Saturday 5 January 2013

On bed of snow

@ SweetLust Blog
lay me down on bed of snow,
nary a footprint nor faded bloom

my breasts empty of secrets,
fingers bare of ink and seasonings

cover my face with salt and thyme,
rub oil and myrrh on my feet

until shadows flee unto the night sky, 
pristine in silver, then maybe (perhaps) 

i will hear the silence of your
restless drum


Posted for:  D'verse Poets Pub - Peace: Within and Without  - I have chosen to write peace poetically.  Thank you Mary for the wonderful prompt ~
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61 comments:

  1. Mary5 January 2013 at 15:12

    That is beautiful, Grace. I like this way of thinking about 'peace.'

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  2. Brian Miller5 January 2013 at 15:15

    wow made me think of a hot oil massage, deep tissue....releasing everything...until all that remains is that heart beat...or drum...smiles.

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    1. Scarlet5 January 2013 at 15:17

      Hot oil massage is good in this cold weather ~ Smiles ~

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  3. Susan Daniels5 January 2013 at 15:17

    Oh, this is gorgeous--I see you melting into peace.

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  4. mrs mediocrity5 January 2013 at 15:17

    love the imagery and sensuality, relaxing and peaceful... great ending!

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  5. Anonymous5 January 2013 at 15:21

    Such a beautiful feeling of peace - lovely poem. K

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  6. Outcast5 January 2013 at 15:30

    I love the idea of peace, especially of peace when it's a pair of lovers out in the snow. Lovely little piece of writing Heaven.

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    1. Scarlet5 January 2013 at 15:40

      I have to say though I am referring to a different kind of peace ~ Thanks Matthew for the visit ~

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  7. RMP5 January 2013 at 15:31

    the bed of snow seems a little cold, but you definitely warmed things up nicely. I hope the silence is sweet. lovely verse.

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    1. Scarlet5 January 2013 at 15:41

      I use the bed of snow as a metaphor ~ Thanks for sharing your thoughts ~

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  8. Myrna R.5 January 2013 at 16:02

    Grace, this just took me to a place of peace. You write so beautifully. I especially like the silent drum. I think the waves of stillness passed over me. Thanks.

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  9. kelvin s.m.5 January 2013 at 16:04

    ...very intimate with nature... and the breasts empty of secrets so openly free and engaging...i'd like to hover and make a dance with my li'l birds feet... very soothing Grace...smiles...

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    1. Scarlet5 January 2013 at 16:15

      Smiles back at you ~ I am dancing along too ~

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  10. Claudia5 January 2013 at 16:07

    rubbing oil and myrrh on my feet..love this...think i should get a foot massagage sometime soon..nice..love the closure as well

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    1. Scarlet5 January 2013 at 16:16

      Foot massages would also be good..he..he..Thanks Claudia ~

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  11. Laurie Kolp5 January 2013 at 16:13

    so beautiful... love all the textures and then the final image...

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  12. Anonymous5 January 2013 at 17:43

    So beautiful and peaceful...nice :)

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  13. Kate Solo5 January 2013 at 18:22

    Cool little capture of a moment!! :-)

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  14. Unspoken5 January 2013 at 18:22

    just beautiful! every line.

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  15. DEZMOND5 January 2013 at 18:33

    lovely closing of the poem, Grace!

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  16. Anonymous5 January 2013 at 19:10

    A sensual poem, lovely, thank you for sharing.

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  17. Pat Hatt5 January 2013 at 20:11

    surely sensual and will make that snow melt, which is a big bonus.

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  18. Sherry Blue Sky5 January 2013 at 20:24

    Wow, this is an unexpected take on the prompt - and utterly lovely.

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  19. Unknown5 January 2013 at 20:30

    Peace and love and connection... this is so lovely, Grace. PEACE!

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/01/05/attitude-or-platitude/

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  20. 1ManView5 January 2013 at 22:10

    Lovely use of metaphors, a beautiful write...

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  21. Dana Dampier6 January 2013 at 00:22

    I can see myself melting into the snow! haha

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  22. Susan6 January 2013 at 00:43

    The snow surprises me a little, but not the rest. Peace.

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  23. Frank Watson6 January 2013 at 01:11

    Beautiful and melodic, I see you also had a snow theme... there is something peaceful about it. Nice contrasts in images as well.

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  24. Nilanjana Bose6 January 2013 at 04:09

    Beautiful the silence of that restless drum..and snow is the exact colour of peace. Lovely and lyrical.

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  25. All About Love And Sex6 January 2013 at 06:19

    As usual very sensual and poetic. Very romantic too!

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  26. ScottlB6 January 2013 at 09:30

    Relaxing and peaceful Grace.

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  27. Abin Chakraborty6 January 2013 at 10:11

    very beautiful indeed.but with a sense of melancholy loss.lovely.

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  28. Kerry O'Connor6 January 2013 at 10:34

    An interesting mix of sensory images.

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  29. Marbles in My Pocket6 January 2013 at 10:35

    Perfect silence. Now that is peace. Very nice!

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  30. Bodhirose6 January 2013 at 10:57

    Yes, a time of peace...so beautifully put, Grace. Love the ending...well, really, all of it.

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  31. Preeti S.6 January 2013 at 11:01

    Interesting portrayal of peace. I enjoyed reading this. Keep it up. :)

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  32. aelfbee6 January 2013 at 11:17

    It is easy to fall asleep on a bed of snow, and the music heard there is from another world.

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  33. Anonymous6 January 2013 at 12:03

    Beautiful and sensual - and I love peace coming when the shadows flee away!

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  34. Victoria6 January 2013 at 14:52

    Grace, this is just exquisite. It gives me a feeling almost mystical with language that touches on the classical.

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  35. Patricia6 January 2013 at 15:55

    ...until shadows flee...
    such beautiful imagery.

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  36. Karen6 January 2013 at 16:00

    This is a peace past understanding. Beautiful combination of sensual and spiritual imagery.

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  37. Maurice6 January 2013 at 17:34

    Bravo....

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  38. Jennifer Wagner6 January 2013 at 18:43

    Lovely.

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  39. Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger6 January 2013 at 18:56

    So beautiful Grace--

    fingers bare of ink and seasonings

    cover my face with salt and thyme,

    Loved these lines especially

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  40. hyperCRYPTICal6 January 2013 at 19:52

    Beautiful indeed Grace. A pleasure to read.

    Anna :o]

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  41. Elsie Amata6 January 2013 at 20:52

    Once peace is found, it is cherished, like the fallen snow.

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  42. Manicddaily6 January 2013 at 21:20

    Agh - I've lost my comment twice!

    What I said was that this was a very good poem for epiphany - but also that salt and thyme especially suggestive - like tears and time. k.

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  43. Peggy6 January 2013 at 23:48

    Laying down in the bed of snow kind of jarred my senses but this is a lovely description of peace once I get over the icy feeling! Nice write.

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  44. ninotaziz7 January 2013 at 01:29

    I just love it when I visit here. Lovely and suggestive, Heavan!

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  45. Unknown7 January 2013 at 02:13

    very nicely done. I really like the poetic take here. The metaphoric meeting the physical aspects in here are very good. Thanks

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  46. Dave King7 January 2013 at 05:45

    A really lovely response to the prompt. Excellently crafted.

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  47. Amrit Sinha7 January 2013 at 08:33

    This is amazing ... superbly written !!!

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  48. Anonymous7 January 2013 at 13:24

    Peaceful, indeed.

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  49. just a girl9 January 2013 at 01:40

    oh. my. god. grace.

    this is beyond beautiful. honestly.
    i loved these lines:

    my breasts empty of secrets,
    fingers bare of ink and seasonings

    grrr!

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  50. cammies on the floor13 January 2013 at 20:31

    Absolutely lovely

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