Saturday, 15 September 2012

The first time



there must be a beginning,
scientists say about the universe:
a singularity, core of black hole

we turn towards my notebook,
intent on discovery of pressure and the
expanding universe, beholding its beauty

pop goes your laughter, as a fried chicken leg
slips my hand and gravy sauce edges mouth, 
warm as honeycombs, electrons charging

it takes millions of years for hydrogen molecules
to come together, a shockwave, collapse of gas,  
nuclear fusion, we gaze into each other

everything falls into the page: time, place, rhythm, 
perfect collision, simultaneous intake, wonder in eyes as 
your lips find mine by school bench, soft  

bursting supernova, helium joy on paper lantern
meeting the skylight, floating on a careless afternoon,
my hands find deep hollow of your back, holding 

a world unfolding,

us


Posted for D'verse Poets Pub:   Poetics:   First Times - A cosmic welcome to Fred Rutherford  who is hosting the pub for the first time.  

I haven't been posting here lately because I am writing haiku for September Challenge of Haiku Heights in my other blog.   Thanks for the visit.  

55 comments:

  1. nice..love the images...the bursting supernova, the collapse of gas, nuclear fusion...so much powerful energy when we fall in love...and what else counts then but the two...

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    1. Thanks Claudia for the lovely compliments ~

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  2. helium joy on paper lantern...ha that is cool...actually some really cool scenes in this...the dropping of the chicken and gravy lips....i love that part...its so real....very nice grace....

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    1. It's based on a real incident..he..he...first date too ~

      Thanks Brian ~

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  3. what an excellent piece. The metaphors are unbelievable complex and simple at the same time, such a feat. Really enjoyed this so much. Thanks

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    1. Thank you for the wonderful prompt Fred ~

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  4. A spectacular history of a kiss, Grace
    Using science in the romantic discoveries is hard, but come to think of it, einstein did very well in both. Maybe a little too well in both. The bomb and a divorce. Yikes!
    Rick

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    1. Yikes on those other discoveries Rick ~

      Hope you have a good weekend ~

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  5. heh, Heaven, this was weird at moments (that popping chicken leg :), but very cute and enchanting, like a hymn to love!

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    1. Until this day, hubby still remembers that chicken leg that flew away on our first date...he..he...Thanks for the visit Dez ~

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  6. Heaven, a stunning right. I loved the last three lines, ending with 'us.' A poem of love par excellence!

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    1. Thank you Mary for the lovely words ~

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  7. First kiss... beautifully recaptured!

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  8. Ahh.... we (mostly) never forget that all important Oh so grown up, first kiss. It sounds as if yours was lovely, and lip smacking tasty too. :)

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  9. "everything falls into the page" yes, that's how it is when we write, I think, as well as when we drop chicken legs. ;_) This builds quietly, detail by detail, and ends up filling the page, and the heart.

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  10. Oh this is lovely - I especially like "helium joy on paper lantern". That's a great phrase. So alive.

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  11. Romantic. very sensual and fun first kiss. So lovely to remember. I love the line "floating on a careless afternoon" It is so wonderful to do that especially when you are in love and together,,,,,,

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  12. All comes to a head no matter the mess and weird little images that come to play, in the end all we can hope for is such bliss at the end of the day.

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  13. Lovely combination of universal in all its aspects and the very personal - wonderful detail of chichen legs and gravy! All mixed in with super nova! k.

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  14. I too always enjoy your work. You are very talented with a great gift of leaving a reader smiling and yet speechless. This is a very beautiful poem. I like how you started from the beginning of the universe, then weaved that through to this first...

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  15. This is a stunning write...just beautiful and full of the most amazing images. Love it.

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  16. "bursting supernova, helium joy on paper lantern
    meeting the skylight, floating on a careless afternoon"
    this is my favorite part!

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  17. Wonderful... the mystery of it all and bang it all comes together. Very well done!

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  18. That first kiss.....and comparing it something as epic as a the birth of a star or a supernova...something celestial...huge....overwhelming....loving how you ramp up the emotion in this piece ....and you are right of course....everyone deserves to experience one of these kisses.....

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  19. What a great way to finish - not with a bang OR a whimper! Love it.

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  20. Enjoyed the recollection of this first! Lovely imagery, huge as well as intimate...

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  21. What a memory!
    "bursting supernova, helium joy on paper lantern
    meeting the skylight, floating on a careless afternoon ..." Exquisitely framed in study of the first birth.

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  22. Some awesome lines in this one, and they lead up to a wonderful explosion. Great description of that first kiss!

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  23. So many good lines in this and the comparison of the two beginnings is marvelous. Love as physics-a quantum singularity....

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  24. Yes, this is a moment to remember: desire made reality as the gap between two people closes.

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  25. Fun as science take second stage to the small of a back!
    Bang!
    (Well done)

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  26. You've illuminated the forces of passion from all angles. Science and love and lust plaited together.

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  27. This has some really cool imagery. Very nice write!

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  28. Really riveting words and descriptions building up to a sensual climax, talk about a big bang ;-)

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  29. I love the imagery and the music in this.... Fabulous cadence... A first kiss holds such tender memories, you conveyed that so well here. Lovely!

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  30. The combustion of creation. No matter if it starts a universe or a love affair - it's hot.

    I love your scientific language in this to describe something so physical and emotional. Great job.

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  31. Cosmic fireworks come to mind. :) I love the colors in the imagery used here. :)

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  32. You write with such beautiful imagery that feels both intense and intimate--this is a favorite of yours for me--

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  33. A poem of such excellence, Heaven. Describes a wondrous moment.

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  34. We have all of creation behind the combustion of our hormones bouncing into one another...it can't happen any other way other than how you so aptly and creatively describe it. And I love that it's really based on a first date. Sweet.

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  35. Lovely. I love the imagery. Connecting the intense mind blowing beauty of the universe with the intense mind blowing beauty of love. I look forward to reading your other poems :)

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  36. good one...your choice of words -something different from the usual!

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  37. physical and metaphysical science of being and passion so much so brilliant

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  38. I'm glad I read your comment back to Dezz. It made me go back and read this with a new perspective and made it that much more special. Good luck with your other writings, Heaven.

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  39. this was fun to read grace.

    again, loving the words you choose.
    i'm always in awe.

    xxx

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  40. I love the cosmic images and feel you created with this. So appropriate for the subject matter. Great poem!

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  41. Super visual piece. From the emptiness of the black hole to the hypercharged bursting supernova, your images live. A pleasure to read and experience.

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