Thursday, 25 August 2011

Lemon Kiss




fresh lemon slice
swirls in mouth
juice breaking pore

boldly, soft lips
touch softer lips
eyes closed,
unmindful 
intersection of noses

smooth cheek on
pine-needled cheek,
pink tongue curls,
duels in
heady exploration

  tequila scents,  
hands lost in
smooth long tresses

drowning
in
salty brine
of ocean’s bed

until breathless
eyes glazing


intoxicated


first kiss


Author's Note:   Tell a story in 55 words.  
To read more,  please see G-man.  
I find this exercise very helpful G-man.


Also for The Gooseberry Garden, the prompt is The Kiss.   (I should clarify, I wrote about first passionate kiss)

41 comments:

  1. That darn Booze!!!
    Always the best Ice-Breaker...
    Loved your 55 Heaven.
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

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  2. very lemony post :D
    well.. it was witty n well written !!

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  3. mmm that is a nice kiss...the ocean...a stiff drink...a little of each in those lips...

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  4. Very nice. I'll have what they're having...

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  5. Well written and creative as always...

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  6. Oh, this is excellent! Brings back fine memories of a certain time when ...

    I especially love: smooth cheek on pine-needled cheek,

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  7. just tweeted... I really like this poem, brings back some memories... lovely images, nice structure, turns on the senses...
    I esp. love these lines:
    hands lost in smooth long tresses... until breathless eyes glazing - intoxicated - first kiss

    have a great weekend ;)
    deb

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  8. I was a bit too young to imbibe when I had my first kiss.

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  9. Lovely poem. Excellent work.


    Melanie

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  10. Nothing quite as exhilerating at that first kiss.
    Lovely!

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  11. Mmmm. I could taste that kiss.

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  12. This is another piece of heaven you've captures so very well.
    great 55er!

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  13. I must get Ada one of those drinks...

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  14. a fun ride. what flavor. your words along with the art. you got my mind off the lemon for a moment with the lips but it's the lemon i taste i come away with.
    rather refreshing:)

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  15. I would have closed my eyes while I read this but then it would have been kinda hard to see the words.

    Duh. Yeah it's midnight and I'm tired, can you tell?

    What I'm getting at, is this is very visual. After reading it I can close my eyes and see the scene quite clearly. The beauty of it though is that I also see it with my eyes open, which to me is a sign that a piece has hit its mark.

    Love this. <3

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  16. Your first kiss was all that...? WOW!

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  17. Very intoxicating write, can see the scene as one reads, nice!

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  18. fun scenario! the photo made me wish it was time for drinks (:

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  19. a lemony sweet and sour kiss ... very well done. :)

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  20. hmm...tequila, lemon and soft lips...sounds like a good combo to me..

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  21. That is quite the first kiss! Very sensual. Thank you for visiting my blog!

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  22. very sensual piece of writing. i would like a tequila too. :)

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  23. By the third verse, you had me there and reminded me of my own first kiss - lovely.

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  24. My first kiss with my true love, and you just wrote it down in words.

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  25. A perfect blend of two things--the drink and the kiss. Very well done!

    my poem this week: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/28/forever-changed-2/

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  26. A lovely poem, a great read and, it sounds like it was a tremendous first kiss!

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  27. hmmm... sweet heaven.. :) thank you for sharing this. my entry: http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2009/11/24/fluttering-in-an-envelope/

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  28. Been there done that :) nicely done

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  29. Nicely done! I enjoyed it a lot. Blessings...

    Here's my offering: http://terri0729.wordpress.com/2011/08/29/soul-kiss/

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  30. Beautiful write. It's sharp and pulls the air out of my lungs. Lovely!

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  31. Definitely a sizzling write!

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