Sunday 15 July 2012

Yesterday's dreams



                                                          artwork by Jack Vettriano


you gifted me with palette of colors
every brushstroke,  rushing wave  
every curved line,  weeping music 
words quivered from my lips,  
seeping deeply your wine-cupped hands,
eager to stain the white sky


now as i gaze outside the window,
every traffic light changing, falling rain  
every hour passing, wilting red poppy 
words hang precariously on slopes and edges 
of me, sharply descending into white oblivion    
   
     
reluctantly, i wait 



  
Posted for:   The Mag : Yesterday's Dreams by Jack Vettriano
and Poets United ~
Posted by at
Labels: , , , ,

48 comments:

  1. Oak Creek Ranch15 July 2012 at 10:53

    You captured waiting for a lover very well.

    ReplyDelete
  2. Tess Kincaid15 July 2012 at 11:18

    I especially like "wilting red poppy words"...

    ReplyDelete
  3. Monika15 July 2012 at 11:31

    Some imagery powerful and sweet at the same time. Beautiful tale of waiting.

    ReplyDelete
  4. Amrit Sinha15 July 2012 at 11:51

    Quite an innovative take on waiting ... loved it :-)

    ReplyDelete
  5. Abin Chakraborty15 July 2012 at 11:55

    the contrast between the two stanzas is effective and moving. great piece, as always.

    ReplyDelete
  6. Pat Hatt15 July 2012 at 11:56

    Waiting is the worst part, can take forever in a few minutes.

    ReplyDelete
  7. Unknown15 July 2012 at 12:10

    Loved it ...thank you for sharing x

    ReplyDelete
  8. DEZMOND15 July 2012 at 12:18

    colours are the biggest gift!

    ReplyDelete
  9. ashok15 July 2012 at 12:25

    superb!

    ReplyDelete
  10. Anonymous15 July 2012 at 12:35

    Nice imagery!!

    ReplyDelete
  11. Laurie Kolp15 July 2012 at 13:07

    Ahh... love this... especially the second stanza.

    ReplyDelete
  12. Daydreamertoo15 July 2012 at 13:13

    'words hang precariously on slopes and edges
    of me, sharply descending into white oblivion'
    Beautiful imagery Heaven.

    ReplyDelete
  13. Sherry Blue Sky15 July 2012 at 13:21

    Such lush and beautiful images. A delight to read.

    ReplyDelete
  14. HaikuWater15 July 2012 at 13:24

    Superb imagery slippery on the mind's tongue...

    ReplyDelete
  15. Maude Lynn15 July 2012 at 14:05

    Beautiful take on the picture!

    ReplyDelete
  16. Unknown15 July 2012 at 16:22

    I so enjoyed the palette of colors and sensations shining from this poem. Thank you for sharing, Heaven. =D

    ReplyDelete
  17. Kerry O'Connor15 July 2012 at 16:54

    An interesting interpretation of this image - it is so devoid of colour, so I was intrigued by the way you added in colour yourself and explained why they had drained away.

    ReplyDelete
  18. Gemma Wiseman15 July 2012 at 17:40

    What was...what is! But in the "what was", the stain suggests all is not to last. And the stain grows in the second stanza! Beautiful!

    ReplyDelete
  19. Far Beyond The Ridge15 July 2012 at 18:30

    I agree with DDT, loved the words worn as a garment, but just barely. Lovely write
    Rick

    ReplyDelete
  20. The Poet15 July 2012 at 18:50

    Dear Heaven,
    Such a talent you are!! Foolish is the man that make you wait...

    ReplyDelete
  21. Helen15 July 2012 at 19:11

    Your poem is lovely ... 'wilting red poppy words' ... I see them/hear them.

    ReplyDelete
  22. Denise Covey 15 July 2012 at 19:33

    Your imagery is stunning as always. I checked out your French poem below too and added DVerse to my blogging list. I'm going to have a go one of these days. Bit late for the July 14 prompt which I would have loved. D.

    ReplyDelete
  23. Scarlet15 July 2012 at 21:10

    To everyone: Thanks for the lovely words and visits ~ I appreciate them ~

    ReplyDelete
  24. Day Dreamer15 July 2012 at 21:35

    you gifted me with a palette of colors...

    you are gifted with words. I love the relationship between the two stanzas. :)

    ReplyDelete
  25. Brian Miller15 July 2012 at 22:01

    nice...great imagery and you capture a depth of feeling that culminates in the words hanging precariously on the slopes and edges...slipping off into oblivion...nice close grace...

    ReplyDelete
  26. PhotoDiction15 July 2012 at 22:10

    This is a superb piece, beautifully written and evocative. I very much enjoyed this. Thanks :)

    ReplyDelete
  27. Mary15 July 2012 at 23:01

    Very well penned....and I find myself wondering what she is waiting for, actually wonder what anyone waits for!

    ReplyDelete
  28. Madeleine Begun Kane16 July 2012 at 03:14

    Wonderful take on that image.

    ReplyDelete
  29. Unknown16 July 2012 at 05:52

    It is difficult to be kept waiting by a lover. You've got the urgency and need of young intense love very well.

    ReplyDelete
  30. Lyn16 July 2012 at 07:11

    Lovely poetic duality...white sky/ white oblivion..waiting.

    ReplyDelete
  31. Little Nell16 July 2012 at 07:38

    Some very good descriptive phrases, I especially like the last tw lines.

    ReplyDelete
  32. Anonymous16 July 2012 at 07:38

    oohh! i love this!

    and i love his paintings.
    your words fit perfectly!

    ReplyDelete
  33. kaykuala16 July 2012 at 07:42

    Very well crafted Heaven! Ever the sensuous take as always!


    Hank

    ReplyDelete
  34. J Cosmo Newbery16 July 2012 at 07:48

    Nicely put together.

    ReplyDelete
  35. Dana Dampier16 July 2012 at 11:45

    Romantic and heart wrenching at the same time!

    ReplyDelete
  36. Anonymous16 July 2012 at 13:07

    reluctantly i wait...thanks for this.

    ReplyDelete
  37. Susan Anderson16 July 2012 at 13:08

    I could see those wilted red poppy words.

    Really nice work.

    =)

    ReplyDelete
  38. Trellissimo16 July 2012 at 13:09

    Replete with imagery. Hope she doesn't wait too long.

    ReplyDelete
  39. mamtc16 July 2012 at 19:49

    Lovely poem and appropriate picture. Good one Heaven

    ReplyDelete
  40. Jinksy17 July 2012 at 01:04

    Wilting red poppy words... mmm...nice one. :)

    ReplyDelete
  41. Sreeja17 July 2012 at 03:51

    Goes so well with the pic...great write....

    ReplyDelete
  42. Anonymous17 July 2012 at 11:31

    Very vivid.

    ReplyDelete
  43. 21 Wits17 July 2012 at 18:58

    Will her wait be worth it? Lovely piece!

    ReplyDelete
  44. Lydia18 July 2012 at 03:39

    Sublime, Heaven!

    ReplyDelete
  45. Silent Otto 18 July 2012 at 22:32

    Delicate merging of subject and object, as though she had agreed to pose for the artist , only to realise with a start she had somehow become a part of the painting. Thanks

    ReplyDelete
  46. Carrie Van Horn19 July 2012 at 13:43

    A beautifully sad write Heaven....i love it! :-)

    ReplyDelete
  47. JJ Roa Rodriguez19 July 2012 at 18:18

    sad but beautifully penned... love it...

    JJRod'z

    ReplyDelete
  48. ds20 July 2012 at 11:18

    "sharply descending into white oblivion"--I like that. Lovely stuff. Thank you.

    ReplyDelete

Thanks for your visit and comments ~ I appreciate them ~

Subscribe to: Post Comments (Atom)