Saturday 28 April 2012
Poetics - Vampires
in silk and lace, she tempts
without the knowing look of a courtesan
as the one who lives in an empty wasteland,
her skin gleams of dusky plum, beckoning my touch
does she not know how self centered I am?
how evil I can be, how even powerful I can become?
there are no roses on my coffin,
but wood gored from silkworms munching dark cavern
there are no candles on the walls,
but horns hacked from animals wandering in the night
my tongue twitches for the taste of her blood,
the smell of her thighs scented of her surrender
like amber, sandalwood and jasmine on my
hands, now gripping her arms with brute force
“Drink from me and live forever."
her lips quiver with anticipation, of answers to questions
i do not tell her that all I have inside me is a can of worms
her hands are greedy to slice open
my head in the heat of passion
she is trading her idealism for eternity,
her wrinkled old face for this moment's dip into
the well of eternal awareness, my knowledge of the world
intoxicates her, power on her hands, she closes her eyes
my sharp teeth breaks her skin, the crimson wetness
trickles down her nape, summoning wild beast in my foreskin
i don't tell her my secret, she will surely die
when she finally realizes the truth of life:
"There is none."
Posted for D'verse Poets Pub: Poetics: Vampires - Thank you for the creative prompt, Blue Flute. Inspiration from Anne Rice's quotes.
Shared with Poets United.
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oh dang...what a flourish in the close...there is no(ne) truth...haha...i like that the vampire realizes that even he does not like what he has become but can not help it...that is the scary side for me....
ReplyDeleteI like the way you wrote that...there is no(ne) truth...I appreciate your visit and support Brian ~
DeleteA toothsome vampire tale! So well done!
ReplyDeleteToothsome, hey? Thanks for the visit and lovely words, Sherry ~
Deleteheck...surprising closure for sure...there is none...tough...also liked..she is trading her idealism for eternity..
ReplyDeleteThanks Claudia...I appreciate your support and visit.
DeleteVery seductive and tastefully dark...
ReplyDeleteI was aiming for the dark side of this...Thanks for the comments ~
DeleteOoooh very nice, very sensual! Vampires have a habit of doing that!
ReplyDeleteYes, very dark but then, there is nothing good or light about sucking someone's life force from them, is there? No matter how romantic modern teen novels (Twilight) has made it all sound...LOL
ReplyDeleteVery sensual, sad, Lovely.
*Shudder!* (Deliciously.)
ReplyDeleteDang, Grace... this is sexy, but what else would I expect here?
ReplyDeleteI really like-
she is trading her idealism for eternity,
her wrinkled old face for this moment's dip into
the well of eternal awareness
BTW- your interview on Real Toads w/ Corey was one of the best I've ever read!!
Thanks Laurie, I try to keep up with talented poets like you.
DeleteCorey made it really fun for me.
That your contribution (blood?) here today would be SO special, I should have guessed.
ReplyDeleteI like also Brian's NO'NE truth. Alas! How true--grin!!
SweetLust, I have believed that what is death, is really life. Maybe the proof is in the pudding--"BLOOD PUDDING!"
Heavy-Duty stuff, but your writing usually IS such. And erotic. That image is SO inviting for teeth or........
(Shut up NOW, Steve!) PEACE!!!
Ha...ha... Steve. Thanks so much for gifting me with your grins and peace ~
DeleteVery cool write Heaven. Love the way you ended the piece drink from me and live forever dialogue/answers to questions/ trading idealism for eternity/ knowledge/intoxicates, power/ than secrets--very, very cool sequence. The earlier part of the piece has some fantastic lines, typically the second of each couplet, just came out wonderful. Thanks
ReplyDeleteStrong ending there, nice internal dialog/contradiction between the vampires thoughts and actions.
ReplyDeletethe well of eternal awareness, my knowledge of the world
ReplyDeleteintoxicates her, power on her hands, she closes her eyes
you really grasp the heart of it all here. Also the idea of trading idealism for knowledge was compelling. A thought provoking write.
Great story approach with your verse, the poor vampire could not help itself is what it is I suppose. Doesn't mean I still wouldn't stab the thing though. Yes, it is an it, I hate them..lol...so true on life as well.
ReplyDeleteGood twist in the tale - "The truth of life: There is none." Good progression using the vampire legend, and an almost logical work-up to that chilling end.
ReplyDeleteAin't that the truth. Sensually clever and very heady in a high dlooar slick mag kind of way. very well done.
ReplyDeleteSurely one of your best...superb style!
ReplyDeleteI love the whole tenor of this - and the delicious ambiguity of that: "There is none."
ReplyDeleteyes yes yes!
ReplyDeletei love this heaven!
Great close especially. K.
ReplyDeleteQuite steamy, as I would have expected, but I really like the way your vampire almost shows a vulnerable side by being so aware of his shortcomings. Wonderful job on this!
ReplyDeleteSo true that what is evil seduces...we swallow the lie until we are bitter poison...love this!
ReplyDeleteOoooo. This is really well done. Love that closing zinger.
ReplyDeleteThis is just so powerfully sensual and alluring. The sexual undertow pulls me under, and its tenderness amidst such savage animality is simply stunning. As always, you've craftd this so beautifully that I'm amazed into the wonder you evoke.
ReplyDeleteYou took a big bite out of this prompt!
ReplyDeleteAnd it made me want to get bitten like that. . .
Thank you everyone for your lovely comments. I appreciate your visits and support ~
ReplyDeleteWow, what an ending, in the literal sense of the word. Well done. And I love this line: "silkworms munching dark cavern." Oh, yes.
ReplyDeleteThat ending packs such a wallop that I nearly lost track of myfavorite line from the poem:
ReplyDeleteshe is trading her idealism for eternity,
Your poem is great.
Excellent, very intriguing and intesting all the way through :)
ReplyDeleteHi, sorry for the delayed response - just having to get food on the table! Interesting tale and use of couplets.
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