handwritten letters
pressed closely against pale cheeks
warming lonely nights
warming lonely nights
~0~0~
she inhales his words
written amidst dry soil,
each word a heated kiss
~0~0~
written amidst dry soil,
each word a heated kiss
~0~0~
letter in mailbox
creased with blood-stained fingerprints
cold as a coffin
creased with blood-stained fingerprints
cold as a coffin
Author's Note: I wrote a series of haiku poems for D'Verse Poets Pub - OpenLinkNight. Share your poems (any form) starting 3pm EST (every Tuesday).
Also for Haiku Heights, the prompt is Write. For those who are interested in haiku poems, there is a 30-day challenge in Haiku Heights beginning Sept. 1, 2011.
Picture credit: http://whenpicturesspeak.tumblr.com/post/4490380170
Some great ones once more, really getting better and better with each one. I liked the second the best.
ReplyDeletehaha WV is cating..hmmm
Thanks Pat~
ReplyDeleteWhat do you mean by WV is cating ??
these are brilliant, each stands alone, but also weaved together tell a story...wonderful :)
ReplyDeletesecond one is my fav...its got great textures...the third right behind it with the blood fingerprint creases...these are def evocative heaven...nicely done...
ReplyDeletevery nice haiku, Heaven.
ReplyDeleteTouching, poignant and evocative.
I like them all, but the third is a killer...chills!
Lady Nyo
Wonderfully weaved together.
ReplyDeleteJust beautiful... the three of them.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful!
ReplyDeleteletters can create such different emotions...warm, cold, comforting, disturbing...you captured some of those very nicely with the haikus
ReplyDeleteSighhhhhhh....
ReplyDeleteshe inhales his words written amidst dry soil each word a heated kiss
!Lovely!
Awww to be forsaken in love... so sad. Your Haiku are beautiful.
ReplyDeleteI think I have been in that coffin a time or two.
ReplyDeleteLovely series of haiku, was taken with the final series. Well penned ~ Rose
ReplyDeleteOooo this was tasty!
ReplyDeleteHand-written letters being near and dear to my cheeks and heart. And the last haiku, chillingly brief and powerful.
Heavenly haiku trilogy. I saw--in the completed three--a soldier in a foxhole, writing his final words to...her. I'm sure that's not intended, but maybe I'm in a sad mood tonight.
ReplyDeleteLovely write.
PEACE!
The first my favorite... true love can wait.
ReplyDeleteSad and beautiful. Letters, being tangible, hold something of the person who wrote them. Wonderful how you express this.
ReplyDeletei like the first, and i like them as a story, though i'm uncertain of the end.
ReplyDeleteheated kiss is especially nice.
Alone, they all wonderfully stand, but together, a story is weaved (at least in my ever active imagination)
ReplyDeleteI love Haiku, I write them all the time, well used to anyhow, in journals and most recently on Twitter. This is wonderful a triple haiku. Brilliantly done.
ReplyDeleteOhhh! Sad ending.
ReplyDeleteI love your ending: "creased with blood-stained fingerprints
ReplyDeletecold as a coffin" ... You are an excellent poet. ~safehousepoetry.wordpress.com
Very well done. I enjoy reading your work.
ReplyDeleteThese are really amazing. Especially like the picture painted in the second one. Together the three paint quite a picture of one that's fighting far from home, and one that's left behind. Very nicely done.
ReplyDeleteNice chain. Haiku is a difficult form. You've made it your own.
ReplyDeleteBeth
All three are lovely ~ ♥ ஆ ~
ReplyDeleteLovely and tender, such emotions coming through in those words. The last one is a bit of a shocking turn though. Brilliant writing. :)
ReplyDeleteshe inhales his words...
ReplyDeleteput me right there, so simple, yet so passionate.
A great trio, well interwoven. I love the shock of the final haiku. Sent chills down my vertebrae!
ReplyDeleteI love it, especially the last stanza. I did not expect it.
ReplyDeletehave only one thing to say... WOW
ReplyDeleteI love the first one best — so romantic.
ReplyDeleteI don't know if they were meant to go together, but they almost could. If I were choosing a favorite, it would be the first, but they are all wonderful :)
ReplyDeletethank you for visiting. and for your comment, and your input.
ReplyDeletei did feel a little better after writing 'for you' as i kind of really needed to get that out.
i usually dont use apostrophes on the internet; its just easier for me to type without them. i do apostrophize "i'll" though, if the context suggests that it might be "ill"
A loved one with yearnings for but could have been a victim of tragedy. Very moving and very beautiful haikus
ReplyDeleteHank
The first two reminded me of the time I eagerly awaited my husband's letter's from Japan. Thank you, you captured the feelings well.
ReplyDeleteI so love reading the little polished gems, these carefully folded paper birds, that you write. They're something I carry around in the pocket of my heart for a week.
ReplyDeleteWe read these poems,
letters to a world unseen --
So close to Heaven
Each one condensed to essence, yet nothing held back. Excellent Haikus!
ReplyDeletewow heated, and then stone cold this was a poetic experience!
ReplyDeleteoh my, letters from the dead - freaky! I may not sleep well tonight :)
ReplyDeleteStirring.
ReplyDeleteQuite good, each on their own.
Very good.
-H
P.S. Makes me think of a loved one off at war
My favorite subject, reminds me of my parents. I enjoyed your haiku.
ReplyDeleteDear Heaven, your haiku are written so lovely and well worded. The romance in the first one was easily noticeable too :) loved it. But its a day to day challenge. You've already posted two days in advance :(
ReplyDeleteThank you everyone for your wonderful comments. I appreciate it.
ReplyDeleteOh, I understood that. Was just telling thats all :) a day in advance is ok though.
ReplyDeletelovely images. each haiku can stand alone but when combined, it tells of a heartbreaking story.
ReplyDeletebrilliant effort!
Whew... Read this haiku several times. Your lines tellba story - each one and together braided into a tragic end of a most beautiful romance...
ReplyDelete"creased with blood-stained fingerprints"- hurts to the bone to read this line...
Thank you... once again... Deb
letters are very powerful indeed, it was the way my husband and I courted then were engaged after only meeting 3 times together, it was before the internet came, I still believe a hand written letter is more alluring than a typeface font
ReplyDeleteWow! I loved these as one poem and also enjoyed them as three separate haiku. My favourite has to be the third one - so sad.
ReplyDeleteBrilliant one...I loved all the three set of haikus :) :)
ReplyDeleteThree nice ones here.
ReplyDeletei LOVE these, Heaven!
ReplyDelete"inhales his words"
ReplyDeletelove that!
i'm just in love with your
writing heaven.
Amazing set, Heaven! One leading to the next ... chilling ending!!
ReplyDeleteSo poignant, heaven; it brought to mind letters to home from a soldier deployed overseas, especially that last verse - as though he were writing a last letter following some fatal injury. That may not be what you envisioned, but it's what I saw.
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