agree Hank ~ Can't escape the reality ~ Thanks for the visit~

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  15. My first thought was Marilyn. There's a lady whose reality seemed to be too harsh and unforgiving.

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    1. She is a good example, a tragic beauty ~ Thanks Patti ~

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  16. Thanks for stopping by my "dreamcatcher" post.

    I enjoyed the surreal quality you captured of living and dreaming.

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  17. Whoa, the girl in the photo is seriously emaciated! But I enjoyed your poem!!!! Some glorious images.......I was prudent in youth, more carefree in age. Age brings a certain freedom.

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  18. I enjoy escaping into my dreams sometimes...gives me a chance not to be me for awhile...but I'm not so sure I'd be willing to return to a nightmare world--though it often feels like that's what I live in normally.

    beautiful imagery. "dragon-sun" and "silk clouds" I think I'd prefer to find my way back into the nightmare if there's a dragon waiting for me when I wake; especially when there are such soft clouds to lay my head down in.

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  19. This is dark, but I enjoyed the detour! Sometimes my nightmares are still with me during the day! I too love your guided imagery!
    There is beauty in the pain~

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  20. Sad but true, Heaven, sometimes for some people, dreams are better than reality - you captured it beautifully. Thank you!

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  21. Wow, such a lilting beginning then back to harsh reality, and that is how it is sometimes--nice take on the prompt!

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  22. "her nightmares were more bearable
    than the reality bearing down on her,
    harsh and unforgiving"

    VERY powerful ending! wonderful take on the prompt, Heaven!

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