Tuesday, 26 July 2011

Haiku: Sunset

           

          eyes blazing, preening  
          orange hues, pink and yellow
          trampling white and blue   

          joy brimming over 
          sighing gently, pondering  
          she sits down to rest

          combing strands of dust 
          weary arms stretched out to pull  
          cool blanket to wrap 

          embraced by lover  
          whilst wind chiming lullaby 
          closed her eyes to dream


Author's Note:   Since the subject is nature, I used the haiku form.   The haiku consists of 17 syllables, made of three phrases of five, seven and five syllables. Within this format, the Haiku was generally divided also into two parts standing in contrast or reversal to each other.   The challenge of haiku is to catch the moment or an acceptance of the life’s impermanence per Shashi.


This post is for  the OpenLinkNight at D'Verse Poets.  Party starts (every) Tuesday at 3:00 pm EST- join us by linking your poem (any form).   See you~      

          

80 comments:

  1. the last verse is my fav...i can imagine the cool morning, maybe the window open and sighing as i snuggle in...smiles.

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  2. Thanks Brian *smiles*

    My original words were snuggling close to her lover, but when I was counting the syllables, it didn't fit. See you later~

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  3. Beautiful... I miss snuggling.

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  4. Oh I love that picture. Your words fit perfectly.

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  5. You caught the cool morning presence wonderfully in this one, nicely done!

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  6. Beautifully written and captured. Well done ~~ :-)

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  7. I love your sunset haiku and the picture image.

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  8. you captured me from word one....beautifully done my friend

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  9. beautiful haiku...the cool feeling just soothes the reader on through.. nice

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  10. sultry and soothing

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  11. What a cool picture to go with this soothing piece.

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  12. Lovely! Makes me hear wind chimes.

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  13. ..those are sets of a true fantastic Haikus... thanks for the treat and like the finale one...(:

    ~Kelvin S. M.

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  14. Your Haikus flow so beautifully..that can be hard to do with this form...just lovely..

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  15. nice...the third is my fav...the combing strands of dust....bkm

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  16. Is the illustration your work? It is such a perfect match for your haiku set. Beautiful work painted as well by words. Thank you, Gay

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  17. Love in dancing colors and warm feelings, a blanket of impressions sew neatly together. Liked it, Heaven.

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  18. Thank you everyone for the wonderful words.

    Beachanny: lovely image isn't it? But no, it is not mine.
    My words actually flowed out easily when I saw this image last night.

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  19. *sewn* not sew...sigh--i also forgot to mention I liked 'combing strands of dust' too.

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  20. I found this very soothing and calming. It's really a beautiful piece.

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  21. Outstanding image! Your implementation of and good use of haiku, kept me reading on to your brief explanation...the first time I really might "get it". So thank you for that--and I GOTTA try this, again.

    Is this image a fruit of your talents?

    PEACE! And thank you.

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  22. Heavens, sensuous and nostalgic where everyone can relate to. Great!

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  23. A lovely way to link haiku!

    The pix was perfect for the poem.

    very nice!

    Lady Nyo

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  24. As I read this, I felt calm wash over me. Lovely!

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  25. stunning haiku, Heaven! lovely pastel imagery ~ utter perfection for a sunset! ♥ dani

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  26. I so love good haiku such as yours! The ability to distill a moment, an idea, a memory in 17 syllables and make it stay in the mind is a blessing for the writer as well as the reader. I'd say I've been blessed. Lovely, Heaven.

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  27. Very soothing!
    So enjoyed this, Heaven!

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  28. Very nice! Makes me feel peaceful and relaxed. Excellent use of the haiku form.

    Nice to meet you as well!

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  29. A great response to the prompt. I was particularly fascinated by the form of it.

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  30. Sunsets have that way about them...the day covering up with a blanket...great images and form. Oh how I love the edges of a day.

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  31. "combing strands of dust
    weary arms stretched out to pull cool blanket to wrap"

    Paint me a picture cries the reader... which is what you did. Nice

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  32. I love the picture and haiku - a great match with your peaceful words

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  33. A wonderful quartet of images, demonstrating economy with intense feeling. Brilliant!

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  34. breath taking Haiku sets, you rock.

    Happy Rally.

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  35. There was something very calming and soothing about your words here, Heaven. Love these haiku.

    Gayle

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  36. Nice haiku triplet. I write haiku (or my version of it) almost every day, so I really appreciate these.

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  37. Lovely and peaceful. Great Haiku.


    Melanie

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  38. I particularly love the last haiku-verse. Great painting too!

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  39. This is like comfort food...I'll call it comfort poetry. Excellent!

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  40. Beautiful series of haiku, lovely to the prompt image. ~ Rose

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  41. Such a lovely flow to these that I didn't even realize I was floating along a series of haiku. Left me floating~

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  42. Sensual! A treat. I read this a couple of time and enjoyed the experience. Thank you.

    Padmavani

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  43. Enjoyed the post, loved the read... thanks for sharing. Have a nice Thusday! .Keep up the fantastic work! Visit me too. Greetings!

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  44. Just lovely - you really captures the image you used.

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  45. Heaven....?
    Look at you girl with almost 50 comments...Hehehehe
    You've come a long way in such a short time Grass Hopper.
    Loved your Haiku's

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  46. Haiku truly catching life's impermanence ! I really had to search for the Post a Comment link though. It was not easy to find it.

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  47. Calming, peaceful write.

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  48. Beautiful imagery here - thank you for a lovely read. x

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  49. love thatt one last determined choice of closing eyes to dream...

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  50. This is beautiful, and so sweet too... Thanks for the read

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  51. A collection of haiku, collected to tender delights...sweet image, heart brimming in the words.

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  52. Lovely haiku - like drifting plum blossom.

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  53. I admire masters of the haiku form, but was more intent when reading this poem with how lovely were the words and how well they went with the illustration you chose.

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  54. Beautiful poem, I like the haiku stanzas! I love the line "joy brimming over" The photo fits very well also.

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  55. I love it when haiku is strung together this way. Very beautiful!

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  56. Live the haiku format. (:

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  57. Excellent job!
    And congrats your blog is growing by leaps and bounds:)
    Im truly happy that your talent is being recognized:)

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  58. This stilled me and made me take a breath. I like it when a poem does that. Lovely haiku quartet.

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  59. Stupendous work and the image compliments it so beautifully!

    Alcina

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  60. if your poem is a painting it'll be really pretty :)
    I like the last Haiku. Sunset always gives off a feeling like that.

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  61. Agree with solitarywanders on that! I found a beautiful sunset painted on the easel of my imagination through your haiku :) Thanks!

    My Poem ~ Vicissitude of thought

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  62. Breathtaking beauty,that is what I see. :)

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  63. Sweet and calming poem. Good job! :-)

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  64. color me impressed. ;)

    i love the pictures you find for your posts.

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  65. Gorgeous picture and breathtaking haiku. An enjoyable read :)

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  66. I like it : ) It's lovely

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  67. This poem paints pictures in my mind when I read it. Lovely!

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  68. Oh wow these are vivid and beautiful =)

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  69. Loved the flow and the image choice just heightened the words!

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  70. I imagine the Sun pulling up her blanket, to snuggle in, as daylight turns to dusk...

    Nice job!

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  71. dawning darkness
    falling to land unknown
    waiting eyes
    dreaming in love

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  72. LOVE the 2nd stanza!

    http://bttrflyscar.blogspot.com/2011/08/travel-extended-haiku.html

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  73. A great read.
    You've inspired me to have a go at haiku.

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  74. whilst wind chiming lullaby...very nice

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  75. Lovely Haiku! Leaving images in your mind.

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