Monday, 1 October 2012
The distance between us
there is a river inside my chest
when i think of you
one year has passed like
a heart beat from yesterday
some days, i make paper boats
out of the love poems i have written
some nights, i fold them in origami
stars and hang it over the silk lantern
where the moon catches and strings them
like tea lights across lavender skyline
you in the crowded, scorching city,
me in the park smelling autumn leaves
across the ocean, you pass by rice fields,
while my nights scent of red apples and pumpkins
i imagine you falling
to greet me on my arrival, kisses
red as poinsettias, fiery as raindrops,
closing space, gaping emptiness, with a firm snap,
nuzzling cheek, inhaling all our memories,
whilst i melt like snow
Posted for: OpenLinkNight of Imaginary Garden with Real Toads (Monday) and D'verse Poets Pub (Tuesday)
- Thanks for the visit ~
Subscribe to:
Post Comments (Atom)
your poem is delicately beautiful, so serene
ReplyDeleteand sure of love.
Thanks for the lovely words and visit ~
Deleteso many lovely poetical pictures and images within the poem
ReplyDeleteThank you Dez ~ I will try to write more food-inspired poems for you :-)
DeleteI loved that opening line~knew if i dared the current, it would take me someplace special, and it did.
ReplyDeleteThe poem boats were great, hanging as stars from the lantern.
Autumn leaves and rice fields
It was all great. Little wonder he would gladly go to his knees
~rick
I too love that line..the words just came rushing out after this ~ Thanks for the visit Rick ~
Deleteso beautiful and full of love.
ReplyDeleteThank you Laura ~
DeleteThe love sure drips away with your early dVerse display. Very sensual once more, happy day! err umm night.
ReplyDeleteHappy night to you and the cat Pat ~
DeleteLoved this Heaven--loved the delicacy of it--just lovely!
ReplyDeleteThank you Audrey ~ I appreciate your comments ~
Deleteinhaling memories....the kisses of poinsettas is a really great touch grace....and i love the origami and and paperboats...it adds a flourish of art and nostalgia that counter balance the intimacy in this as well...
ReplyDeleteThank you for the wonderful and encouraging words Brian ~ I appreciate them ~
DeleteOrigami and paperboats....delicately-laced bridal veil of ocean maiden and autumn fruit bridesmaids. Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteHeaven, this is truly lovely; but I also sense some kind of sadness here in what no longer is but is remembered with great love.
ReplyDeleteReunions, lovely!
ReplyDeleteSo beautiful...there are so many times I wish we still lived in our love notes.
ReplyDeleteyour touch is tender... memorable...
ReplyDeletered as poinsettias, fiery as raindrops,
ReplyDeleteclosing space, gaping emptiness, with a firm snap,
Sensuously beautiful! One gets the feeling that action needs to go fast, dealt with there and then! Nicely, Heaven!
Hank
exquisitely beautiful with wonderful imagery.
ReplyDeletewhere the moon catches and strings them
ReplyDeletelike tea lights across lavender skyline
A really effective and moving couplet i a most enjoyable poem.
I imagined their beautiful reunion, her loneliness lifted away. As always, thank you, Heaven. Be well.
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful, Grace. I love:
ReplyDeletewhere the moon catches and strings them
like tea lights across lavender skyline
A lovely poem, indeed. Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteSo many beautiful images, so many possible melting distances!
ReplyDeleteLove this! Beautifully written as always :) My favorite line is the paper boat made out of love notes!!
ReplyDeleteThis is absolutely glorious. I especially love the paper boats and origami strung "like tea lights".........beautiful writing.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem nice images painted with words
ReplyDeleteBeautiful. The imagery so soft, gentle, passionate.. just like love
ReplyDeleteBeautiful writing!
ReplyDeleteSuch a sense of loss imparted in this piece.
ReplyDeletehttp://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2012/10/01/outside-the-box/
love the red apples and pumpkins scent..always good to smell a poem...hmmm.. and the paperboats from poems is a great touch as well
ReplyDeletesome nights, I fold them in origami
ReplyDeletestars and hang them over the silk lantern
Mmmm....love this image. :)
Such beautiful images in this poem, Grace. A new favorite :)
ReplyDeleteread it slowly as i am imagining. love it!
ReplyDeleteJJRod'z
Grace--yes. yes, this is how you close distances.
ReplyDeleteI love the couplets here--each one seems almost complete in itself, yet leads naturally to the next--a feeling of yearning throughout. Lovely stuff, Heaven.
ReplyDeleteThis is so good, the images are so apt, and the thought is so intelligent...great job.
ReplyDeleteI like the image of you in the park and him in the city. It says so much.
ReplyDeleteRich with detail, a sumptuous delight.
ReplyDeleteVery beautiful and full of love and longing.
ReplyDeletebeautiful Grace - couldn't single out one line above the other as they were all equally magical and enchanting - lib
ReplyDeleteReally tough to miss a dear someone like that. The awareness of the distance is very hard. The emphasis on the feeling on the chest is spot on in the first lines.
ReplyDeletebeautifully woven..jealous!
ReplyDeleteSigh... This is so romantic and reads like a love letter. Beautiful, Grace!
ReplyDeletebeautiful, Grace. your writing is really blossoming, it's exciting to witness. xo
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the journey from the first line to the last... beautiful images, stark and clear... you are a master wordweaver!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this, but that last stanza is a beautiful thought...
ReplyDeleteOh, I love this. So aching.
ReplyDeleteSweet sensuality. Lovely!
ReplyDeleteSo sensual and passionate, Grace. I love the richness of texture, color, and scent. Delicious. :)
ReplyDeleteThis is just the most perfect piece of love poetry I have read in a very long time. Your control of each stanza is superb, and your imagery taps directly into the emotion of the poem. Thoroughly excellent writing.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful!...you are an excellent poet....
ReplyDeleteThis is beautifully composed.
ReplyDeleteThis is one of my favorites yet...... Wonderfully crafted heaven...
ReplyDeleteThis is so beautiful. You know, I am so impressed with your poems. They're always about love, but always so original, sensual and sensitive. You are very talented. I can see you publishing a book of your work. Have you considered?
ReplyDeleteI thank you for your lovely words ~ I am just writing regularly and hopefully someday, I can publish my work. So far, two my poems have been accepted by two journals, Nain Rouge and Emerge. This has boosted my self-confidence.
DeleteSweet ... gentle ... lovely ... romantic ... painful ... sad. As the days go by ... the pain will lesson.
ReplyDeleteI love the intimate trance like spell your words
ReplyDeleteportrayed~
It captures so many sweet, intimate thoughts!
Wonderful :D
Oh, to feel love like that again...passionate, sensual...always thinking of the other...lovingly... Beautifully expressed...as always, Grace.
ReplyDeleteLovely Heaven, really lovely.
ReplyDeletethe imagery in this poem is simply...gorgeous.
ReplyDeletepassed by ricefields...
ReplyDeletesipped san miguel...
gazed across blue ocean...
...mused on lavender nights
he..he...you did, hey... thanks for the visit ~
Deletedelicate and so very beautiful. the closing lines are so perfect. very fitting imagery.
ReplyDeleteshhhhhhh...
ReplyDelete