Monday, 5 September 2011

Sweet kisses

rainy afternoon
he holds her hands ardently
sun smiling his face

~0~0~

he asks her shyly
silver ring gleaming his hand
boldly she answers








warm soft kisses
enveloping, engulfing
cool stiff composure

~0~0~

salt on his lips  
toes curl in delight with kisses      
sweeter than custard





Author's Note:   Written for Haiku Heights - Prompt # 64 ~ Kiss.  This is part of the on-going month long haiku challenge at Haiku Heights.  


Also shared with D'Verse Poets Pub (doors open every Tuesday at 3 pm EST).   Link your poem (any form) and enjoy warm company.

In writing haiku poems (3 lines, 17 syllables) I strive to provide a contrast of images between the first line and the third line.  

Picture credit:   http://thenyoukiss.tumblr.com/post/9817017141
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61 comments:

  1. Christine5 September 2011 at 22:01

    nice, a moment and kiss never forgotten

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  2. Brian Miller5 September 2011 at 22:56

    nice. you immortalize a moment they will never forget...i hope they never forget that feeling...nicely done heaven...

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  3. Anonymous6 September 2011 at 01:09

    I think the third verse works very well (maybe because I like custard).

    Your woman feels in charge here, too.

    Great.

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  4. Tweety6 September 2011 at 01:17

    Sensuous and definitely sweeter than custard :)

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  5. Anonymous6 September 2011 at 01:46

    Ohhh! This IS sweet, indeed!

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  6. void6 September 2011 at 02:51

    your writing is beautiful and delicate :)

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  7. Ravenblack6 September 2011 at 02:53

    I love how you play with opposites and contrasts, makes it more vivid to one who reads. Rain and sun, cool and warm, soft and stiff, salt and sweet... all comes together and such a beautiful scene and feeling. Really excellent!

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  8. andy sewina6 September 2011 at 06:08

    Kisses sweeter than custard, now there's a thought.

    Great images!

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  9. Pat Hatt6 September 2011 at 08:08

    Great capture of a moment soon not to be forgotten, if ever, unless there is a divorce somewhere down the road..haha

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  10. Barry6 September 2011 at 08:20

    I love the diversity in your writing; sultry and erotic one moment, sweet and almost innocent the next.

    You're quite wonderful to me.

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  11. Cheryl6 September 2011 at 09:03

    I love that you're working with 'old haiku' form. So refreshing. And these are perfect.

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  12. tarunima6 September 2011 at 09:04

    You described this so perfectly:)
    Loved it...some moments are indeed very sweet

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  13. Dave King6 September 2011 at 09:18

    Interesting - and successful - use of the haiku form. Fine writing.

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  14. Anonymous6 September 2011 at 11:10

    you capture a sweet moment in time perfectly :)

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  15. kaykuala6 September 2011 at 11:51

    Naturally it progressed from warm kisses to warm embrace. Beautiful verse!

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  16. Drenchxoxo6 September 2011 at 12:13

    Precious sentiments.

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  17. Short Poems6 September 2011 at 12:44

    This is so sweet :)

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  18. Anonymous6 September 2011 at 13:07

    this has a very special charm to it, loved the sweeter than custard!

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  19. Claudia6 September 2011 at 13:44

    hmm nice...when the toes curl...he's done something right...smiles

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  20. Maude Lynn6 September 2011 at 14:46

    Such a sweet, romantic piece!

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  21. Nanka6 September 2011 at 15:03

    Deeply madly in love!! Very romantic!!

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  22. ayala6 September 2011 at 15:42

    kisses sweeter than custard...so great to be madly in love!

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  23. Tashtoo6 September 2011 at 15:43

    Your words painted a perfect picture...and love the image you chose. All could stand alone, but together even better.

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  24. Jannie Funster6 September 2011 at 15:50

    Ahhh, what a special moment. You took me there.

    So sweet.

    Thank you!

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  25. mrs mediocrity6 September 2011 at 15:51

    perfect little word paintings.

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  26. Joanne Young Elliott6 September 2011 at 16:28

    Lovely! Each moment captured in the stillness of the now that imprints in memory forever. Nicely done.

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  27. Geoff M. Pope6 September 2011 at 16:43

    I especially like the third one with its lovely converting contrast and "l" consonance.

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  28. Ed Pilolla6 September 2011 at 16:50

    so rich and sweet:)

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  29. Arron Shilling6 September 2011 at 17:46

    charmingly elegant heaven - a lovely read

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  30. robkistner6 September 2011 at 17:48

    This is good work you've done – here’s mine: http://www.image-verse.com/clown

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  31. Christi Moon6 September 2011 at 18:04

    dreamy and dulcet!

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  32. Beachanny6 September 2011 at 18:35

    Dear Heaven - I like your love story done so well in 5/7/5. So sensuous and beautiful. (I've been told but don't know exactly that when you tell about people as main characters in this form, it is not properly called haiku, but rather senryu) Perhaps, you could consult with Lady Nyo for she is the expert. Either way it's heaven, Heaven. BTW - I have something coming up in 5/7/5 and have no idea if it falls under either nomenclature. We'll talk about it later.

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  33. Anonymous6 September 2011 at 19:36

    Popping the question...... one of the most memorable parts of adult life... You never forget that day, it stays in living color in your mind forever.... you can't lose it..... it's like the days your kids were born.... (if you were there for that) Or the day you found your first home with your spouse.... or your first new car.... naw, naw, popping the question is definitely more special than the first new car.... (Close, though...) Your poem does that special day justice....

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  34. Unknown6 September 2011 at 19:41

    Great job at capturing the essence here. Love haiku and you did a great job utilizing it here

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  35. Scarlet6 September 2011 at 19:41

    Thank you everyone for the wonderful comments.

    Yes Beachanny - if the topic is about life or emotions, it is called senryu. If about nature, it is called haiku. Still the poetry form is the same, 3 lines of 5/7/5.

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  36. Laura6 September 2011 at 19:45

    a sweet ode to love...beautiful!

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  37. Laurie Kolp6 September 2011 at 20:29

    Aww... so sweet... brings back memories of my own engagement.

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  38. Ann LeFlore6 September 2011 at 21:28

    Heaven you are such a fantastic poet and this piece is so lovely bring back memories I am so happy to read your blog and love it so much
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/08/29/unsuspecting-creatures-of-the-night/

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  39. Anonymous6 September 2011 at 21:32

    Love the contrasts ... the emotions and the sweet passions ... nice set for the prompt!! Well done ~~

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  40. Anonymous6 September 2011 at 21:32

    Love the contrasts ... the emotions and the sweet passions ... nice set for the prompt!! Well done ~~

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  41. Unknown6 September 2011 at 21:41

    Very sweet. That last stanza is my favorite as well. Love is a wonderful feeling, and it's always a pleasure to celebrate when two people find it :)

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  42. Magical Mystical Teacher6 September 2011 at 21:54

    Well, if those kisses are sweeter than custard, I'd lock lips forever!

    Kisses here and here and here

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  43. Helena White6 September 2011 at 22:00

    Pure Love expressed ~ Delightful ~

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  44. Anonymous6 September 2011 at 22:14

    "toes curl in delight with kisses
    sweeter than custard" ... I love that feeling. :)

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  45. siggiofmaine6 September 2011 at 22:18

    Enjoyed this very much.
    ☮ ♥ Siggi in Downeast Maine

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  46. hedgewitch6 September 2011 at 22:40

    Sensual, innocent and sweet. Heaven on earth, in fact. ;_)

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  47. Yamini Meduri6 September 2011 at 23:25

    wow wonderful moment beautifully captured through your heart..!!!

    thanks for sharing dear....glad to read :)

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  48. Randy Behavior6 September 2011 at 23:58

    Surprisingly untainted by divorce, I remember my sweet moment in an apple orchard. Sweet capture.

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  49. Susie Clevenger6 September 2011 at 23:59

    how beautiful and creative...love the words and the image

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  50. seasideauthor7 September 2011 at 00:18

    Great form and subject. Makes people yearn for one last kiss. Or one last romance.

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  51. Anna @ waysidewordgarden7 September 2011 at 01:24

    How sweet, a precious moment.

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  52. Kavita7 September 2011 at 01:40

    Awww.... that really IS a moment of a lifetime!! *sigh*
    And you have captured it so tenderly and beautifully here, Heaven...

    hugs!!

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  53. Anonymous7 September 2011 at 04:45

    How lovely! Sweet and romantic. Nicely done.

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  54. Robert Gibson: PWES Editor7 September 2011 at 08:24

    I got one request:

    Kiss me *grin*

    I love this piece ... and thanks for visiting my blog; I'll be

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  55. Anonymous7 September 2011 at 11:53

    Why is custard on my mind...? Like how you used it here...

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  56. Joseph Hesch7 September 2011 at 12:02

    You make it so easy for my scar-stiffened heart to beat in warm rhythm with your 17-syllable charms. I wear them as on a chain around my neck for that day. It's such a different vibe than we're used to reading in poems about Love. It inspires me every time.

    She nudged me awake,
    not from a nightmare, but more
    creative slumber.

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  57. Sheila7 September 2011 at 14:01

    ~0~0~ magnificently romantic

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  58. Vinay Leo R.7 September 2011 at 15:03

    Like the first one after the image the best :) Well put!

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  59. Anonymous7 September 2011 at 15:54

    Very sweet Heaven! :) // Peter.

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  60. Dulçe ♥7 September 2011 at 16:06

    why is it that wherever the word 'sweet' is written I melt?

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  61. signed...bkm7 September 2011 at 19:33

    Awe yes...Love and more love...bkm

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