against opaque skies,
man pleads heavenly
man pleads heavenly
favors from God
offering sweet fruits
spoils from the earth
beseeching blessings
wrapped
for his delectation,
chanting until
hoarse voice,
silence stared
and yawned
blindly,
he boards train,
uncaring of
destination.
chanting until
hoarse voice,
silence stared
and yawned
blindly,
he boards train,
uncaring of
destination.
Author's Note: This post is for D'Verse - Poetics - Giorgio de Chirico, hosted by Mark Kerstetter. The prompt is to write a poem inspired by Giorgio de Chirico Рthe man, his art or one of his works in particular. I was drawn to this painting, oil on canvas, Le R̻ve transform̩. 1913.
Picture credit: http://www.abcgallery.com/C/chirico/chirico6.html
blindly,
ReplyDeletehe boards train,
uncaring of
destination.
I like these lines they're moving to me.
You capture the feel of the painting perfectly...your words dance from the page painting a masterpiece of their own :)
ReplyDeleteGreat job letting your words jump onto the page from the pic.
ReplyDeleteIt's interesting, several poets tonight have focused on the aspect of silence and disconnection, but as if suspended in an eternal moment of waiting. You force a decision, put the player on the train, and out of the painting....
ReplyDeleteIt's interesting to me how he was obsessed with certain images like trains. It would be interesting to peak in the mind of some artists (or perhaps a bit scary, lol). I enjoyed your take on this one.
ReplyDelete"offering sweet fruits
spoils from the earth
beseeching blessings
wrapped
for his delectation,"
I wouldn't have thought of this, but it fits perfectly.
nice take on the prompt...i wonder sis he or not get the answer he sought...is that what prompted his peace with any destination or did he want to get lost....
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for your lovely comments. I couldn't resist not talking about that train and smoke, after I saw the fruits, in the picture.
ReplyDeleteBrian, great inputs; either one or the other works for me.
More bananas. I can definitely see the offering aspect here. There was a train in several others also. A very interesting painter, these things obviously meant something very specific to him, and your poem makes an equally solid, definite statement about these figures.
ReplyDeletefor me the boarding of the train, not caring for the destination captures the painting, the journey of these surrealism painters really nicely heaven
ReplyDeletei can picture the bearded man boarding the train and how drained he is, heaven.
ReplyDeleteI like this line:
ReplyDelete"man pleads heavenly
favors from God..."
I'm drawn to the painting, too.
I like this line, as well:
"offering sweet fruits
spoils from the earth
beseeching blessings
wrapped
for his delectation"
I think what I've enjoyed most this evening...awesome poetry aside...is the many varying interpretations of the works. I've certainly looked at a few differently, such as I will now regard this one.
ReplyDeleteBanana train
ReplyDeletesurreal refrain ...
Sorry, couldn't help myself! :-)
Lovely offering, Heaven. You've captured quite nicely the futility of sacrifices to the old gods.
David
This is an interesting interpretation, loved the ending especially. Great read.
ReplyDeleteHi Heaven,
ReplyDeleteI think your write was great - you capture the metaphysical/surreal theme and feeling with some well chosen lines - 'wrapped for his delectation' was standout.
This poem exudes an eerie charm
(my first post as the real me)
I appreciate the manner you took here. Quite a novel inspiration. Really good write and read:)
ReplyDeleteAh, so you see this as a sacrifice to the Gods?
ReplyDeleteHeaven I am seeing your working mature with each write. This was tight, strong, with meaning supporting the images. Very well done!
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