Thursday, 19 July 2012

the road





he waits beside car, turquoise sky, in stone-cobbled streets.

drumming hands to Havana song, he wonders if his knocks will be answered.

sun strikes ground in orange haze, crinkling crooner’s voice.          

it's been over 10 years since he left the country, still wrapped in time capsule.  


suddenly rushing footsteps, door opens, 

music welcoming, embracing him.     

   

Posted for Flash Fiction Friday - tell a story in 55 words.   For the G-man.   We enjoyed an office lunch treat yesterday in the open patio, and listened to a 3-man band from Cuba, singing Spanish songs.

Marian and I collaborated on a piece for Real Toads - 1st year Anniversary Celebration.   This is the first stanza of the road:

    Straining to hear
Broken eggshell pieces on white plate of the day,
    drops of leftover rain
scattered leaves on brown feet of the road--
    bouncing from leaf to leaf
where does one find the path on these highways?
    in surround sound--

Please read the entire poem here.  Thanks for the visit.

picture credit:  here

35 comments:

  1. Like you dropped me right into a postcard. Beautiful.

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    1. Thanks for the lovely words, Nara ~

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  2. I am soooo glad everything was as he was wishing for it to be. Love a happy ending :)

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  3. Am I in Havana?
    Grace, you are such a gift to our little writing circle of friends.
    Marvelous composition My Friend.
    Loved your 55.
    Thanks for playing so thoughtfully
    And have a Kick Ass Week-End

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    1. Yes, G-man ~ Have a kick ass weekend too ~

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  4. nice prodigal story...i am glad he found it welcoming when he returned home...know its got to feel good coming back...smiles.

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    1. Yes, it's good to come home to welcoming arms ~ Thanks for the visit Brian ~

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  5. What a wonderful story. I love the happy ending!

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  6. I like how the colors (turquoise, orange) make an extra vivid mental picture.
    Nice!

    Thanks for another Friday 55!
    Mine's here. :)

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  7. Again wonderful poem , a very good from you Heaven. Eggshells on white plate - wonderful metaphor, tell me about it.

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  8. The colors, the warm welcome... Just lovely. I will swing by at IGWRT's tomorrow. Can't wait to read the collaboration.

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  9. The 55 could have gone both ways but thank you for being it in so beautifully. I love your 55!

    Lovely to meet you too.

    hugs
    shakira


    The Dinner

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  10. I've been to Havana. You took me back. Thank you.

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  11. drops of leftover rain sound delightful!

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  12. Great 55, bringing the postcard to life indeed.

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  13. Your 55 is great- love the visuals and sound!

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  14. Love the 55 and I love Cuban music. You created a nice story around this.

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  15. Such a heart-warming welcome in the first one. I love the Havana drumming and the rush of footsteps.

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  16. "still wrapped in time capsule."

    That's very cool.

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  17. I know this is probably contrary to the gist of your piece, but Back To The Future popped into my head - the part where Marty McFly is back in 1955 (how appropriate for this!) at the high school dance trying to get his parents together. (I think it was the car picture that pulled that from my brain, because it certainly has nothing to do with your Havana scene!)

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    1. I remember that scene Bubba ~ I enjoyed that movie ~ Thanks for the visit ~

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  18. I loved the hands drumming to havanas song! Especially to that image. Nice ending too
    Rick

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    1. Glad you liked it Rick. We were just doing that as we listened to the Spanish songs ~

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  19. Music *always* welcomes :) Very nice!

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  20. I was so happy to hear the footsteps and the opening of the door. Home. :)

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    1. Thanks Ayala for the visit and support ~

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  22. Love the colorful piece; heartwarming.

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  23. How fun to listen to the Cuban music.

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