Sunday, 17 July 2011

One Shoot - Insomnia





voices in my head
growing louder and angrier

unforgiven sins, past guilts
looming larger and darker  

i painted my face and wore a wig 

hoping that the shadowy fingers 
will not recognize me

and go away 



Author's Note:  This post is for the last One Shoot Sunday of OSP.  Interview and photography credit by the talented Rosie Hardy.  Thanks Adam and Chris for all your hard work and best of luck.


This is also my contribution for Poetry Jam hosted by Jessica Maybury.    I have decided to write an "insomnia poem" for the challenge.   Happily, I don't have this problem as I fall right into sleep once I hit the pillows.   


Shared with Thursday Poets Rally (July 14-20, 2011).   
Thank you for the The Perfect Poet Award of Poets Rally Week 48~


36 comments:

  1. A perfect interpretation of the photo. Great poem.

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  2. Wonderful poetic rendering of something many suffer through. Penned poetically and superbly. Cheers

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  3. ha! a feeling I can relate to all too well! :) Love the image you chose, and your words are perfectly presented to make an awesome presentation! Loved it, Poet :)

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  4. Great play off the photo, you captured it wonderfully with this one. Yes all have suffered from this at least a little bit.

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  5. I can relate to this...captured brilliantly! :)

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  6. Love your interpretation of the photo! Luckily, I don't have insomnia either. I have the opposite problem-can't stay awake!

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  7. I don't normally have this problem, either, but Thursday and Friday night I did. Could. not. fall sleep.

    And so this poem of yours, and Ms. Hardy's excellent photo, speak to me. I'm going to add myself to your followers, if that's all right.

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  8. you reminded me of Sylvia Plath and her bee poems, the way she repeatedly says that she turns into something else, hoping that the bees won't notice her. Nice work though.

    The photography on that site is beautiful.

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  9. unforgiven sins and past guilts can indeed become dark shadows and sometimes get larger than life....you captured the mood of the photo nicely heaven...love esp. the painted face and the wig part

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  10. Just read a very different take on this pic over at Henry Clemmons', yet both convey the sense of being hounded that you project and that oozes from the photo. I have insomnia frequently, but it has become an old friend of the body and not a harrowing of the heart as you portray here. Solid, well-conceived and well-executed piece, Heaven. Enjoyed it much.

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  11. Write to the core! Fabulous take from the photo, kind of haunting as can be those nights of waking hours... after hours... after hours.

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  12. Very well crafted and thanks for sharing.

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  13. maybe that is what i need...a disguise...and you got pretty close to 160 didnt you....really concise write heaven...and yeah those shadows haunt for sure...

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  14. WOW! What a great pairing of image and words ...........

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  15. I hope the painted face and wig does the trick. ;-)

    Yes, great pairing of words with the photo.

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  16. Nice write and interpretation of the photo :)

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  17. They do find you. Bet you could have done that in 160 characters....

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  18. Henry Clemmons17 July 2011 18:38

    Very nice interpretation and presentation of the image. I enjoyed it very much. Well written! Thank u 4 visiting my site and comment.

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  19. Hm. Normally it's the clown doing the creeping out...but now, even the clown has fallen victim to the darkness!

    To the work, though - fine interpretation. Dark, haunting, trapped in guilt and the cerebral confines of the mind...splendidly done.

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  20. I can relate to that, I have more nights than I wish to remember with insomnia. BTW thanks for your visit.

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  21. picture and the poem match perfectly:)
    good job

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  22. Yes, insomnia can be a nightmare scenario for many of us. Time has a way of seeing to stand still when we can't sleep!
    A great write and a great read, too, thanks.

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  23. Thank you for your lovely words.

    The original draft of this was longer but since I wanted to participate in Sunday 160, I edited it. I couldn't fit it still but the process helped me sort my thoughts and choose which few words to use for impact. I hope I did a good job~

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  25. Great poem. The pic is perfect for this, too.

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  26. The picture and the poem are just right for the subject of the prompt. (Thanks Heaven for your comment on mine)

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  27. That is one scary picture - no wonder you have trouble sleeping after looking at it! LOL ♥

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  28. That picture really is perfect, very scary indeed. Insomnia does lead to madness and it's unbelievably stressful, terrifying even and you've captured that perfectly!

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  29. On the rare occasions when I can't sleep this is EXACTLY what happens. All those past sins are GINORMOUS. I think maybe I'll try the disguise thing too.

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  30. This poem struck me, the nights without sleep, very good read!

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  31. A wonderful picture and poem to match; your words really match the emtions of the photo, great job!

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  32. masterful,
    thanks for linking.

    let us know after you made 18 comments among your peer poets.

    cheers.

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  33. of course i would read this when
    i'm having trouble sleeping. (:

    love the darkness.

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