Saturday, 30 July 2011

Floating




I fell 
in despair 
I professed
my innocence
frailty, though
all lies 
irreverent,
  
i sank
weighed down 
stones of hatred
pebbles of envy
in the water
tense, unyielding
pretensions
soul's burdens


i lifted 
my face up
casting complications
but simple faith,
floating  
letting the sea
of hope,
waves of 
forgiveness, 
bring me
to the 
shore.


Author's Note:   This post is for D'Verse Poets, hosted by Sheila and the prompt is to write a poem with water as our inspiration.   


Shared with Poetry United # 60.  

45 comments:

  1. Water, the cleanser of our soul, very refreshing write.

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  2. Absolving water, bringing peace to the soul. Very lovely poem.

    David

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  3. hope and forgiveness are indeed powerful forces .. very similar to water...

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  4. i love this, Heaven, especially the last verse! an amazing take on the prompt.
    dani ♥

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  5. This is very nice; I like your style of writing. Very calm and controlled but also free. Thank you! x

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  6. this is lovely...the message is beauty itself...hope and forgiveness washing over us making us whole once more...love it.

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  7. A perfect piece on the healing process... as refreshing as the water that cools us.

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  8. A finely worded, watery journey through emotion and realization, deftly presented. Enjoyed it much, Heaven.

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  9. Forgiveness is like that... I've never thought about it.

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  10. i float with you. beautiful poem, beautiful picture.

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  11. Feels like a sensual jouney - tough but redemptive.

    A tacile feeling to this write - a gentle physicality

    great lines

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  12. Nice write. Enjoyed the choice of language, and the calming, cleansing that came as a result. Thanks so much for all your support as well! :)

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  13. Water cleanses so much more than our bodies and you've painted it so well here. In life, we can either chose to sink or swim.
    Lovely.

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  14. I never leave here disappointed, Heaven.

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  15. Such a cleansing write, if only water could do that each and every night.

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  16. Love how the water,s forgiveness brings us to the shore. Definitely cleansing and definitely keeps me grounded so to speak. Great one, heaven, thank you

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  17. I love forgiveness and hope bringing us to shore....

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  18. This was full of peace :) Especially,
    "letting the sea
    of hope,
    waves of
    forgiveness,
    bring me
    to the
    shore."

    Lovely!

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  19. pebbles of envy
    in the water
    tense, unyielding
    pretensions

    These were my favorite lines in your moving poem.

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  20. Very beautiful, Heaven.
    Your poem gave me a sense of such peace!
    Love it!

    Margie :)

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  21. WoW ! Powerful.

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  22. Such a soft blue ephiphany, womblike and free. Yes, yes, yes. -Brendan

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  23. Water is a powerful metaphor...speaking as someone who was recently baptized...and cleansed.. :)

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  24. This is very good. Uplifting...a poem of hope.

    -H

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  25. Thank you everyone for the visit and wonderful words. I appreciate it ~

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  26. Lovely write - the last stanza perfectly inspiring. ~ Rose

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  27. I like the simple flow of the poem. It does its work and isn't overwrought.

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  28. I appreciate the hope last verse brings. Nicely done.

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  29. Beautiful indeed!

    http://achu89.blogspot.com/

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  30. Lovely fluidity to this.. so apt. A pleasure to reach a cleansing shore...

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  31. This reminds me so much of being baptized and the emotions felt afterwards.

    Nicely done, Heaven. Great image too!

    I'm here:
    Moments In The Sun

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  32. I felt the water, the weight. Your lines.

    You ended with forgiveness, safety.
    That is something I haven't found.
    Thank you for sharing. This connected to me in a very direct way.

    Wonderful!

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  33. I felt the water, the weight. Your lines.

    You ended with forgiveness, safety.
    That is something I haven't found.
    Thank you for sharing. This connected to me in a very direct way.

    Wonderful!

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  34. Beautiful write about the cleansing power of water. Intriguing image...

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  35. I love, love your writing Heaven. And as much as I truly enjoy the eroticism of your blog I'm thankful you've diversified in your writing because it gives us a chance to see more of what you're capable of (you'll forgive me, I realize that's poor grammar but it's rather late).

    I've always been a fan of free verse but I also have to say that much of your poetry is more formal and structured than mine. I appreciate your discipline.

    This particular piece has a wonderfully airy feel and a cathartic tone. Being the eternal idealist and dreamer, the ending works well for me. :)

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  36. What a lovely write! Liquid, sensual. For someone who professes to be new to this, I would say, you're going to be a star! Well done! More, please.

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  37. That was very soothing, to come out of complications and just relax, for hope is righteously our vision for a better tomorrow.

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  38. I like your metaphor, 'sea of 'and 'of forgiveness'. Nice one.

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  39. I like the truth in this, how a false profession of innocence can drag a person down, and how admitting this - and then letting go, forgiving - can buoy one up. Very nicely done, and the poem has a comforting feel to it.

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  40. lovely imagery Sweet lust...

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  41. This is beautiful! Thank you.

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  42. This made me feel like the figure in the picture. Beautiful! Shah - x http://wordsinsync.blogspot.com/2011/08/weekend-creation-blog-hop-plus-poem.html

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