take me
to the shore,
lay me down the sands
warmed by afternoon sun,
scented by coral reef spray
listen to the roar of waves,
lilt and bass of whales and dolphins
carry me to the deep end,
where fear pulses and fervor pierces,
stirring limbs into fins, arms into weeds,
awakening feral heart,
quivering for salt,
pour me,
unto the
naked
sea
Author's Note: This is a revision of this post in my other blog but the source of my words came from this picture. I live and work in the concrete city jungle so this post is just a creative expression for me. I am also participating in the National Poetry Writing Month but my poems will be posted in my other blog.
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I too can wax passionate about the sea - very nice poem, Grace, I love the shape
ReplyDeleteThank you Ruth for the lovely comments.
Deleteyes, lovely formal shape to the poem and as always, passionately moving waves of images.very beautiful with signature sensuality.
ReplyDeleteI appreciate your visit and encouragement Abin ~
Deletenice...i love the ocean...love the sand...love the rhythm...and it def makes me think of love...and then maybe some aloe...lovely piece grace...
ReplyDeleteThank you Brian for the lovely words ~
Deletewonderful theme..beautifully rendered
ReplyDeleteI appreciate your thoughts and visit.
DeleteI love the way the surf is unfolding like a blanket in the picture. Your poem is a wonderful expression of submission to the ocean.
ReplyDeleteI value your comments Kerry. Thank you for sharing them.
DeleteReally lovely and sooo sensual. You've just 'unleashed' a hidden memory. Stop it, lady!:)
ReplyDeleteSmiles ~ You should write about it ~
DeleteLove this, Heaven. Especially:
ReplyDelete"stirring limbs into fins, arms into weeds,
awakening feral heart"
Lovely!
ReplyDeleteGreat imagery, love the ocean and this flows with mystery just like the sea. (just watch that sand in sensitive areas)
ReplyDeleteI LOVE the picture...(may I steal it) maybe I will write something for it one day.
ReplyDeleteLove the words you wrote for it too :) anything to do with the water anddddd... I'm in love with it LOL....you can 'sense' how much you love it too in this.
I got it from another blog...sure, just mention the source.
DeleteI agree, its a lovely picture ~
So beautiful... you know I love the beach. The wave crest is amazing.
ReplyDelete"pour me, unto the naked sea"
ReplyDelete...beautiful, and a bit mystical and mysterious.
Yeah freeing to get out of the concrete jungle and be near the water. Guess I'm spoiled having it all the time, wonderfully written,
ReplyDeleteI LOVE this part: "stirring limbs into fins, arms into weeds,
ReplyDeleteawakening feral heart"
What a coincidence...I just went off the deep end too!
ReplyDeleteNow I want to book that beach week! I love living in the desert, but absolutely require time in the sea each year.
ReplyDeleteVery lovely....."fins into limbs, arms into weeds, awakening feral heart". Glorious.
ReplyDeleteVery much enjoyed reading this. Each line, leads one together with narrator closer to the sea, then into it, to merge with the nature of it. There's a feeling the ocean could well be the universe.
ReplyDeleteone word..."wonderful"....
ReplyDeleteooo, melikes the naked sea and everything nakes including the pic :)
ReplyDeletethe whole...
ReplyDeletegorgeous!
you really are a creative writer heaven.
You have succeeded in taking me to the sea. Thank you! :)
ReplyDeleteI've never seen the sea Grace, and I've never even dreamed about it. Your poem comes to me as I would expect the waves to. I'm also participating in NaPoWriMo, hope I can finish it this year! I'm posting prompts to my secondary blog, The Sky Clears, just in case you want to visit.
ReplyDeleteMay your month be filled with inspiration. <3
Kisses!
I've always said that whenever I move away from here, it will be to a city right there where the sand and ocean are. Hopefully I'll be able to afford owning a house right on the beach, but just being near the ocean is an uplift. Really a great job here, love the thoughts that it brought about. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteLovely, Heaven...this is uplifting of the spirit....and the image is lovely, too.
ReplyDeleteLady Nyo
stirring limbs into fins, arms into weeds,
ReplyDeleteawakening feral heart,
and your last three lines, too! A tangible hunger for the sea.Great writing, Heaven!
Just beautiful. Your words make me feel so very peaceful; and yes, your vision sounds good to me too!
ReplyDeletei almost tried to dive in! :)
ReplyDeleteLove this....I love the ocean...beautiful write, Grace.
ReplyDeleteWonderful piece--and wonderful picture--
ReplyDeletenice...love the intimacy and movement of the ocean blending with the sensuality of the moment..
ReplyDeleteHeaven,
ReplyDeleteAt your encouragement I have decided to try the open link night. Thanks for the heads up and I enjoyed your revision.
that's hot and sensual
ReplyDeletepportunity on mars
This is wonderful, Heaven. I especially loved:
ReplyDeletestirring limbs into fins,
arms into weeds,
awakening feral heart,
And everything else too :)
The concrete jungle and all of its cigarette smoke and pollution is intolerable I find.
ReplyDelete"I must go down to the sea again
To the lonely sea and the skies"
And I am.
Nice poem.
take me, sea.
ReplyDeletesometimes the first and last line know a piece's soul. so i added the comma:)
I like it, Ed :-)
DeleteHeaven, this is gorgeous. So sensory and sensual. And a shape poem too. I like Ed's suggestion of the comma, too.
ReplyDeleteI have another blogger from Ontario as my guest childhood blogger today. She writes prose.
Thanks for your lovely lines which I'll remember today.
Denise
I adore your sencerity and voice so much. Plus your beach sounds much more inviting than mine. Excellente poem.
ReplyDeleteI part like the Red Sea
ReplyDeleteYou walk on water
in this tidal love
of eighth wonder
Nice, I wish It was warm enough to go to the sea now.
ReplyDeleteSometimes it take a concrete jungle to find exactly what it needs in the naked sea whose beach can be simply another's embrace. As a sea-creature, I loved the fluid element you sing. - Brendan
ReplyDeleteLovely words, lovely message.
ReplyDeleteThis is so sensual and evocative. I can feel all the sensations you describe, from the physical ones to the emotional ones. This has a natural rhythm that carries one from first to last. Very nice work.
ReplyDelete"stirring limbs into fins, arms into weeds,
ReplyDeleteawakening feral heart,"
There's something about the sea that seems to draw one in, perhaps from some subconscious level that this is where life began. While reading can almost feel the warm sand, smell the salt spray. Love the feeling your words evoked!
Intriguing picture, brilliantly illuminated by your evocative and sensual poem.
ReplyDeleteI just love the sea...defo holds a special place in my heart. I think its always such a mysterious and romantic place so full of metaphor and comparison.
ReplyDeletelisten to the roar of waves,
lilt and bass of whales and dolphins
Your descriptions rise and fall like the waves of the sea- and this adds to the real oceanic quality of this piece. very very nice
The sea is such a place for renewal and quenching the thirst for knowldege, I see that here, to be at one, at peace, alive, most of all, awakened...
ReplyDeleteSuperb piece, in awe :) xoxo
The sensuality of your poem is always so delicately sung. I think passion should always mirror the waves, undulating over us with rhythms and times reminiscing on ancient tides. Your poem brings home that tie between earth and soul.
ReplyDeletePour me in too, Baby!! And never let me have to leave that shore. I'll take a nice little cottage there, thanks.
ReplyDeletexoxo
Beautiful! This stirs so many thoughts and moods
ReplyDeleteLove it~
Sounds pretty good to me! K.
ReplyDeletejust a word... Super..
ReplyDeletemetaphors u have used creates such an awesome imagery.. loved it
Carry me to the deep end... perfect middle line here...
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