scientists say about the universe:
a singularity, core of black hole
we turn towards my notebook,
intent on discovery of pressure and the
expanding universe, beholding its beauty
pop goes your laughter, as a fried chicken leg
slips my hand and gravy sauce edges mouth,
warm as honeycombs, electrons charging
it takes millions of years for hydrogen molecules
to come together, a shockwave, collapse of gas,
nuclear fusion, we gaze into each other
everything falls into the page: time, place, rhythm,
perfect collision, simultaneous intake, wonder in eyes as
your lips find mine by school bench, soft
bursting supernova, helium joy on paper lantern
meeting the skylight, floating on a careless afternoon,
my hands find deep hollow of your back, holding
a world unfolding,
us
Posted for D'verse Poets Pub: Poetics: First Times - A cosmic welcome to Fred Rutherford who is hosting the pub for the first time.
I haven't been posting here lately because I am writing haiku for September Challenge of Haiku Heights in my other blog. Thanks for the visit.
nice..love the images...the bursting supernova, the collapse of gas, nuclear fusion...so much powerful energy when we fall in love...and what else counts then but the two...
ReplyDeleteThanks Claudia for the lovely compliments ~
Deletehelium joy on paper lantern...ha that is cool...actually some really cool scenes in this...the dropping of the chicken and gravy lips....i love that part...its so real....very nice grace....
ReplyDeleteIt's based on a real incident..he..he...first date too ~
DeleteThanks Brian ~
what an excellent piece. The metaphors are unbelievable complex and simple at the same time, such a feat. Really enjoyed this so much. Thanks
ReplyDeleteThank you for the wonderful prompt Fred ~
DeleteA spectacular history of a kiss, Grace
ReplyDeleteUsing science in the romantic discoveries is hard, but come to think of it, einstein did very well in both. Maybe a little too well in both. The bomb and a divorce. Yikes!
Rick
Yikes on those other discoveries Rick ~
DeleteHope you have a good weekend ~
heh, Heaven, this was weird at moments (that popping chicken leg :), but very cute and enchanting, like a hymn to love!
ReplyDeleteUntil this day, hubby still remembers that chicken leg that flew away on our first date...he..he...Thanks for the visit Dez ~
DeleteA kiss not to miss!
ReplyDeleteSurely..thanks John ~
DeleteHeaven, a stunning right. I loved the last three lines, ending with 'us.' A poem of love par excellence!
ReplyDeleteThank you Mary for the lovely words ~
DeleteFirst kiss... beautifully recaptured!
ReplyDeleteThank you Laurie ~
DeleteAhh.... we (mostly) never forget that all important Oh so grown up, first kiss. It sounds as if yours was lovely, and lip smacking tasty too. :)
ReplyDelete"everything falls into the page" yes, that's how it is when we write, I think, as well as when we drop chicken legs. ;_) This builds quietly, detail by detail, and ends up filling the page, and the heart.
ReplyDeleteBrings back memories.
ReplyDeleteOh this is lovely - I especially like "helium joy on paper lantern". That's a great phrase. So alive.
ReplyDeleteRomantic. very sensual and fun first kiss. So lovely to remember. I love the line "floating on a careless afternoon" It is so wonderful to do that especially when you are in love and together,,,,,,
ReplyDeleteAll comes to a head no matter the mess and weird little images that come to play, in the end all we can hope for is such bliss at the end of the day.
ReplyDeleteLovely combination of universal in all its aspects and the very personal - wonderful detail of chichen legs and gravy! All mixed in with super nova! k.
ReplyDeleteI always enjoy your work.
ReplyDeleteI too always enjoy your work. You are very talented with a great gift of leaving a reader smiling and yet speechless. This is a very beautiful poem. I like how you started from the beginning of the universe, then weaved that through to this first...
ReplyDeleteThis is a stunning write...just beautiful and full of the most amazing images. Love it.
ReplyDelete"bursting supernova, helium joy on paper lantern
ReplyDeletemeeting the skylight, floating on a careless afternoon"
this is my favorite part!
Wonderful... the mystery of it all and bang it all comes together. Very well done!
ReplyDeletereally enjoyed this one, Heaven!
ReplyDelete♥
That first kiss.....and comparing it something as epic as a the birth of a star or a supernova...something celestial...huge....overwhelming....loving how you ramp up the emotion in this piece ....and you are right of course....everyone deserves to experience one of these kisses.....
ReplyDeleteWhat a great way to finish - not with a bang OR a whimper! Love it.
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed the recollection of this first! Lovely imagery, huge as well as intimate...
ReplyDeleteWhat a memory!
ReplyDelete"bursting supernova, helium joy on paper lantern
meeting the skylight, floating on a careless afternoon ..." Exquisitely framed in study of the first birth.
Some awesome lines in this one, and they lead up to a wonderful explosion. Great description of that first kiss!
ReplyDeleteSo many good lines in this and the comparison of the two beginnings is marvelous. Love as physics-a quantum singularity....
ReplyDeleteYes, this is a moment to remember: desire made reality as the gap between two people closes.
ReplyDeleteFun as science take second stage to the small of a back!
ReplyDeleteBang!
(Well done)
You've illuminated the forces of passion from all angles. Science and love and lust plaited together.
ReplyDeleteThis has some really cool imagery. Very nice write!
ReplyDeleteReally riveting words and descriptions building up to a sensual climax, talk about a big bang ;-)
ReplyDeleteI love the imagery and the music in this.... Fabulous cadence... A first kiss holds such tender memories, you conveyed that so well here. Lovely!
ReplyDeleteThe combustion of creation. No matter if it starts a universe or a love affair - it's hot.
ReplyDeleteI love your scientific language in this to describe something so physical and emotional. Great job.
Cosmic fireworks come to mind. :) I love the colors in the imagery used here. :)
ReplyDeleteYou write with such beautiful imagery that feels both intense and intimate--this is a favorite of yours for me--
ReplyDeleteVery nice and so full of images
ReplyDeleteA poem of such excellence, Heaven. Describes a wondrous moment.
ReplyDeleteWe have all of creation behind the combustion of our hormones bouncing into one another...it can't happen any other way other than how you so aptly and creatively describe it. And I love that it's really based on a first date. Sweet.
ReplyDeleteLovely. I love the imagery. Connecting the intense mind blowing beauty of the universe with the intense mind blowing beauty of love. I look forward to reading your other poems :)
ReplyDeletegood one...your choice of words -something different from the usual!
ReplyDeletephysical and metaphysical science of being and passion so much so brilliant
ReplyDeleteI'm glad I read your comment back to Dezz. It made me go back and read this with a new perspective and made it that much more special. Good luck with your other writings, Heaven.
ReplyDeletethis was fun to read grace.
ReplyDeleteagain, loving the words you choose.
i'm always in awe.
xxx
I love the cosmic images and feel you created with this. So appropriate for the subject matter. Great poem!
ReplyDeletewhat a world...heaven sent eh?
ReplyDeleteSuper visual piece. From the emptiness of the black hole to the hypercharged bursting supernova, your images live. A pleasure to read and experience.
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