Monday, 5 September 2011

Sweet kisses

rainy afternoon
he holds her hands ardently
sun smiling his face

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he asks her shyly
silver ring gleaming his hand
boldly she answers








warm soft kisses
enveloping, engulfing
cool stiff composure

~0~0~

salt on his lips  
toes curl in delight with kisses      
sweeter than custard





Author's Note:   Written for Haiku Heights - Prompt # 64 ~ Kiss.  This is part of the on-going month long haiku challenge at Haiku Heights.  


Also shared with D'Verse Poets Pub (doors open every Tuesday at 3 pm EST).   Link your poem (any form) and enjoy warm company.

In writing haiku poems (3 lines, 17 syllables) I strive to provide a contrast of images between the first line and the third line.  

Picture credit:   http://thenyoukiss.tumblr.com/post/9817017141

61 comments:

  1. nice, a moment and kiss never forgotten

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  2. nice. you immortalize a moment they will never forget...i hope they never forget that feeling...nicely done heaven...

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  3. I think the third verse works very well (maybe because I like custard).

    Your woman feels in charge here, too.

    Great.

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  4. Sensuous and definitely sweeter than custard :)

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  5. your writing is beautiful and delicate :)

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  6. I love how you play with opposites and contrasts, makes it more vivid to one who reads. Rain and sun, cool and warm, soft and stiff, salt and sweet... all comes together and such a beautiful scene and feeling. Really excellent!

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  7. Kisses sweeter than custard, now there's a thought.

    Great images!

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  8. Great capture of a moment soon not to be forgotten, if ever, unless there is a divorce somewhere down the road..haha

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  9. I love the diversity in your writing; sultry and erotic one moment, sweet and almost innocent the next.

    You're quite wonderful to me.

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  10. I love that you're working with 'old haiku' form. So refreshing. And these are perfect.

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  11. You described this so perfectly:)
    Loved it...some moments are indeed very sweet

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  12. Interesting - and successful - use of the haiku form. Fine writing.

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  13. you capture a sweet moment in time perfectly :)

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  14. Naturally it progressed from warm kisses to warm embrace. Beautiful verse!

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  15. this has a very special charm to it, loved the sweeter than custard!

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  16. hmm nice...when the toes curl...he's done something right...smiles

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  17. Deeply madly in love!! Very romantic!!

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  18. kisses sweeter than custard...so great to be madly in love!

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  19. Your words painted a perfect picture...and love the image you chose. All could stand alone, but together even better.

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  20. Ahhh, what a special moment. You took me there.

    So sweet.

    Thank you!

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  21. Lovely! Each moment captured in the stillness of the now that imprints in memory forever. Nicely done.

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  22. I especially like the third one with its lovely converting contrast and "l" consonance.

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  23. charmingly elegant heaven - a lovely read

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  24. This is good work you've done – here’s mine: http://www.image-verse.com/clown

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  25. Dear Heaven - I like your love story done so well in 5/7/5. So sensuous and beautiful. (I've been told but don't know exactly that when you tell about people as main characters in this form, it is not properly called haiku, but rather senryu) Perhaps, you could consult with Lady Nyo for she is the expert. Either way it's heaven, Heaven. BTW - I have something coming up in 5/7/5 and have no idea if it falls under either nomenclature. We'll talk about it later.

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  26. Popping the question...... one of the most memorable parts of adult life... You never forget that day, it stays in living color in your mind forever.... you can't lose it..... it's like the days your kids were born.... (if you were there for that) Or the day you found your first home with your spouse.... or your first new car.... naw, naw, popping the question is definitely more special than the first new car.... (Close, though...) Your poem does that special day justice....

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  27. Great job at capturing the essence here. Love haiku and you did a great job utilizing it here

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  28. Thank you everyone for the wonderful comments.

    Yes Beachanny - if the topic is about life or emotions, it is called senryu. If about nature, it is called haiku. Still the poetry form is the same, 3 lines of 5/7/5.

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  29. a sweet ode to love...beautiful!

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  30. Aww... so sweet... brings back memories of my own engagement.

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  31. Heaven you are such a fantastic poet and this piece is so lovely bring back memories I am so happy to read your blog and love it so much
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/08/29/unsuspecting-creatures-of-the-night/

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  32. Love the contrasts ... the emotions and the sweet passions ... nice set for the prompt!! Well done ~~

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  33. Love the contrasts ... the emotions and the sweet passions ... nice set for the prompt!! Well done ~~

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  34. Very sweet. That last stanza is my favorite as well. Love is a wonderful feeling, and it's always a pleasure to celebrate when two people find it :)

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  35. Well, if those kisses are sweeter than custard, I'd lock lips forever!

    Kisses here and here and here

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  36. Pure Love expressed ~ Delightful ~

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  37. "toes curl in delight with kisses
    sweeter than custard" ... I love that feeling. :)

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  38. Enjoyed this very much.
    ☮ ♥ Siggi in Downeast Maine

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  39. Sensual, innocent and sweet. Heaven on earth, in fact. ;_)

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  40. wow wonderful moment beautifully captured through your heart..!!!

    thanks for sharing dear....glad to read :)

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  41. Surprisingly untainted by divorce, I remember my sweet moment in an apple orchard. Sweet capture.

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  42. how beautiful and creative...love the words and the image

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  43. Great form and subject. Makes people yearn for one last kiss. Or one last romance.

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  44. Awww.... that really IS a moment of a lifetime!! *sigh*
    And you have captured it so tenderly and beautifully here, Heaven...

    hugs!!

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  45. How lovely! Sweet and romantic. Nicely done.

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  46. I got one request:

    Kiss me *grin*

    I love this piece ... and thanks for visiting my blog; I'll be

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  47. Why is custard on my mind...? Like how you used it here...

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  48. You make it so easy for my scar-stiffened heart to beat in warm rhythm with your 17-syllable charms. I wear them as on a chain around my neck for that day. It's such a different vibe than we're used to reading in poems about Love. It inspires me every time.

    She nudged me awake,
    not from a nightmare, but more
    creative slumber.

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  49. Like the first one after the image the best :) Well put!

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  50. Very sweet Heaven! :) // Peter.

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  51. why is it that wherever the word 'sweet' is written I melt?

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  52. Awe yes...Love and more love...bkm

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