brush of cold wind
sapping my skin, dry of wine
into wrinkled flesh, sunken cheeks
of black crow in dwindling sunset,
amber eyes glint - sharpened blade -
on driftwood, an oil lamp waiting
for striking match to burn
every autumn leaf falling,
until nothing but grey sky and ash linger
on boat empty of voices -
your charcoal pelt, slippery and wet
of deadly things
pressing down my chest,
i cry out your name -
on dry throat and swallowed tide -
above me you are
all the verses I want to write
but your fearless lips are drowning
me,
slowly -
bitter black sea
Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - Poetics - Poeticaphobia - hosted by Stuart McPherson ~
I have a fear of falling and drowning in the open sea.
Shared with Poets United: Poetry Pantrypicture credit: here
There is a fear of dealing/living with the fearless. Trying to decipher if fearlessness is confidence or something to actually fear. Made me think of a lot. Great write.
ReplyDeleteThat is a lovely insight ~ Thanks for the visit ~
Deleteabove me you are
ReplyDeleteall the verses I want to write
but your fearless lips are drowning
me,
slowly - nice...love that section with your poem....very real fears as well grace...often the dreams or nightmares of something happening to my kids has to do with them falling....drowning would be such a terrible way to go to...oy...all too real...
Thank you Brian ~ It's one of my nightmares ~
DeleteI love this, the black enclosing sea... But I'm kinda scared to take the bath I was planning tonight now... ;)
ReplyDeleteThank you ~ I don't fear the bath but the cold and icy water ~
Deleteto describe the sea as a charcoal pelt...your descriptors in this are absolutely on point! and as such you put your sentiment across so well, and with great personalisation... I love the sea...but its vastness, its weight scares the bejeesus out of me
ReplyDeleteYou got my sentiments ~ Thanks for the lovely prompt Stu ~
Deleteabove me you are
ReplyDeleteall the verses I want to write
but your fearless lips are drowning
me
Such great lines that jumped out for me, this is a poem with crackle, loved it and the overwhelming dark sea was a great image.
Ooh... powerful ending... drowning would be horrible.
ReplyDeleteDrowning seems such a lonely way to die, whether in seas or sorrow.
ReplyDeleteYou painted this picture well, grace.
Happy weekend!
~rick
Drowning in the sea would be such a painful way to die. I have had this fear sometimes too!
ReplyDeleteEVERYTHING about this.
ReplyDeletewonderful. simply.
extremely atmospheric, Heaven! Loved the images in it and the metaphor!
ReplyDeletekind of has an 'end time' feel to it... really liked it. very dark, very good.
ReplyDeleteI love the same lines as everyone has picked out. Very real fear too Grace. Hopefully you won't ever have to go out on open sea :)
ReplyDeleteOh that is scary, drowning in the ocean or in love are two scary prospects. When I was a kid I had a terrible fear of being trapped in a car that was sinking in the river. To a point I still have that fear, not sure where it came from but that's what I think of when drowning.
ReplyDeleteVery stark and vivid phrasing here, and the sea seems more than just water, a malevolent, living force--or maybe just an uncaring one. I also would rather stand on the shore and look at the waves than be anywhere near the ocean deeps. Who knows what's down there?
ReplyDeleteDrowning would really suck, just floating there strat out of luck. Hope the sea never comes calling, if so take your own inflatable boat incase of falling.
ReplyDeleteSo interesting to think of the lips of the sea swallowing - like that - and the dark pelt like a live being. Well done. k.
ReplyDeleteVivid and deeply visceral. 'For striking match to burn every Autumn
ReplyDeleteleaf falling' - now that's a breath-taking line.
Drowning...I came so close. I can still remember being pulled up from the bottom of the pool. Such a palpable feeling of fear in this one. great write Grace!
ReplyDeletethere's such beauty in the sea but also immense power and i always feel small.. i can understand that fear
ReplyDeleteStanzas 4 and 6 are my favorites. Beautiful work, Grace.
ReplyDeletei hope you don't live close to an ocean! great take on the prompt, Heaven!
ReplyDeletehave a lovely Sunday!
♥
above me you are all the verses I want to write...fantastic. Vastness is deadly attractive and plain deadly as well..thanks
ReplyDeleteThe sea gives and the the sea takes so this fear of waves pulling away the light a grounded one
ReplyDeleteFear of drowning picturesquely drawn in your words.
ReplyDeleteI especially loved the last stanza! :)
what a beautiful picture you're painted today... really enjoy the read... odd fear could be glamorous, but you've done that
ReplyDeleteWhen I'm by the ocean, the sight of it's enormous size touches a fear within me. I guess it's because it has so much power. Love your poem. It really captures your 'respect' for the ocean.
ReplyDeleteWhat a powerful write. You've tapped into something so primordial, visceral. Wow!
ReplyDeleteThis really touched me... you made the feelings become visceral...
ReplyDeleteall the verses I want to write
but your fearless lips are drowning
me,
slowly -
bitter black sea
i especially loved the image of "boat empty of voices."very effectively crafted.
ReplyDeleteThis is one of your best - fantastic images, and mood. Takes the reader deep, just like the waves.
ReplyDeleteReally fantastic imagery as usual and a killer ending ;-)
ReplyDeleteYou need not have told us your fear... the piece mad it very clear. Well done.
ReplyDeleteSo many wonderful images! I love on a boat empty of voices, very chilling--I fear drowning too. You captured this quite well.
ReplyDeleteThe imagery was absolutely beautiful ... Wonderful piece...
ReplyDeletePeace and love
1Manview ...
Wonderful imagery Heaven! I love the sea. It has a lot of fascination to me. I had many exploits relating to the sea in my other blog, birdhouse! Nicely!
ReplyDeleteHank
fear is deeply entrenched in your words...
ReplyDeleteI agree with Shadow....'phobia' is deeply entrenched in every line--the concluding part left me awestruck! Beautiful..
ReplyDeleteI'm always in awe of your way with metaphor.
ReplyDeleteA real fear of that most powerful pressure itself; the sea bearing down...A frightening thought...
ReplyDeleteEileen
You are fearless in your tone of writing.
ReplyDeleteSummons up the prick of wine, and sea.