Thursday, 25 August 2011

Lemon Kiss




fresh lemon slice
swirls in mouth
juice breaking pore

boldly, soft lips
touch softer lips
eyes closed,
unmindful 
intersection of noses

smooth cheek on
pine-needled cheek,
pink tongue curls,
duels in
heady exploration

  tequila scents,  
hands lost in
smooth long tresses

drowning
in
salty brine
of ocean’s bed

until breathless
eyes glazing


intoxicated


first kiss


Author's Note:   Tell a story in 55 words.  
To read more,  please see G-man.  
I find this exercise very helpful G-man.


Also for The Gooseberry Garden, the prompt is The Kiss.   (I should clarify, I wrote about first passionate kiss)
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40 comments:

  1. G-Man25 August 2011 at 21:35

    That darn Booze!!!
    Always the best Ice-Breaker...
    Loved your 55 Heaven.
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

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  2. Jyoti Mishra25 August 2011 at 21:54

    very lemony post :D
    well.. it was witty n well written !!

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  3. Brian Miller25 August 2011 at 22:28

    mmm that is a nice kiss...the ocean...a stiff drink...a little of each in those lips...

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  4. Mijayami26 August 2011 at 00:49

    Very nice. I'll have what they're having...

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  5. 1ManView26 August 2011 at 02:24

    Well written and creative as always...

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  6. Lydia26 August 2011 at 04:22

    Oh, this is excellent! Brings back fine memories of a certain time when ...

    I especially love: smooth cheek on pine-needled cheek,

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  7. Unknown26 August 2011 at 11:07

    just tweeted... I really like this poem, brings back some memories... lovely images, nice structure, turns on the senses...
    I esp. love these lines:
    hands lost in smooth long tresses... until breathless eyes glazing - intoxicated - first kiss

    have a great weekend ;)
    deb

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  8. Anonymous26 August 2011 at 11:19

    Mmm! I'm licking my lips! ;-)

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  9. Monkey Man26 August 2011 at 12:04

    I was a bit too young to imbibe when I had my first kiss.

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  10. Cassiopeia Rises26 August 2011 at 13:33

    Lovely poem. Excellent work.


    Melanie

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  11. Daydreamertoo26 August 2011 at 13:57

    Nothing quite as exhilerating at that first kiss.
    Lovely!

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  12. Maude Lynn26 August 2011 at 14:06

    Gorgeous write!

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  13. author.nara.malone26 August 2011 at 15:09

    Mmmm. I could taste that kiss.

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  14. Dulçe ♥26 August 2011 at 16:13

    This is another piece of heaven you've captures so very well.
    great 55er!

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  15. Cad26 August 2011 at 17:27

    I must get Ada one of those drinks...

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  16. hope26 August 2011 at 19:01

    Nice one!

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  17. Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson Barry26 August 2011 at 20:55

    cute and sweet.

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  18. Ed Pilolla26 August 2011 at 22:37

    a fun ride. what flavor. your words along with the art. you got my mind off the lemon for a moment with the lips but it's the lemon i taste i come away with.
    rather refreshing:)

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  19. Barry26 August 2011 at 23:58

    I would have closed my eyes while I read this but then it would have been kinda hard to see the words.

    Duh. Yeah it's midnight and I'm tired, can you tell?

    What I'm getting at, is this is very visual. After reading it I can close my eyes and see the scene quite clearly. The beauty of it though is that I also see it with my eyes open, which to me is a sign that a piece has hit its mark.

    Love this. <3

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  20. Dave King27 August 2011 at 04:47

    Your first kiss was all that...? WOW!

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  21. Pat Hatt27 August 2011 at 07:52

    Very intoxicating write, can see the scene as one reads, nice!

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  22. Anonymous27 August 2011 at 11:07

    fun scenario! the photo made me wish it was time for drinks (:

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  23. Celestial Dreamz27 August 2011 at 11:41

    a lemony sweet and sour kiss ... very well done. :)

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  24. Claudia27 August 2011 at 12:10

    hmm...tequila, lemon and soft lips...sounds like a good combo to me..

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  25. Peggy27 August 2011 at 14:25

    That is quite the first kiss! Very sensual. Thank you for visiting my blog!

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  26. Rek Sesh27 August 2011 at 14:40

    Beautiful impressions...

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  27. dsnake127 August 2011 at 19:43

    very sensual piece of writing. i would like a tequila too. :)

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  28. Anonymous28 August 2011 at 17:23

    By the third verse, you had me there and reminded me of my own first kiss - lovely.

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  29. Sharon Rose28 August 2011 at 19:00

    My first kiss with my true love, and you just wrote it down in words.

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  30. Liz Rice-Sosne28 August 2011 at 20:52

    How could it get any better?

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  31. Anonymous28 August 2011 at 23:36

    perfect!

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  32. Marbles in My Pocket29 August 2011 at 07:42

    A perfect blend of two things--the drink and the kiss. Very well done!

    my poem this week: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/28/forever-changed-2/

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  33. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall29 August 2011 at 11:40

    romantic and fun.

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  34. Anonymous29 August 2011 at 12:43

    A lovely poem, a great read and, it sounds like it was a tremendous first kiss!

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  35. Anonymous29 August 2011 at 15:12

    hmmm... sweet heaven.. :) thank you for sharing this. my entry: http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2009/11/24/fluttering-in-an-envelope/

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  36. Anonymous30 August 2011 at 21:06

    Been there done that :) nicely done

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  37. Teresa Marie30 August 2011 at 23:31

    Nicely done! I enjoyed it a lot. Blessings...

    Here's my offering: http://terri0729.wordpress.com/2011/08/29/soul-kiss/

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  38. Anonymous31 August 2011 at 20:49

    A very slick write!

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  39. Anonymous1 September 2011 at 09:14

    Beautiful write. It's sharp and pulls the air out of my lungs. Lovely!

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  40. Kay1 September 2011 at 19:43

    Definitely a sizzling write!

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