fresh lemon slice
swirls in mouth
juice breaking pore
boldly, soft lips
touch softer lips
eyes closed,
unmindful
intersection of noses
smooth cheek on
pine-needled cheek,
pink tongue curls,
duels in
heady exploration
tequila scents,
hands lost in
smooth long tresses
drowning
in
salty brine
of ocean’s bed
until breathless
eyes glazing
intoxicated
first kiss
Also for The Gooseberry Garden, the prompt is The Kiss. (I should clarify, I wrote about first passionate kiss)
That darn Booze!!!
ReplyDeleteAlways the best Ice-Breaker...
Loved your 55 Heaven.
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G
very lemony post :D
ReplyDeletewell.. it was witty n well written !!
mmm that is a nice kiss...the ocean...a stiff drink...a little of each in those lips...
ReplyDeleteVery nice. I'll have what they're having...
ReplyDeleteWell written and creative as always...
ReplyDeleteOh, this is excellent! Brings back fine memories of a certain time when ...
ReplyDeleteI especially love: smooth cheek on pine-needled cheek,
just tweeted... I really like this poem, brings back some memories... lovely images, nice structure, turns on the senses...
ReplyDeleteI esp. love these lines:
hands lost in smooth long tresses... until breathless eyes glazing - intoxicated - first kiss
have a great weekend ;)
deb
Mmm! I'm licking my lips! ;-)
ReplyDeleteI was a bit too young to imbibe when I had my first kiss.
ReplyDeleteLovely poem. Excellent work.
ReplyDeleteMelanie
Nothing quite as exhilerating at that first kiss.
ReplyDeleteLovely!
Gorgeous write!
ReplyDeleteMmmm. I could taste that kiss.
ReplyDeleteThis is another piece of heaven you've captures so very well.
ReplyDeletegreat 55er!
I must get Ada one of those drinks...
ReplyDeleteNice one!
ReplyDeletecute and sweet.
ReplyDeletea fun ride. what flavor. your words along with the art. you got my mind off the lemon for a moment with the lips but it's the lemon i taste i come away with.
ReplyDeleterather refreshing:)
I would have closed my eyes while I read this but then it would have been kinda hard to see the words.
ReplyDeleteDuh. Yeah it's midnight and I'm tired, can you tell?
What I'm getting at, is this is very visual. After reading it I can close my eyes and see the scene quite clearly. The beauty of it though is that I also see it with my eyes open, which to me is a sign that a piece has hit its mark.
Love this. <3
Your first kiss was all that...? WOW!
ReplyDeleteVery intoxicating write, can see the scene as one reads, nice!
ReplyDeletefun scenario! the photo made me wish it was time for drinks (:
ReplyDeletea lemony sweet and sour kiss ... very well done. :)
ReplyDeletehmm...tequila, lemon and soft lips...sounds like a good combo to me..
ReplyDeleteThat is quite the first kiss! Very sensual. Thank you for visiting my blog!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful impressions...
ReplyDeletevery sensual piece of writing. i would like a tequila too. :)
ReplyDeleteBy the third verse, you had me there and reminded me of my own first kiss - lovely.
ReplyDeleteMy first kiss with my true love, and you just wrote it down in words.
ReplyDeleteHow could it get any better?
ReplyDeleteperfect!
ReplyDeleteA perfect blend of two things--the drink and the kiss. Very well done!
ReplyDeletemy poem this week: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/28/forever-changed-2/
romantic and fun.
ReplyDeleteA lovely poem, a great read and, it sounds like it was a tremendous first kiss!
ReplyDeletehmmm... sweet heaven.. :) thank you for sharing this. my entry: http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2009/11/24/fluttering-in-an-envelope/
ReplyDeleteBeen there done that :) nicely done
ReplyDeleteNicely done! I enjoyed it a lot. Blessings...
ReplyDeleteHere's my offering: http://terri0729.wordpress.com/2011/08/29/soul-kiss/
A very slick write!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful write. It's sharp and pulls the air out of my lungs. Lovely!
ReplyDeleteDefinitely a sizzling write!
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