Thursday 21 July 2011

Dancing

you took my hands, together we leaped
gliding to the dance floor, we dipped
swaying closer, we ignored    
hiphop, rock, fast beat grooves  
we waltzed round and round
timeless rhythm


my hands waved and curled under
one leg lunged as our tongues embraced
we didn’t hear the music anymore
but we kept


dancing til   
rapture
 love   





Author's Note:   I used the nonet for the form (9 lines; first line with 9 syllables; second line with 8 syllables.. until the last line is one syllable), but added 4 lines in the middle so that the total words fit the 55 word challenge of FF.


Isn't it so hot today?  Hope you guys are keeping cool ~

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26 comments:

  1. moondustwriter21 July 2011 at 21:48

    yep it is heating up...

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  2. Olivia21 July 2011 at 21:56

    That is mind blowing!!
    Excellent image choice..

    hugs xox

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  3. Lolamouse21 July 2011 at 22:12

    How can we keep cool when you give us poetry like this to read?!! Awesome job!

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  4. Brian Miller21 July 2011 at 22:14

    it is already 104 here...and....yep....love that dance...smiles.

    sorry i missed your crit...it was down when i hit the link...

    have a great weekend heaven...

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  5. G-Man21 July 2011 at 22:22

    Heaven...
    The oldest dance!
    Excellent 55 My Friend
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  6. Anonymous21 July 2011 at 22:30

    Good idea. Creative.

    The prose is beautiful as is the erotic photo.

    -H

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  7. The Poet21 July 2011 at 22:37

    I know that dance very well! ;-)

    Wonderful imagery.

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  8. Maude Lynn21 July 2011 at 23:25

    Getting hotter . . .

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  9. Anonymous21 July 2011 at 23:53

    and what a dance it is....HOT!

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  10. Dave King22 July 2011 at 06:21

    Balletic love - I'm full of admiration!

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  11. Cheryl22 July 2011 at 07:22

    Beautiful imagery and damn it's HAWT!

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  12. ayala22 July 2011 at 09:04

    Hot...and nicely done :)

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  13. Anonymous22 July 2011 at 10:24

    Passionate "dancing"--you portrayed that so well.

    Very hot here in Florida too!

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  14. Pat Hatt22 July 2011 at 10:53

    Great use of form and yes it's getting hotter than the norm.

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  15. Alice Audrey22 July 2011 at 11:55

    What a great way to make love. Except for the PDA. That means people will interrupt you.

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  16. hedgewitch22 July 2011 at 12:16

    Very creative with the nonet and the 55 arrangement. Bonus points for thinking outside the box. The poem itself is written smoothly and craftily, and is really really appealing to me. I love dancing, especially to music like this. Loved it, Heaven.

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  17. Monkey Man22 July 2011 at 12:45

    Tuned in yet tuned out. very sensual.

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  18. Drenchxoxo22 July 2011 at 15:38

    This is beautiful. There is something so magical about dancing with your special one...

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  19. Nara Malone22 July 2011 at 16:02

    Yes it's hot and I think you're poem just ran the thermometer up another ten degrees. I really admire how you can fit such lovely words in the framework of syllable and word counts.

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  20. Anonymous22 July 2011 at 16:13

    I wanna dance right now! ;-)

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  21. Timoteo22 July 2011 at 20:16

    Love that progression from vertical to horizontal dancing!

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  22. Cuzimbored22 July 2011 at 20:40

    I'm speechless, Heaven! Just so beautiful!

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  23. dolorah22 July 2011 at 23:38

    Definitely hot :)

    Well done

    ....dhole

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  24. Poets United23 July 2011 at 09:09

    Thank you for joining Poets United. We look forward to visiting your blog and reading poetry. We also look forward to seeing you in our community.

    Ink runs from the corners of my mouth
    There is no happiness like mine.
    I have been eating poetry.
    ~Mark Strand

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  25. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall23 July 2011 at 21:19

    fabulous 55, wow.
    you amazing.

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  26. Cynthia24 July 2011 at 09:25

    A beauty of a poem-dance.

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