I wake up to flickering dawn
Heartbeat slow and measured
In the pale glimmer, I could not
See the careless strewn clothes
On the floor and chair, somewhere
Along the night’s careless pulse,
When your dazed eyes bore into mine,
Bright with passion, your lips quiver
My bold surrender and anticipation
Just me, only me, in your arms
I whisper your name, but you are quiet,
Sober and uninterested in the morning after
Embrace, like an unmoored ship in briny sea
Kited to the soaring eagle; no, I am not
The anchor you want, just a journey’s stop
As you slip out under wrinkled bedcovers,
Hurriedly putting on your clothes,
You don’t say goodbye, just a glance
To me, yes me, whose arms cradled your rest
And whose lips bloomed your music, until
You hear it strong and lusty to stir
Your restless limbs for another adventure,
New lands to conquer, far and away
Before the door closes, your gaze is on
The faraway blue, and I,
The faraway blue, and I,
Don’t make a move to stop you
Author's note: Because it is very cold and minus 14 today; and I would rather be in bed. Smiles. Posted for D'Verse Poets Pub - OpenLinkNight - every Tuesday starting at 3pm EST.
Author's note: Because it is very cold and minus 14 today; and I would rather be in bed. Smiles. Posted for D'Verse Poets Pub - OpenLinkNight - every Tuesday starting at 3pm EST.
Poetry form: Aubade - is a morning love song (as opposed to a serenade, which is in the evening), or a song or poem about lovers separating at dawn. Some aubades are bittersweet, some are yearning, and others are mere proddings to awake. Thanks to Grace of Real Toads for this poetry form. Linking up as well ~
Sad and gorgeous...the sting of the morning after is well captured.
ReplyDeleteYou want to make me crawl back into bed!
ReplyDeleteThe morning sure can ruin a lot, quite the grand adventure to the senses though you took us on.
ReplyDeleteThe last line is perfect. You can hear the door close.
ReplyDeletesuch a bittersweet flavor, served up on the perfect platter.
ReplyDeletenice..the the night’s careless pulse... i like..and those guys are better not stopped..smiles...
ReplyDeleteBeautiful aubade but sad. Probably better off letting the door close on him, though.
ReplyDeleteah i think it all the better you let hat one go...if they got no words in the morning, they really were not that great at night either...smiles.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful write heaven. I like the form and you did a great job. Some really nice lines in here. Thanks
ReplyDeleteThat must hurt, to be so wanted at bedtime and then not so in the morning. I hope you did let him go.
ReplyDeleteGreat writing though!
a bittersweet awakening... but a beautiful example of an aubade poem
ReplyDeleteyeah! don't stop that fool.. a sweet & sour write.. and love the line, "Sober and uninterested in the morning after
ReplyDeleteEmbrace, like an unmoored ship in briny sea " great!
Minus 14 Heaven! I'd be in bed! It's 30 degress Celsius here.
ReplyDeleteLoved your poem. Love those crinkly bed sheets. No doubt your mind was on bed!
You are one of our Runners Up for Romantic Friday Writers this week!
Denise
I think we've all been there, on minus 14 and plus 14 mornings. So sad. But HE is missing out!
ReplyDeletexo
Heart-breaking, yet written beautifully.
ReplyDeletei can feel the pain in your lines...so sad. nicely written...
ReplyDeletehave a blessed new year!
Thanks for your comments.
ReplyDeleteAnthony, I like those lines too.
Denise, thank you for the encouragement.
I find the aubade form, an interesting poetry to write.
Why did this anger me? My first words--audibly--"Fk HIM!" (In the 'street' sense of the word--grin!)
ReplyDeleteBetter 'gone', than "coming back after work"!
I've wondered how a woman must feel under that circumstance? You have the female perspective so well...almost like...well--REAL!
I go with my first two words...
and PEACE!
these three lines are standout poetry--
ReplyDeleteEmbrace, like an unmoored ship in briny sea
Kited to the soaring eagle; no, I am not
The anchor you want, just a journey’s stop
Wow.... this is an awesome write! I agree with Christi Moon... I am caught by the metaphor she quoted as well. Well done!
ReplyDeleteOh, this is painful, but well written.,,very well written.
ReplyDeleteMuch too cold there!
ReplyDeleteThis poem is sad but well expressed!
Happy day!
Stay warm!
Fabulous. There must be something in the water! I loved:
ReplyDeletein the morning after
Embrace, like an unmoored ship in briny sea
Kited to the soaring eagle; no, I am not
The anchor you want, just a journey’s stop
xxxj
Enthralling, completely in the moment.
ReplyDeleteimages and words match up beautifully
ReplyDeletelike a lot, esp, "To me, yes me, whose arms cradled your rest..."
saw your "gentle night" from nov too, thanks!
Wow. You are wildly, dangerously talented, Heaven... The double entendres were so suble (but not to me)! Sounds like we dated the same guy. Sad, in a way... but I'll be back.
ReplyDeleteThe beginning reminds me of how surreal it is to make love while forcing yourself to look into each other's eyes the whole time. You vividly brought some great memories into my mind. :)
ReplyDelete~Soren
That door seemed to close with such finality...probably best that it did. Loved that she didn't move to stop him too.
ReplyDelete"Kited to the eagle", "not the anchor you want" and "I dont make a move to stop you". You tell a complete story here in one well written poem.
ReplyDeleteLove this. So true to life with its hopes and realizations. The observations are as vivid in emotion as the imagery.
ReplyDeletein love with a free bird.
ReplyDeletenice metaphors of the 'other' to a ship.
and love for the 'other' as a ship in dock.
"….the wayward wind / is a restless wind…"
nice piece of poetry here.
thank you.
It's wise not to hang on to someone whose mind is already out the door. There seems little regret here, just a brief encounter, both in agreement with the exploration.
ReplyDeleteBeatiful poem.
Sober and uninterested in the morning after
ReplyDeleteEmbrace, like an unmoored ship in briny sea
Kited to the soaring eagle; no, I am not
The anchor you want, just a journey’s stop
Wow... I truly hope she didn't want to stop him... I'd hate to think of her heart breaking.
Beautiful lines!
ReplyDeleteI especially love these:
"Kited to the soaring eagle; no, I am not
The anchor you want, just a journey’s stop"
So sad and vacant, but honest and well done!
beautiful and sad ...seemingly only one person saw this as a one night thing but beds are our cocoons a safe place to stay ....loved this thank you so much for sharing have a fab 2012 ...it can only get warmer ! x x
ReplyDeleteMen and women are such different species sometimes--it's amazing we ever surmount it; we certainly can't when there is a chasm like this. Very well-written in a cool form I have to try someday.
ReplyDeleteMy favorite flavor: bittersweet. Great.
ReplyDeleteLovely...and sad.
ReplyDeleteLady Nyo
this made me ache a little heaven :)... I am not joking but my word verification is horni... lol... happy new yer H.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written and I love how it conveys the emotions of a one night stand.
ReplyDeletesad imagery,
ReplyDeleteu shall let him go,
everyone needs a break.
my first time reading a sad one, well done.
Beautiful with all the feelings of knowing that you have to let someone go....So many lovely words, but I loved:
ReplyDelete..Along the night’s careless pulse..
Gorgeous! PS Congratulations on your award...wonderful!!
-Eva
I whisper your name, but you are quiet,
ReplyDeleteSober and uninterested in the morning after
Embrace, like an unmoored ship in briny sea
Kited to the soaring eagle; no, I am not
The anchor you want, just a journey’s stop
Guess this sailor couldn't call her his homeport once the beer goggles were gone. Or -- surprise me next time -- he just went out to pick up and bring back a amazing breakfast for TWO! In 14 below! Brrrrrrrr!
Oh Heaven this one just sucked the air out of me. Too sad for me today. (Great write obviously.)
ReplyDeleteThe awkwardness of the morning after. I love it.
ReplyDeleteHappy New Year!
An end and a beginning, too, I'll bet. We never stop looking and hoping. Very nice. A perfect portrait of a moment. Great finish to this.
ReplyDeleteRegretfully, evocative of many mornings where promise was left unfulfilled and abandoned in unmade beds. Loved it!
ReplyDeletesad but so beautiful like no regrets..
ReplyDeleteThat really is a cool poetry form.
ReplyDeleteWay cooler than that guy! I knew him, and his best friend, and his little brother, and his boss, and.....
long ago now....