Tuesday, 9 August 2011

This moment

tight
hold me
like there is
no     tomorrow
breathe the moment sigh
  kiss  each   freckle   blushing   
slow dance under moonlit night
sing,  laugh even  for  no  reason
stir this  moment not,  it's all we have





     hold  each  drop of  us,  here  lingering       
capture whispered  breath i sigh as
you kiss  each blushing  freckle
   bliss comes like butterfly    
fleeing languid wings 
hold  me  tight  as
we slow dance  
moonlit   
night  





“Smile, breath and go slowly.” - Thich Naht Hanh, Vietnamese Zen Buddhist monk

Author's note:  This post follows the nonet form (9 lines; 9 syllables on the first line, 8 syllables on the second line.. until the last line is 1 syllable).    The first part is the reverse nonet form.  
This post is for the D'Verse Poets Pub, OpenLinkNight, hosted by Joe Hesch.   Doors open 3pm (every Tuesday) EST.   Bring your poem (any form) and share warm company.  

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58 comments:

  1. Anonymous9 August 2011 at 10:36

    Interesting. Fun. Creative.

    "stir this moment not, it's all we have"

    Perfect words that go well with the image.

    -H

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  2. Anonymous9 August 2011 at 10:49

    kiss each freckle, blushing......what divine words :)

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  3. Lolamouse9 August 2011 at 12:17

    You do the nonet so well! I love the image of kissing each freckle! Beautiful!

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  4. Pat Hatt9 August 2011 at 13:04

    wonderful capture of a moment we all seek.

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  5. Drenchxoxo9 August 2011 at 13:24

    This may just be the coolest thing I have seen from you! Love it.

    and feel free to use any picture you like :)

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  6. Brian Miller9 August 2011 at 13:45

    nice...love the form...and of course the sensualness in the words...kissing freckles is a fav passtime of mine...

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  7. The Poet9 August 2011 at 13:47

    "slow dance under a moonlit night"...doesn't get any more romantic than that.
    Love "kiss each blushing freckle".

    Simply beautiful.

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  8. Anonymous9 August 2011 at 14:18

    Oh! I think this is one of my favorites! ;-)

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  9. tarunima9 August 2011 at 14:19

    This is beautiful:)
    YOu captured it perfectly

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  10. Claudia9 August 2011 at 14:21

    hm - dancing in a moonlit night and bliss coming like butterflies with tender wings...nice use of the form heaven

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  11. Timoteo9 August 2011 at 15:19

    stir this moment not, it's all we have...

    The ultimate truth in one line. Some may marvel, but we know that's what's called poetry.

    (And I like your "feelthy peectures")

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  12. Louise9 August 2011 at 15:59

    Loved the sensuality in this...very nice use of the form!

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  13. The Zen of Gavin9 August 2011 at 16:26

    Early I read the story of evil ( http://poeticdelusions.com/2011/08/09/chimera/ )
    and now I read the story of love... Oh how wonderful.

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  14. steveroni9 August 2011 at 16:34

    Kissing each blushing freckle? WOW! Mesmerizing!

    Ms Heaven, you make serious poetry from happy, lustful scenarios. And I LOVE it! (Well, I really like it!!!)

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  15. Daydreamertoo9 August 2011 at 16:43

    Very, very sensual. A lovely well written piece and, a lovely read.

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  16. Unknown9 August 2011 at 16:49

    lovely nonet, one of my favorite forms. Touching write ~ Rose

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  17. Max9 August 2011 at 17:02

    Clever and beautiful. :-)

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  18. Dulçe ♥9 August 2011 at 17:12

    Interesting metric

    hmmmmm... that slow dance moonlit night seriously invites.
    Sweetly sensual=lovely.

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  19. Maude Lynn9 August 2011 at 17:19

    This is simply gorgeous. I am so impressed with your use of this form; you make it look effortless.

    Just wondering . . . fleeting languid wings?

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  20. ayala9 August 2011 at 17:21

    sweet and sensual.

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  21. ~Kelvin S. M.9 August 2011 at 17:57

    ..ah, this is an intimate one my friend… i like how it goes in different ways in a same form… you’re a true talented writer!(:

    Brightest blessings!

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  22. Scarlet9 August 2011 at 18:13

    Thank you for your wonderful comments.

    Mama Zen: its fleeing, like flying :-)

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  23. Arron Shilling9 August 2011 at 18:36

    This felt so honest and from the heart. fine form too
    nice write heaven ;-}

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  24. Steve King9 August 2011 at 19:10

    Very nicely and naturally done within the formal constraint. The reader doesn't imagine the message being rendered any other way.

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  25. Rick Dale, author of The Beat Handbook9 August 2011 at 19:11

    Makes me want to try the nonet! Nicely done.l

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  26. Unknown9 August 2011 at 19:35

    speaking as a lady who's sadly celibate these days, you made my heart flutter :)

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  27. Anonymous9 August 2011 at 19:38

    "bliss comes like butterfly
    fleeing languid wings "

    Wonderful picture with the lines above.

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  28. Randy Behavior9 August 2011 at 19:56

    Butterfly wings and freckles blushing, made me grin.

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  29. Anonymous9 August 2011 at 20:12

    I love this double nonet, Heaven. Quite a sensual moment caught here in your writing. Well done.

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  30. Anonymous9 August 2011 at 20:59

    I love the sensuality of this...the words are beautiful, as well as the way you have formatted the text and the photo...very nice : ))

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  31. Jyoti Mishra9 August 2011 at 21:18

    creative and fantastically done.
    a triangle n then a inverted triangle :)
    u r very talented girl.

    Loved it

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  32. Anonymous9 August 2011 at 21:21

    Just love the expression of the nonets, the fragments of this singular moment of togetherness.

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  33. Anonymous9 August 2011 at 21:31

    looks like fun

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  34. Joanne Young Elliott9 August 2011 at 22:12

    Wonderful form and movement in this picture of intimacy.

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  35. Margie9 August 2011 at 23:06

    I loved this poem, Heaven.
    Beautifully done!

    Margie :)

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  36. hedgewitch9 August 2011 at 23:18

    Very nice, Heaven... a real feeling of intimacy here.

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  37. Henry Clemmons9 August 2011 at 23:48

    Yes, intimate is a nice way to put it, a lil steamy too, but invery good taste :) and very well written. Have been missing you. Glad I found you again.

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  38. Anonymous9 August 2011 at 23:51

    Wow steamy, creative and and I love the shape you've created, this was a real treat.

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  39. Anonymous10 August 2011 at 02:20

    I love what you've done with the nonet form here. Content and form convey sensuality and intimacy in a very tasteful and artistic way. Nicely done!

    David

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  40. Scarlet10 August 2011 at 07:14

    Thank you everyone for your wonderful comments.

    I like trying out different forms of writing; more fun this way.

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  41. Anonymous10 August 2011 at 08:42

    A great read.
    This looks like a really fun form - I must give it a go.
    Thanks.

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  42. Anonymous10 August 2011 at 12:06

    Hi there Haven,
    sorry i'm only finding time to write now...
    It's so wonderful to read this, it lingers lightly and lands you softly in the "slow dance / moonlit / night".
    btw - i love "...capture whispered" (all in between) and "blushing freckle".
    Nice work with the structure.
    bliss to you and yours.
    Deb

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  43. Unknown10 August 2011 at 14:11

    Heaven, this is a very good piece. Really love it. I'm really into combining the visual aspects of poetry with the words themselves. Even the white spaces between the image and the poetry's triangular form shows connection to the moment. Really again, great job:)

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  44. Anonymous10 August 2011 at 14:30

    intensely romantic!

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  45. Unknown10 August 2011 at 15:24

    This is beautiful, Heaven. I love everything about it. Well done :)

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  46. christi moon10 August 2011 at 15:25

    sensuous content wrapped up in a dazzling form! well done.

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  47. lynne10 August 2011 at 16:33

    Seems we both had kissing on the mind this week..loverly poem..
    nice form as well..
    thank you for sharing:-)

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  48. signed...bkm10 August 2011 at 17:56

    Heaven, a lovely romantic dance of words and form....bkm

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  49. Shauna10 August 2011 at 18:45

    intensely romantic, love how the
    words clip onto my tongue when
    I whispered this poem.

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  50. Lady Nyo11 August 2011 at 00:11

    I've never heard of this form before, but you did something very interesting...text and form.

    Liked this very much...a rush of passion!

    Lady Nyo

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  51. James Rainsford11 August 2011 at 07:38

    Form, content and image come together here to create a perfect whole.
    A very accomplished piece.

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  52. Laurie Kolp11 August 2011 at 09:57

    Beautiful piece, pic included... I love this form, too!

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  53. RMP11 August 2011 at 12:51

    i sighed...

    "hold me / like there is / no tomorrow"
    "kiss each blushing freckle"

    yes...i definitely sighed a time or two.

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  54. Anonymous11 August 2011 at 14:57

    Very well written and a beautifully laid out blog btw

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  55. 1ManView11 August 2011 at 22:02

    Seams like we were on the same page... Lovely Nonet...

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  56. Ethan Lambert12 August 2011 at 14:12

    Nothing interesting to contribute, just wanted to say I really liked this piece :-)

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  57. Anonymous13 August 2011 at 17:55

    Your words fit the form wonderfully...or should I say the form fits your words... ;) // Peter.

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  58. Herotomost25 April 2012 at 20:59

    These are my favorite feelings in the world....wonderful and romantic. It makes me tick.

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