color, silent as ivory
keys, we swim into
until we tasted undercurrents
ripe as scarlet verses, sliding
exquisitely down our bellies-
the tides peel our skin
moist as tenderness-
no word is colorless
in your eyes, cadence is you
kissing me slowly, like Sun-
day morning, the sweetest candle-
slide your hands beneath me ,
liquid is sky, everything is a seed-
this is how we make
our memory
in river’s aria,
jettisoning into the wild cosmos, the rush
cradling us -
a birthing, or a dying of familiar things -
but oh, don't let me forget
this moment -
Posted for D'verse Poets Pub: Putting synesthesia in Poetry - There is a neurological condition called synesthesia in which the patient confuses sensation. For example, he may taste a fragrance, or hear a flower. Have you ever touched a rainbow or seen a toccata? In poetry, synesthesia refers specifically to figurative language that includes a mixing of senses.
no word is colorless...smiles...true that...i like the verse sliding down...and the seed and making memory...ha...that is my fav part...jettison into the cosmos...very cool...
ReplyDeleteThank you Brian ~ This was challenging to do ~
DeleteA wonderful and sexy mix of the senses, Grace!
ReplyDeleteThank you Laurie ~
DeleteA moment that would surely be hard to forget, even for this pet haha
ReplyDeleteReally Pat, Smiles ~
Deleteah this is beautifully sensual..everything's a seed..no word is colorless
ReplyDeletein your eyes...cadence is you..beautiful grace
Thank you Claudia ~
Deletemmmmm. river's aria/jettisoning into the wild cosmos. so effective.
ReplyDeleteThank you Jane ~
DeleteEvery line an exquisite gem of synesthesia. silent as ivory... and as usually with that sensual touch.
ReplyDeleteThank you Bjorn ~ I told you this took the whole day ~
DeleteGrace, you use each word and phrase as the beauty it deserves to be. Lovely and loving poem.
ReplyDeletePamela
Thank you Pamela ~
DeleteThis one contains the heat, Grace, finding the exquisite explosion of the senses, elevating the merely sensual into a stratosphere of esthetics, and making us dig it as we tingle along with you, and are grateful for the water's coolness to dampen our eros.
ReplyDeleteYour comments are poetic themselves ~ Thank you Glenn ~
Deletemorning is a faded water... such lovely line, Grace!
ReplyDeleteThank you Dezzy ~
DeleteAssociating the colour scarlet with ripeness is just amazing Heaven, you have such a luxurious way with words, absolutely love it.
ReplyDeleteThank you Matthew ~
DeleteI love what you've done with this prompt. Mixing up the senses does a lot for sensual, erotic poetry and you excel.
ReplyDeleteThank you Victoria for another poetry challenge ~ I should use this process more consciously in the future ~
DeleteYou made "tasting the rainbow" so steamy and sensual, overflowing with synesthesia, I love it !!!
ReplyDeleteThank you Randy ~ I enjoyed thinking out of the box ~
DeleteI love how this private memory almost has its own private language and metaphor. Wow-ee this was good.
ReplyDeleteThank you Mosk ~
DeleteI definitely won't forget you in this moment. Nature interlinks with humanity, becoming one again. Brilliant.
ReplyDeleteThank you Ben ~
Deleteoh, i just love the morning as a faded water, scarlet verses and river's aria......exceptionally beautiful and sensual, this.
ReplyDeleteComing from you, this is lovely ~ Thank you ~
DeleteGrace, if i could drink your words, i'd order the full bottle. every word a cherished sip.
ReplyDeletebreathtakingly beautiful.
Thank you kindly Miriam ~ I am glad you like the final post ~
DeleteLoved the ending which begs not to ever end in thoughts.
ReplyDeleteHopefully not ~ Thank you ~
DeleteO! With this poem surviving,none of us will ever forget. Perfect!
ReplyDeleteThank you Susan ~
Delete"no word is colorless in your eyes..." Fantastic! Love it. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you ~
Deletei like how you broke up the ivory keys, so you have the sound, and then the keys, like in Florida that you swim in
ReplyDeletestunning and sensual. easy to get lose in this. I also enjoyed the visual appearance of the staggered lines.
ReplyDeleteI love this:
ReplyDelete"no word is colorless
in your eyes"
"kissing me slowly, like Sun-" ... great line break
Gorgeous:
"slide your hands beneath me ,
liquid is sky"
I can't choose a favorite line or verse or phrase. This is absolutement stunning. Excellent write and beautiful, sensuous imagery. -Mike
ReplyDeleteyou would drain color from this world
ReplyDeleteand refill it with your words
"no word is colorless"
ReplyDeleteI love that!
so sensual...every word moves...loved it!
ReplyDeletei loved 'no word is colorless' and 'ripe as scarlet verses'
ReplyDeletebeautiful
...Grace, your end is a winner... i think i can never write an intimate poem as beautiful as yours... it is your genre... your comfort zone... and i adore you for that ability... this is my fave part:
ReplyDeleteslide your hands beneath me ,
liquid is sky, everything is a seed-
this is how we make
our memory
in river’s aria,
jettisoning into the wild cosmos, the rush
cradling us -
a birthing, or a dying of familiar things -
but oh, don't let me forget
this moment..
...smiles...
Simply delicious!
ReplyDeleteA very tender description right from the title of the poem!
ReplyDeleteSensual and exciting. Lovely work.
ReplyDeleteI adored this one! I have tasted color, my dear!! Have a beautiful weekend =)
ReplyDeleteThe sensualness of this goes well with the prompt. And can we ever tire of trying to explain this experience of love?
ReplyDeleteGrace, a sensual beauty - love the quiet cadence of your words- just lovely. K
ReplyDeleteLove what you did Heaven. A very sensual piece... Learned something new today.. :)
ReplyDeletepeace and love
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Love it!! Okay the very beginning with ivory as silent and morning a faded watercolor, that is so precious. Beginnings are so precious! And remembering the moment is a fantastic ending as that is what we are left with. Incredible, I picked a good day to check back on the d-verse poets pub. Thanks.
ReplyDelete"undercurrents
ReplyDeleteripe as scarlet verses,"
many possible interpretations of those four words. Beautiful piece, Grace.
Oh Grace - this is just fabulous!
ReplyDeleteHey grace-- this is very sensual but also very light and fun. The mixing up o the senses is quite playful. I especially liked the lines re cadence and slow kisses and ivory keys. This is Karin by the way of Manicddaily. Google I going to make me use an old google account. K.
ReplyDeleteThis is amazing on every level. I hope you have a great weekend Grace!
ReplyDeleteThis drenches the senses with a flood of wonderful imagery Grace.
ReplyDeletethe tides peel our skin
ReplyDeletemoist as tenderness-
Grace,
You've become a number one poetess... I am just amazed at how you pick those pieces of time material and create such beauty.
delicious work
THANKS
"don't let me forget / this moment -": I love the ending. Your poem flows so well, with all these unexpected compound words at the edges... Well done!
ReplyDeleteThis is so precious....so lovely! Oliana
ReplyDeleteHow gorgeous ... as always. :)
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