Thursday, 21 July 2011

Dancing

you took my hands, together we leaped
gliding to the dance floor, we dipped
swaying closer, we ignored    
hiphop, rock, fast beat grooves  
we waltzed round and round
timeless rhythm


my hands waved and curled under
one leg lunged as our tongues embraced
we didn’t hear the music anymore
but we kept


dancing til   
rapture
 love   





Author's Note:   I used the nonet for the form (9 lines; first line with 9 syllables; second line with 8 syllables.. until the last line is one syllable), but added 4 lines in the middle so that the total words fit the 55 word challenge of FF.


Isn't it so hot today?  Hope you guys are keeping cool ~

26 comments:

  1. That is mind blowing!!
    Excellent image choice..

    hugs xox

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  2. How can we keep cool when you give us poetry like this to read?!! Awesome job!

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  3. it is already 104 here...and....yep....love that dance...smiles.

    sorry i missed your crit...it was down when i hit the link...

    have a great weekend heaven...

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  4. Heaven...
    The oldest dance!
    Excellent 55 My Friend
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  5. Good idea. Creative.

    The prose is beautiful as is the erotic photo.

    -H

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  6. I know that dance very well! ;-)

    Wonderful imagery.

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  7. Balletic love - I'm full of admiration!

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  8. Beautiful imagery and damn it's HAWT!

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  9. Passionate "dancing"--you portrayed that so well.

    Very hot here in Florida too!

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  10. Great use of form and yes it's getting hotter than the norm.

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  11. What a great way to make love. Except for the PDA. That means people will interrupt you.

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  12. Very creative with the nonet and the 55 arrangement. Bonus points for thinking outside the box. The poem itself is written smoothly and craftily, and is really really appealing to me. I love dancing, especially to music like this. Loved it, Heaven.

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  13. Tuned in yet tuned out. very sensual.

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  14. This is beautiful. There is something so magical about dancing with your special one...

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  15. Yes it's hot and I think you're poem just ran the thermometer up another ten degrees. I really admire how you can fit such lovely words in the framework of syllable and word counts.

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  16. Love that progression from vertical to horizontal dancing!

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  17. I'm speechless, Heaven! Just so beautiful!

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  18. Definitely hot :)

    Well done

    ....dhole

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  19. Thank you for joining Poets United. We look forward to visiting your blog and reading poetry. We also look forward to seeing you in our community.

    Ink runs from the corners of my mouth
    There is no happiness like mine.
    I have been eating poetry.
    ~Mark Strand

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  20. fabulous 55, wow.
    you amazing.

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