of verses, words
my fingers search their angles, edges, curves
black kohl eyes close, imagining your touch
unsieved grape juice,
burst of spring
torching pen, I listen to your breathing
Posted for Imaginary Garden with Real Toads
Poetry form: Tetractys, a poetic form invented by Ray Stebbing, consists of at least 5 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 10 syllables (total of 20). Tetractys can be written with more than one verse, but must follow suit with an inverted syllable count. For Triple Tetractys: the pattern is: 1, 2, 3, 4, 10, 10, 4, 3, 2, 1, 1, 2, 3, 4, 10.
It's a long weekend here in Canada. Thanks for your visits and smiles.
Beautifully written! Especially love that first stanza :)ReplyDelete
Thanks Mary. It's a challenge to write these days though ~Delete
i really like the initmacy in the second...the eyes, wine, heady drop....and the listening to the breathing in the end as well...i like laying and listening like that...ReplyDelete
Thanks for your lovely words Brian. I appreciate them ~Delete
Oh this is beautifully done, Grace. No surprise that you would rise to the challenge of a short form.ReplyDelete
Thanks Kerry for your encouragement. The form wasn't so difficult, I must admit. Just perfect for weekend writing.Delete
This is beautiful, Heaven. I love "veil covers face, empty of verses". You are so talented.ReplyDelete
Thanks Elsie, I enjoy writing them ~Delete
i've been daring to pen some poetry...ReplyDelete
but too afraid to expose them.
especially when you do it so well!
I think you should try it. I am a beginner myself but these forms look so fun and challenging ~Delete
Thanks Lisa ~
Brave girl, and you did it splendidly!!!!!ReplyDelete
Thanks Sherry ~ Your posts are wonderful to me too ~Delete
those first few words really pulled me in, wonderful verse,ReplyDelete
ours is a rainy long weekend, hope the sun comes out soon
Thanks for the visit Christine. We are lucky to have warm spring days ~Delete
These are great...flows so smoothly from one stanza to the next.ReplyDelete
I love this part:
Nice writing, Heaven!!
You took a difficult form and ACED it!ReplyDelete
I really like this. The first stanza is especially beautiful.ReplyDelete
You present some lovely images here, Heaven--I especially like the first and second stanzas--very vivid. Enjoy your long weekend!ReplyDelete
...touching, watching, listening to a lover as he (or she) sleeps. Wonderful!ReplyDelete
Lovely, lovely, lovely~!ReplyDelete
So much wonderful imagery in this one. Lovely.ReplyDelete
Wow, Grace... this is amazing! I especially like the second verse!ReplyDelete
Wow! Very cool!ReplyDelete
I love the opening:ReplyDelete
I'm so glad you wrote the extended version; it's so visually appealing, as well as beautifully written.
I smell Adam Lambert in these verses.... must be the black kohl :)ReplyDelete
I love this! I see visually grapes growing, red cherry lips, and roses.ReplyDelete
All heady and beautiful all looking for passion's promise!
Wonderful to read and so intimate~
Blazing for sure...you took on the long form of the form, kudos to manning up for that one. Great writing.ReplyDelete
nice one indeed...thanks for sharingReplyDelete
Beautifully done. I never think of using a photo to prompt myself when learning a new form. You've done it so well, a lovely poem following a lovely photo.ReplyDelete
Great photo and wow that poem packs a punch! Very good...ReplyDelete
wonderful, Heaven!!! that first stanza is stunning!ReplyDelete
Such a powerful and effective use of the form. Wow, scorching hot.ReplyDelete