Saturday 6 July 2013

Sonnet: Hungry eyes




How is it possible that no sounds come 
from your red lips, but I can hear the cadence,
lilt & fall of your words, weaving a spell, fragrant
as tulips & delicate as your thumbs 

 Lingering over my verses like dewdrops.  Drum-
ming fingers whisper as I catch each sentence, 
smooth as beads, twined of summer &  patience.  
My hands braille your face, golden as our wedding bands.

 I want to leap & curl between the spaces of us -
I want to drink & drown in this heady brew -
Of these & more, I will gladly profess:

 You nourish me with your hungry eyes.
Speak in any language, my heart follows you
like the sun, blooming yellow & new of us.

Posted for Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - Sonnet challenge by Kerry
and Tulips by Hannah - The title was my inspiration ~
Shared with Poets United

 I quietly watched this middle aged couple, communicate in sign language during the train ride ~  It enthralled me to no end ~  

 Thanks for the visit ~  
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48 comments:

  1. grapeling6 July 2013 at 23:06

    !!! If I had words they're not enough.

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  2. Scarlet6 July 2013 at 23:08

    Just one word is enough, Michael ~

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  3. Brian Miller6 July 2013 at 23:13

    smiles. very nice grace...the longing in this is palpable...the use of braille as a verb...smiles...i like...the last two stanza as well...there is much energy there...

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  4. Maude Lynn7 July 2013 at 00:09

    "twined of summer & patience. "

    Wow.

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    1. Scarlet7 July 2013 at 07:21

      Thanks MZ ~ The red beads caught my attention too ~

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  5. Helen7 July 2013 at 00:12

    The fact that you were enthralled watching the couple sign ... speaks volumes about the depth of your emotions ... as does the poetry you write.

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  6. Margaret7 July 2013 at 01:25

    Gorgeous and I recognize quite a bit of imagery from the tulip here (I just researched the hell out of it for my poem :)

    , fragrant
    as tulips & delicate as your thumbs
    Lingering over my verses like dewdrops

    What a lovely way to express sign language! So glad you were inspired to write this.

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  7. gabrielle7 July 2013 at 02:08

    'fragrant
    as tulips & delicate as your thumbs'

    in any language, this is the language of lovers


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    1. Scarlet7 July 2013 at 07:22

      The language of lovers for sure ~ Thank you ~

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  8. Kerry O'Connor7 July 2013 at 02:34

    This is just superb, Grace. Given your love of Neruda, I knew you would knock this out the ball-park, and you certainly have. I love your explanation of what inspired this sonnet (love being a traditional theme) and you wrote that delicate means of communication into beautiful words. Thank you for this amazing poem.

    I shall take these words with me:
    My hands braille your face, golden as our wedding bands.

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    1. Scarlet7 July 2013 at 07:24

      Thank you for the lovely challenge Kerry ~

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  9. Denise Covey 7 July 2013 at 05:40

    You have a magical way with words Heaven. This is so warm and touching. Love the real- life inspiration.

    Lovely to have you comment at RFW. There is no expectation that you write 1000 words. That is just the new maximum. We have a wonderful epic poet, Nilanjana, who regularly goes over the limit however!

    Denise

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  10. Susan7 July 2013 at 07:10

    Gasp.
    Your images burst with new force in this sonnet!
    The curl you speak of follows brailing! wow
    And the cadence "delicate as thumbs" fresh!
    drum drops beads words
    strung together with sound and sight and touch
    are so moving.

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    1. Scarlet7 July 2013 at 07:24

      Thank you for the lovely words Susan ~

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  11. Nissa Annakindt7 July 2013 at 07:11

    Very strong and beautiful.

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  12. Mary7 July 2013 at 07:39

    Beautifully expressed, Grace. This must have been joyous to watch this interchange which was filled with such (unspoken with oral words) love! I like especially, "My hands braille your face, golden as our wedding bands."

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  13. Outcast7 July 2013 at 07:51

    Brilliant as per usual Heaven, in constant awe at your fantastic way with words.

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  14. brudberg7 July 2013 at 08:18

    I love your way of writing a sonnet... So many great love and words of longing in your words

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  15. Lisa A. Williams7 July 2013 at 08:39

    This is so lovely, such a magical flow of words.

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  16. TALON7 July 2013 at 08:57

    This was so lilting and so utterly romantic. Just lovely!

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  17. Truedessa7 July 2013 at 09:26

    This was beautiful a reminder
    that love & communication can
    break many barriers. The art
    of listening with no spoken words
    can still be heartfelt.

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  18. LaTonya Baldwin7 July 2013 at 09:29

    lush. love like wine gets better with age. enjoyed.

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  19. rch7 July 2013 at 09:53

    Very good, love Braille your face, such a powerful yet tender image.

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  20. Liz Rice-Sosne7 July 2013 at 10:59

    You are a master of intimacy with the written word - truly!

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  21. Sherry Blue Sky7 July 2013 at 11:56

    "lingering over my verses like dewdrops" - how lovely.....reads so beautifully, and is perfected by your closing lines. Sigh.

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  22. anthonynorth7 July 2013 at 11:58

    Beautiful words, full of feeling.

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  23. Susie Clevenger7 July 2013 at 11:58

    What a beautiful, sensual poem of love. "My hands braille your face, golden as our wedding bands." Love that line.

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  24. Anonymous7 July 2013 at 12:33

    So romantic and sensual wow I love it!

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  25. Pat Hatt7 July 2013 at 13:18

    No need to say a word and yet so much can be said indeed, the cat still likes to yap though

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  26. Ella7 July 2013 at 14:02

    Magical! I have to try again...
    Yours is a sensuous dance
    Wonderful!!!

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  27. Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger7 July 2013 at 14:22

    Just gorgeous--signing, the braille -the intimacy captured here---it speaks volumes about you as a poet-

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  28. Anonymous7 July 2013 at 14:41

    It's lovely to think of the sign language couple though I think this works quite well with any "synched" couple, or couple of longstanding intimacy. Very pretty poem with especially lovely close. k.

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  29. DEZMOND7 July 2013 at 15:03

    Delightful, my dear, delightful! And love the pic too!

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  30. Peggy7 July 2013 at 17:31

    Wonderful word images here. I enjoyed reading this.

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  31. kaykuala7 July 2013 at 19:08

    Speak in any language, my heart follows you
    like the sun, blooming yellow & new of us.

    Seen little glimpses of use of sign language. But not on a prolonged basis of a conversation. More seen of desperation to solve a problem between two people who don't speak each other's language but trying to communicate! Fascinating Grace!

    Hank

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  32. humbird7 July 2013 at 19:41

    nice music of sonnet, very delicate feelings and words...enjoyed, thanks, Grace

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  33. Anonymous7 July 2013 at 22:15

    Beautifully captured!

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  34. Anonymous8 July 2013 at 11:36

    Ohhh! I especially love the beginning of this sonnet. The entire sonnet is beautiful.

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  35. Hannah8 July 2013 at 13:25

    Oh, Grace!! To marry the two prompts!! Perfect! I love what you brought in and this "I want to leap & curl between the spaces of us -
    I want to drink & drown in this heady brew," this is achingly passionate!! Great writing!!

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  36. kelvin s.m.8 July 2013 at 15:00

    ...this could be a perfect expression for one of the Brownings sonnet when Elizabeth passionately stated: 'drink to me with thine eyes...'...ah, so good... lovely observation Grace... smiles...

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  37. Anonymous8 July 2013 at 18:05

    My hands braile your face...I want to leap and curl between the spaces of us... A exquisitely romanitcally erotic poem!

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  38. Lotus9 July 2013 at 02:21

    Beautiful! I'm jealous! Being able to create a good sonnet is one of my goals.

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  39. Anonymous9 July 2013 at 04:59

    What a word - you nourish me with your hungry eyes! Very creative verse!

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  40. Siggi in Downeast Maine13 July 2013 at 17:37

    WoW ! Beautiful....have been trying to write sonnets...so far to no avail, and also of the world of the deaf or hard of hearing...this is beyond words.
    Peace
    Siggi

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