There are words that
Bloom from your lips
Follows not the arc of the sun
But the curve of your hips
There are verses needing no sub-titles
Strung with passion stained fingers
They roll from the tongue
In heavy guttural sounds,
Primal echoes to your ears
You close your eyes
Imagining the stormy sea
The raindrops drenching your skin
You are swept in the tide
In fragments, in pieces
You don’t put together
In one coherent stanza
But leave it to seed
Nourishing native heart
Posted for the Imaginary Garden with Real Toads- OpenLinkNight - Monday
and D'verse Poets Pub - OpenLinkNight - every Tuesday at 3 pm
I am participating in the National Poetry Writing Month in my other blog. Thanks for the visit.
picture credit: http://gildam.tumblr.com/
The wave of life nothing is coherrent yet it all tends to make sense at some point I suppose, then it goes back to crazy, nice write.
ReplyDeleteThanks Pat. My writing is nothing as crazy as yours..ha..ha..
DeleteAhhh, a lovely blossoming too. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Bren. I appreciate your lovely words.
Deletelovely...nice form...and great flow as well in this...the first half of this just rips and would love to hear it spoken...really like where you end up at as well...letting it seed the heart....well done grace...
ReplyDeleteThanks Brian for your encouraging words. My native tongue makes my reading heavy ...but its something I might do in the future. I enjoy listening to the spoken words; its more passionate ~
DeleteThis is really cool. I love the way the form imitates the wave motions, and the words blooming from lips is a wonderful interpretation of the image.
ReplyDeleteThanks Kerry for the lovely words. I never saw the form as wave motions but looking at it now, it does resemble like waves ~
DeleteI love the sway throughout-
ReplyDeleteThere are verses needing no sub-titles
Strung with passion stained fingers
They roll from the tongue
In heavy guttural sounds
I like how you viewed it...sway...thanks for the lovely words Laurie ~
Delete"Follows not the arc of the sun
ReplyDeleteBut the curve of your hips"
--beautiful G!
Thanks Ashok ~ I appreciate your kind words ~
DeleteGreat use of form, it makes the words wash with that ocean feel, and also replicates the curves of bodies, the language of them, trumping the words we say. Enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteThank you Hedge ~ I have been experimenting with forms lately. It is so much fun~
DeleteLove the flow of the lines, and the way they sway down the page. I especially love the closing lines.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sherry for your lovely words. I only wrote it this morning and had to struggle to find the nice ending ~
DeleteThe words just flowed. This was lovely! I love the picture too :)
ReplyDeleteLove this, the flowing nature is not only in the words but in the helix strand, which swims down the page, yet as part of a helix, ties right back into the title of native heart. Fantastic write. Thanks
ReplyDeleteHelix strand...that is a good form. Thanks for the lovely words Fred.
DeleteSpeechless...hmmm...hmmm...hmmm!
ReplyDeleteMethinks one needs a cool shower before coming in here to admire the genius and the sensuality within. *Goes off to have a quick shower*
Funny Adura..ha..ha.. Thanks for the visit ~
DeleteBeautiful curvy form, this one. I love that!
ReplyDeleteI love how you've curved the lines of the poem, and the way that form echoes the flow of the words.
ReplyDeleteLovely. I love the curved shape of your poem.
ReplyDeleteI always say I don't really care for poems with a physical structure. It seems to be distracting or gimmicky sometimes, but yours just adds more beauty to the words.
ReplyDeletelove it, except that I don't get what native heart means, but I adore the picture too, so lovely! And the visual shape of the poem is lovely!
ReplyDeleteI am trying to think of a movie to answer your comment but all that comes to my mind is Pocahontas. Native heart is just my poetic way of expressing my muse. Underneath all the education is a native tongue, wishing to be more expressive. Thanks for the visit ~
Deleteyou really do express yourself beautifully.
ReplyDeletethis is brilliantly gorgeous.
Ah, lovely....beautiful words, heaven :)
ReplyDeleteYour curvy, smooth shaping says as much as (or more than) your words.
ReplyDeleteLove these:
"There are verses needing no sub-titles"
"Primal echoes to your ears"
Beautiful curving form- like curving hips- always enjoy your creative form as well as the sensually expressed sentiments- love how you talk about the depth of passion- like the raging ocean- those guttural sounds of love and passion- you write about lust SO powerfully....just gets you....
ReplyDeleteGrace, a beautiful poem!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful and creative. You combine the visual with the sensual and I might say the spiritual.
ReplyDeleteThis is so creative and loved your presentation of it.
ReplyDeleteOh wow! Left to be free and nurture in infinity...wonderful poem, I adore this piece! xoxo
ReplyDeleteGuttural sounds...and trying to think about baseball, or nuns, or anything to distract and help prolong this passion!
ReplyDeleteHi, I had to stop in and see what you put up on the block..I enjoyed this one soft and sensual a very nice read!
ReplyDeleteFragments, pieces...isn't that the way we think? Sorry--the way *I* think! Coherent...never heard the word. Never WANT to hear it. It seems to rhyme with cohesive--grin!
ReplyDeleteYou spin a good poem, Ms Heaven. thanks!
OH! LOVE the image...words flowing--wherever!
ReplyDeleteFollows not the arc of the sun
ReplyDeleteBut the curve of your hips
Very, very beautiful. Also enjoyed "no subtitles needed".
Lovin' this!
ReplyDeleteSuch rich words throughout the entire poem...I love this,
ReplyDelete" Follows not the arc of the sun
But the curve of your hips"
I enjoyed that!
Beautifully done.
ReplyDeleteK
Girl, you have a way about you! I loved the curved presentation, the tone of your lines, the soft voice, and the passion of intent. Just a lovely piece. This could be set nicely to cello. Inspiring.
ReplyDeleteI love how you used the physical form of your poem to reflect your words. Very organic.
ReplyDeleteVery sensual. Reminds me of:
ReplyDelete"Grrreat Love: Grip Grunt Grind Growl Gravity. It pulls you into me." a poem I wrote years ago.
Undulating.
ReplyDeleteTimeless.
Primal.
Soothing.
Real.
5 words off the top of my head this poem brings to mind.
Wonderful shaping! K.
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, the shape of this is fantastic. And the words themselves are gorgeous, too.
ReplyDeleteThis is so beautiful. i love it. The passion rides on your wave, carrying us along with it.
ReplyDeleteLight
ReplyDeleteSound
Electricity
Motion
and Love
all move in waves. . .
This is a HOT write. I love it! Every single letter. I can't pick out one part to quote....
ReplyDeleteThis is wonderful, alive and erotic. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteI like much the form and sway of your poem. Evocative and very sensuous. Nice work!
ReplyDeletenice.. i like the swept in the tide .. In fragments.. feeling in your words and mirrored in the movement of the form again..
ReplyDeleteGreat marriage of form and feeling. This possesses a subbtle and compelling sensuality.
ReplyDeleteFrom a bloom to a seed...what lovely bookend for this verse. I'm drawn into the wavey form, too. Eased through your images from start to finish. This is a very nice piece. Good work.
ReplyDeleteA lovely shape poem that really does express what looking at another person you love is like. They do seem to segment, break up into drops, each reflecting on its surface just a little of the depth of the person inside. What a wonderfully novel way of expressing it. Love the inventions of your mind! So impressed!!
ReplyDeleteNourishing native heart
ReplyDeleteVery nice!
This lovely. sustained, lilting primal cry. Stunning.
ReplyDeleteCurvaceous
ReplyDeleteIt flows so smoothly in a cascading like manner. It follows how we view a person that we care, progressively a little a time!
ReplyDeleteHank
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Astonishingly original poem. One of the coolest things I've seen in the blogosphere. And just look at all these well-deserved comments. :)
ReplyDeleteHeavenly Heaven. I love the physical shape and the shape of your words. Amazing.
ReplyDeleteDenise
gorgeous. read it several times. words like seeds...
ReplyDeletereally beautiful!
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