Sunday, 22 January 2012

Sevenling (Woman)







she closes her eyes only because of 3 things :
listening to Beethoven,  watching gruesome films,  
& biting into chocolate covered plump strawberries


she peruses carefully museum paintings,
second hand books on sale by the roadside, 
city map and bus schedules;   at night


on a tiny bed, she lays down to sleep on her choices   




Posted for The Mag:  101- My first time to post here.  Nice to meet all of you.

Shared with Real Toads - Open Link Night - Monday - Thanks for introducing me to the form Kerry~ Poetry form:  Sevenling - a poetry form of 7 lines.  The first three lines should contain an element of three - three connected or contrasting statements, or a list of three details, names or possibilities. This can take up all of the three lines or be contained anywhere within them. Then, lines four to six should similarly contain an element of three, connected directly or indirectly or not at all. The seventh line should act as a narrative summary or punchline or as an unusual juxtaposition. 

picture credit:   From Boris Hoppek's Tokyo exhibit "Ever"  

40 comments:

  1. this poem makes me smile. great job on the sevenling style. this is my first time seeing such a poem style.

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  2. Very, very nice interpretation of the pic, and I agree about art, it's all in the eye and mind of the person seeing it. :)

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  3. I like your interpretation of this picture too..and the sevenling form works so very well.

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  4. Very effective and I especially like the last line. I personally, might rethink the word "over" in the first line of the second stanza - in favour of a comma.

    Thanks for your visit!

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  5. Thanks for the inputs.

    Kat, I have edited it.

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  6. I like this very much. The last line is exquisite.

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  7. I love this line...on a tiny bed, she lays down to sleep on her choices

    Perfect!

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  8. Interesting new form to me, Heaven! It is more challenging as we need to think of meeting the specific conditions. Might try it later. Great verse!

    Hank

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  9. An interesting style of poetry, and that last line is superb!

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  10. Well she could combine the first two. Just pop in Beethoven 3,4,5,6 or 7 and those movies will surely make her cringe..haha

    Nice use of the form.

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  11. Intriguing form.. Nicely written ... Nice to meet you The Mag ...

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  12. dang...very nice...i like the form...and that it all comes down to choices...yes it does...now about those strawberries...smiles.

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  13. Wonderfully written words .. the image fits perfectly.
    I now know a new from of poetry:sevenling.
    Thanks,
    Isadora

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  14. What a beautiful interpretation.

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  15. Heaven,
    For my poetry tastes, it's all about form and content.
    You've capture both with excellance.
    rel

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  16. Sleeping on choices... I love that, Grace.

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  17. That is one weird picture, but I like what you did with it. I especially like the last two lines.

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  18. Great take on the prompt, like everyone else I love that last line! Will be looking into the sevenling form.

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  19. This was great with that sevenling form.
    I like the sleeps on her choices line.

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  20. form, pic and words come together beautifully.

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  21. Love the sleeping on choices - and the bed IS tiny!!!!!!!

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  22. Oh my ... this is exquisite!

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  23. Cool form! That last line is killer.

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  24. I LOVE your interpretation of this image. So well done. I like how you normalized the woman, who is presented in such a strange picture.

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  25. She sounds like my kind of woman...

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  26. I love what you've done with the Magpie challenge, the oblique reference to the photo rather than the obvious. Thank you also for showing me this form.

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  27. Very good view of the prompt. Chocolate covered strawberries and Beethoven? Pure heaven, Heaven.

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  28. You are such a strong poet.

    Yummy strawberries, yummier films. The nastier, the better. I love horror, "blood and guts," slaughter movies. :)

    I really like the contrast between what makes her close her eyes and what makes her open them (paintings and books). Me too!

    "lays down to sleep on her choices" is such a great ending. Don't we all do that? Especially women.

    ~Shawna
    rosemarymint.wordpress.com

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  29. A quirky and delightful offering for this prompt. :)

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  30. My immediate reaction?
    I would like her!

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  31. Well done!
    I'd like her, too. We could look at maps and old books together.
    K

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  32. she sleeps on her choice indeed, well done.

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  33. You did a wonderful job on the prompt!

    Great last line!

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  34. Just to tip you the wink - There is and additional poem on the Trellis Truce post of yesterday - I'd hate you to miss it! LOL

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  35. I think she sleeps quite well, indeed, if her life is filled with all these wonderful choices! Thank you for introducing me to the "sevenling"

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  36. this was a delight...
    and so is the image.

    xo

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  37. Oooh, I loved learning about a sevenling via this gorgeous example of one! You mean without the sevenling that last line would not have stood alone in all it's mysterious glory? Amazing.

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  38. to sleep on one's choices-- amazing! xxxj

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  39. Where is the next one? Don't stop now!
    BTW, I don't sleep on my choices,k I sleep with them! :-)

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