Sunday, 25 March 2012

Simply beautiful


He was always telling her she is beautiful.

She sighs and wishes she can go out and feel the sun on her skin. 
She feels  like a cocooned ball, swallowed white in self pity and depression.   
One day, she takes out his unopened birthday gift:   a brush, oils of paint and canvas.  
She reads his note once more:   


You are beautiful.    

She looks at canvas with sadness and begins painting.  
First, with anger and sorrow, then with acceptance and hope.   
Her canvas bursts with tears and passion in all the colours of life.     
   
When the doctors came to take off the bandages, she didn't feel fear nor
apprehension.    She touches the scars from the car accident, her memories 
of that night stinging her eyes.      

Holding the mirror to see her face at last, she sees what he has been saying all the time.


After all, his heart beats in her core.    
    

                                                                                   image: Duane Michals 


Author's Note:   Posted for The Mag 110 - I am trying my hand in micro fiction writing and have altered the picture a bit.   Shared with Poets United.

Thanks for the visit.     

37 comments:

  1. Very nice twist. Let's hope she can hang on to her new found confidence! I liked this very much. I think your micro fiction is off to a very good start.

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    1. Thanks for the lovely words Margaret ~

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  2. well done. Very different than what I am used to reading from you. Middle stanza my favorite; all that emotion released in the art, much like poetry.

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  3. wasn't expecting that!!! nice ending.

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  4. lovely, hopeful and positively romantic.very nice read.

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  5. Unique take on the prompt...lovely...

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  6. nice spun grace....nice progression to the tale as well as we uncover a bit more of their story...i take it he is dead and she literally has his heart...

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    1. Thank you Brian for the encouragement. Yes, you got the heart of it ~

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    2. Oh, that's sad... beautiful writing Grace. You should try out Flashy Fiction.

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  7. an intriguing story that held my interest
    more please.

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  8. Great take on the prompt, and wonderful to have the microfiction element. Story behind the story. K.

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  9. Nice! That last line is a shocker!

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  10. Oh my, I was not ready for that last line. Both heartbreaking and hopeful at the same time.

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  11. The image we think is there may take a while to be replaced...
    Nice piece!

    Wander

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  12. I love what you did with the picture! Lovely!

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  13. Great piece, Grace. You should try Flashy Fiction. There are prompts everyday. The link is on my blog.

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  14. Soemtimes joy follows saddness.

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  15. this one proves you really write well...i am learning from you! thanks for sharing...

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  16. A tragedy creates a realization. It's an acknowledgement of feelings for the other that makes it beautiful. Great write, Heaven!

    Hank

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  17. i'm really in like with this one heaven.

    nicely done!

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  18. A tragic tale but you spun it wonderfully, the story feel to it was what made it for me and the emotional angle, nicely done!

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  19. we all wish we had someone that the love is so deep their heart beats in our core

    mirrored

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  20. I often wonder how much of the donor is reflected through the reciever.
    rel

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  21. Strong heart beating in your core!

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  22. The triumph of hope and belief - very moving.

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  23. Beautifully written ... I also thought about the donor heart.

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  24. Awww! Beautiful! You did a wonderful job here.

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  25. Lovely idea, really well worked out.

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  26. very nicely written and realistic
    I was there years ago after a car accident tho I have to say I was grateful to have eyes and a face (several layers of plastic surgery later...)
    have a great week

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  27. An intense and brilliant write Heaven. Perfect for the prompt! :-)

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  28. This is lovely - and we are all beautiful!

    Anna :o]

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  29. Mirrors never lies... beautiful poem ,love this so much !

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  30. Simply beautiful!!! I love that he still speaks to her even after death. Such a wonderful, touching piece!

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