Monday, 1 October 2012

The distance between us


there is a river inside my chest
    when i think of you 

one year has passed like 
   a heart beat from yesterday

some days, i make paper boats
   out of the love poems i have written 

some nights, i fold them in origami    
   stars and hang it over the silk lantern    

where the moon catches and strings them   
   like tea lights across lavender skyline         

you in the crowded, scorching city,    
   me in the park smelling autumn leaves 

across the ocean, you pass by rice fields,  

   while my nights scent of red apples and pumpkins 

i imagine you falling   
   to greet me on my arrival, kisses  

red as poinsettias, fiery as raindrops,  
   closing space, gaping emptiness, with a firm snap,  

nuzzling cheek, inhaling all our memories,  
   whilst i melt like snow    



  


Posted for:  OpenLinkNight of  Imaginary Garden with Real Toads (Monday) and D'verse Poets Pub (Tuesday) 

- Thanks for the visit ~

67 comments:

  1. your poem is delicately beautiful, so serene
    and sure of love.

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    1. Thanks for the lovely words and visit ~

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  2. so many lovely poetical pictures and images within the poem

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    1. Thank you Dez ~ I will try to write more food-inspired poems for you :-)

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  3. I loved that opening line~knew if i dared the current, it would take me someplace special, and it did.
    The poem boats were great, hanging as stars from the lantern.
    Autumn leaves and rice fields
    It was all great. Little wonder he would gladly go to his knees
    ~rick

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    1. I too love that line..the words just came rushing out after this ~ Thanks for the visit Rick ~

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  4. so beautiful and full of love.

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  5. The love sure drips away with your early dVerse display. Very sensual once more, happy day! err umm night.

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    1. Happy night to you and the cat Pat ~

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  6. Loved this Heaven--loved the delicacy of it--just lovely!

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    1. Thank you Audrey ~ I appreciate your comments ~

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  7. inhaling memories....the kisses of poinsettas is a really great touch grace....and i love the origami and and paperboats...it adds a flourish of art and nostalgia that counter balance the intimacy in this as well...

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    1. Thank you for the wonderful and encouraging words Brian ~ I appreciate them ~

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  8. Origami and paperboats....delicately-laced bridal veil of ocean maiden and autumn fruit bridesmaids. Beautiful!

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  9. Heaven, this is truly lovely; but I also sense some kind of sadness here in what no longer is but is remembered with great love.

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  10. So beautiful...there are so many times I wish we still lived in our love notes.

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  11. your touch is tender... memorable...

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  12. red as poinsettias, fiery as raindrops,
    closing space, gaping emptiness, with a firm snap,

    Sensuously beautiful! One gets the feeling that action needs to go fast, dealt with there and then! Nicely, Heaven!

    Hank

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  13. exquisitely beautiful with wonderful imagery.

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  14. where the moon catches and strings them
    like tea lights across lavender skyline

    A really effective and moving couplet i a most enjoyable poem.

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  15. I imagined their beautiful reunion, her loneliness lifted away. As always, thank you, Heaven. Be well.

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  16. This is beautiful, Grace. I love:

    where the moon catches and strings them
    like tea lights across lavender skyline

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  17. A lovely poem, indeed. Thanks for sharing.

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  18. So many beautiful images, so many possible melting distances!

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  19. Love this! Beautifully written as always :) My favorite line is the paper boat made out of love notes!!

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  20. This is absolutely glorious. I especially love the paper boats and origami strung "like tea lights".........beautiful writing.

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  21. Beautiful poem nice images painted with words

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  22. Beautiful. The imagery so soft, gentle, passionate.. just like love

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  23. Such a sense of loss imparted in this piece.

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2012/10/01/outside-the-box/

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  24. love the red apples and pumpkins scent..always good to smell a poem...hmmm.. and the paperboats from poems is a great touch as well

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  25. some nights, I fold them in origami
    stars and hang them over the silk lantern

    Mmmm....love this image. :)

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  26. Such beautiful images in this poem, Grace. A new favorite :)

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  27. read it slowly as i am imagining. love it!

    JJRod'z

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  28. Grace--yes. yes, this is how you close distances.

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  29. I love the couplets here--each one seems almost complete in itself, yet leads naturally to the next--a feeling of yearning throughout. Lovely stuff, Heaven.

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  30. This is so good, the images are so apt, and the thought is so intelligent...great job.

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  31. I like the image of you in the park and him in the city. It says so much.

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  32. Rich with detail, a sumptuous delight.

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  33. Very beautiful and full of love and longing.

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  34. beautiful Grace - couldn't single out one line above the other as they were all equally magical and enchanting - lib

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  35. Really tough to miss a dear someone like that. The awareness of the distance is very hard. The emphasis on the feeling on the chest is spot on in the first lines.

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  36. Sigh... This is so romantic and reads like a love letter. Beautiful, Grace!

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  37. beautiful, Grace. your writing is really blossoming, it's exciting to witness. xo

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  38. I enjoyed the journey from the first line to the last... beautiful images, stark and clear... you are a master wordweaver!

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  39. I really enjoyed this, but that last stanza is a beautiful thought...

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  40. So sensual and passionate, Grace. I love the richness of texture, color, and scent. Delicious. :)

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  41. This is just the most perfect piece of love poetry I have read in a very long time. Your control of each stanza is superb, and your imagery taps directly into the emotion of the poem. Thoroughly excellent writing.

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  42. Beautiful!...you are an excellent poet....

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  43. This is one of my favorites yet...... Wonderfully crafted heaven...

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  44. This is so beautiful. You know, I am so impressed with your poems. They're always about love, but always so original, sensual and sensitive. You are very talented. I can see you publishing a book of your work. Have you considered?

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    1. I thank you for your lovely words ~ I am just writing regularly and hopefully someday, I can publish my work. So far, two my poems have been accepted by two journals, Nain Rouge and Emerge. This has boosted my self-confidence.

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  45. Sweet ... gentle ... lovely ... romantic ... painful ... sad. As the days go by ... the pain will lesson.

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  46. I love the intimate trance like spell your words
    portrayed~
    It captures so many sweet, intimate thoughts!
    Wonderful :D

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  47. Oh, to feel love like that again...passionate, sensual...always thinking of the other...lovingly... Beautifully expressed...as always, Grace.

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  48. the imagery in this poem is simply...gorgeous.

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  49. hotspicywings@yahoo.com8 October 2012 at 12:45

    passed by ricefields...
    sipped san miguel...
    gazed across blue ocean...
    ...mused on lavender nights

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    1. he..he...you did, hey... thanks for the visit ~

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  50. delicate and so very beautiful. the closing lines are so perfect. very fitting imagery.

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