Monday, 1 August 2011

Confessions


if we are plain friends      
how come your lips taste like sweet
wine and cinnamon ?




i could not resist
show you my true intentions   
i  lied, i do care   
 


Taken aback by his admission, she chides him,
"What was all that talk about - I am busy, let's just be friends only - then?

Embracing her, he murmurs against her soft lips,
"I like confusing you."



Updated Author's Note:    I have revised this post to fit the theme of Friday Romantic Challenge: Confusion.  The first part is the original poetry (haiku) form to give you the backgrounder of the story. 

The second part is in fiction form, a short one so I don't overstretch myself.   FCA is fine as I am trying to improve writing in fiction form.   

Original notes:  In haiku form (3 lines, 5-7-5 syllables), the theme for Haiku Heights is Confession. 

After almost 4 months into blogging, I feel I have grown so much from joining communities and reading a lot of writing / blogs.  Free verse is still my favourite form, but haiku is growing on me.   Thanks for your kind words and visit ~  

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44 comments:

  1. Pat Hatt1 August 2011 at 09:21

    nicely played, funny how some say one thing and mean another, if only all the bs would just go away.

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  2. Anonymous1 August 2011 at 09:23

    ah, sweet wine and cinommon...perfection :)

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  3. totomai1 August 2011 at 09:45

    very sensual.

    cinammon is a fave of mine :-)

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  4. Brian Miller1 August 2011 at 10:36

    nice...love the contraction in the second part...oh how easy it is to mince words once that heat begins between friends...

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  5. kelvin s.m.1 August 2011 at 10:42

    …both Haikus are wrapped with strong emotions enough to silent a mockingbird... wine and cinnamon raised the first one in its full essence.. while the second one is set in lower deep tone.. very well done!(:

    ~kelvin

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  6. bttrflyscar1 August 2011 at 11:06

    mmm lovely.


    http://bttrflyscar.blogspot.com/2011/07/confession.html

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  7. Scarlet1 August 2011 at 11:07

    Thanks so much for your lovely words...*hugs*

    I see that my total page views hit 11,111 ~ cool! Thanks for the visit.

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  8. PremI1 August 2011 at 11:17

    confessing to love...
    sensuous!

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  9. ninotaziz1 August 2011 at 11:27

    Some of the most common yet complicated relationships are based on these moments.

    How utterly tantalising!

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  10. Anonymous1 August 2011 at 13:42

    wine and cinnamon -- hmmm! *licking lips*

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  11. Chris G.1 August 2011 at 13:45

    Well, some friendships certainly do blossom into the sweetest of temptations...sounds like a deliciously sensuous coming together, too.

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  12. 1ManView1 August 2011 at 14:02

    Nice Haiku's ....

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  13. tarunima1 August 2011 at 14:44

    Oooo what a lovely haiku:)

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  14. Kat1 August 2011 at 14:48

    Beautiful....and it rings true in my life, too. Thank you for this. :-)

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  15. Margie1 August 2011 at 19:27

    Awesome writings!
    Heaven, you are trying so many different styles of writing and doing so well!
    Bravo!

    Margie :)

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  16. kaykuala1 August 2011 at 20:18

    Haiku and love, they seemed to be so compatible. Your offerings make my memories go back to years ago, those tender moments shared, whispering sweet nothings!

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  17. Drenchxoxo1 August 2011 at 20:41

    You are always such a joy to read.

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  18. G-Man1 August 2011 at 21:56

    Not to mention your prowess at writing Flash 55's

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  19. void2 August 2011 at 02:32

    this poem is beautiful! and I love the photos you display on your blog! :)

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  20. Emeniano A Somoza Jr2 August 2011 at 02:42

    beautiful honest self-exploratory write...

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  21. jabblog2 August 2011 at 07:42

    'I lied, I do care' - says it all about the convolutions of romance.

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  22. Anonymous2 August 2011 at 11:27

    Wow steamy what a great read !

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  23. Someone is Special2 August 2011 at 12:32

    wow.. I love it.. heavenly..

    Someone is Special

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  24. Anonymous2 August 2011 at 13:56

    Well written, enjoyed the word play.

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  25. The Write Girl2 August 2011 at 21:37

    My, so full of romance. A joy to read!!

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  26. Live2cherish2 August 2011 at 23:19

    Wine and cinnamon :)Lovely read.

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  27. Anonymous3 August 2011 at 00:56

    i wish i could write like this.

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  28. Dishilicious3 August 2011 at 01:48

    nicely written, brought a smile to my place. i can relate ;)

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  29. Saya3 August 2011 at 07:13

    terrific and sensuous :) great read..

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  30. Anonymous3 August 2011 at 08:20

    A great read.
    Love the connection between the photo and the poetry.

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  31. Magical Mystical Teacher3 August 2011 at 22:21

    This is a delicious confession--and confection!

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  32. Anonymous6 August 2011 at 01:07

    Mmmmm - what a delicious confession!

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  33. Vinay Leo R.6 August 2011 at 03:47

    sensuous, romantic and somewhat tasty confession, Heaven :) glad that haiku is growing on you :D

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  34. The Poet11 August 2011 at 21:28

    Hello.
    I am in the land of the unknown when it comes to all these poetry forms.
    I do like the opening lines though. I think we've all said one thing and meant something else at some point in time.
    I like the underlying sensual tone too. The image is perfect for the piece.

    Nicely done, Heaven!

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  35. Denise Covey 11 August 2011 at 23:16

    Hey Heaven, sensuous seems to be the word. Clever how you manipulated this to fit the theme. Tasty lips. hmm...

    Denise

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  36. Francine Howarth12 August 2011 at 06:37

    Hi,

    Love the coyness of saying one thing whilst another coquettish in mind. Both examples beautiful in own right!

    I adore Cinnamon biscuits/cakes, and sprinkled on custard let alone added to curried dishes! ;)

    best
    F

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  37. Unknown12 August 2011 at 15:32

    Hi,
    Yes, this is a very sensuous text! I am no expert on poetry, but I really like your haiku. (Great that you could combine several memes here!) You say so much with so few words.
    Fits the theme "Confused", perfectly.
    I agree with Jabblog's comment, the line 'I lied, I do care' says so much.

    Best wishes,
    Anna
    Anna's RFW No 14 - "Confused"

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  38. Li12 August 2011 at 18:16

    That all linked rather nicely! I enjoy both haiku and flash, so it was nice to see this combo, one playing off of the other. Nice!

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  39. Anonymous13 August 2011 at 11:20

    Piercing lines. .from beginning to end. Beautifully done.

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  40. Ruth Madison13 August 2011 at 13:00

    Poetry and poetic prose so beautifully melded. My favorite bit: "i lied, i do care"

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  41. J.L. Campbell13 August 2011 at 23:16

    Heaven,

    It's great that you convey so much in so few words. Wish I had that talent.

    Embracing her close, he murmurs against her soft lips, - In terms of the line above, I was thinking that if it doesn't mess with your poetry flow (about which I know absolutely nothing) you could leave out 'close', since embracing her would be drawing her close. Hope this helps and that I haven't confused you.

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  42. Scarlet14 August 2011 at 08:20

    Thank you for the feedback.

    JL Campbell, I have edited it.

    I appreciate all your inputs.

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  43. Ms. Queenly14 August 2011 at 19:31

    I see the appeal, though I sometimes find guys who do that kind of thing annoying--it tests my patience and my sense of being true to yourself. Nice work ~ MsQ

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  44. Unknown17 August 2011 at 15:55

    I've added a postscript to my post.
    Visiting is optional.
    Best wishes,
    Anna
    Anna's RFW No 14 - "Confused"

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