I want to be
the river
you
ink your pen in the morning light
birthing your thoughts, slumbering sky
unfurl in the summer cornfield,
swaying to windmills and white daffodils
the wind
you
trust your wings in the afternoon sun,
lifting voice, strong and joyful
carrying words, of gentle rain and peace
stirring currents to sea color and depths
the leaf
you
fold slowly with trembling hands,
smoothing lines, touching fertile earth
press warm lips come evening tide,
holding all that I am, until I turn to
dust
Posted for Poetry Jam: Rivers of Lifeand Real Toads - Bonus Open Link -
Congrats on the first year anniversary ~
Happy anniversary also to D'verse Poets Pub
Thanks for all the support and encouragement ~
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Just beautiful, Heaven! The three stanzas were beautiful; and the ending ---- awe-some!
ReplyDeleteThanks Mary ~ I appreciate the visit and support ~
DeleteTruly sweet n lovely, Heaven.
ReplyDeleteI could feel the peace, and the ending made the song~turning into dust~ by mazzy star, play in my head, which was nice as well.
Rick
Thanks for the lovely words and visit Rick ~ I appreciate it ~
Delete"the leaf
ReplyDeleteyou
fold slowly with trembling hands,
smoothing lines, touching fertile earth"
Love this Heaven...beautiful in its entirety!!
Thanks for the compliments and visit Hannah ~
DeleteIf you have love and share love, you really have it all because, everything else seems to follow. This is gorgeous writing Grace.
ReplyDeleteI agree with you Bren ~ Thanks for the visit and compliments ~
Deletelovely heaven...i love the three choices in what you want to be for them...each one uplifting in its own way...and its a beautiful enduring love you turn to in the end...
ReplyDeleteBeautiful ~~ the river, the wind, the leaf .. yes, gorgeous writing.
ReplyDeleteLoved every line of this very beautiful poem. I love the way you laid out the poem on the page, it looks great.....I LOVE the "slumbering sky". Great poetry.
ReplyDeletewonderful as usual.very interesting format.I would think of love till dust as love till death...eternal lifelong love...the best kind.
ReplyDeleteThis is awefuckingsome good !!
ReplyDeleteThis was actually flawless !!!
The last couple of lines were simply so cute !
Grace, this is just beautiful !
ReplyDeleteooh, I loved the river part, it had amazing rhythm and tone and music in it.... and slumber and rain are my fave words to find in poems :)
ReplyDeleteThis is just beautiful...loved the comparisons.
ReplyDeleteThis "shape" poem winds through a lyrical river of thoughts! Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteYou let the beauty rain down in your words once more at your shore. And when Pat turns to dust, he can be used for kitty litter, just saying haha
ReplyDeleteSuch deep emotion flowing through this, love it!
ReplyDeletebeautiful words!
ReplyDeleteLovely Heaven. I really like the format and how it reads.
ReplyDeletePamela
Oh! I want to be all of these, too! :)
ReplyDeleteWow, I love the words here, how they weave to form such sensuality. Really nice.
ReplyDeleteThanks for you kind words on Poets United. Glad you read the interview.
Firstly, the set up, the way the "you's" stack up is amazing, I am a sucker for the refrain type passages that emphasize the deeper meaning , the one that is thought and not necessarily spoken all the time. Beautiful phrasing and cadence....great work Girly Q.
ReplyDeletei simply melt when i read you.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem. I like the way you did the line breaks and the spacing. Also the photo is very captivating but kind of chilling as well.
ReplyDeleteThank you for the wonderful PJ prompt Peggy ~
DeleteI choose carefully my pictures, so I am glad it got a reaction from you. Thanks for the visit ~
Wow. Peggy used the word "captivating" and I agree wholeheartedly.
ReplyDeleteK
It is amazing that a year has passed to me too Grace.. Time does fly :)
ReplyDeleteHeaven, you've done it once again! I love the stanza about carrying words, but then again, I'm all about communication =)
ReplyDeleteThank you.
This is just so beautiful, both in form and in the idea expressed. Wonderful poetry.
ReplyDeleteIs this a second comment? I can not tell, and my computer has been misbehaving lately.
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful love poem, that--just when I began to think you (?) were giving too much--took also what the narrator needed:
"the leaf
you
fold slowly with trembling hands,
smoothing lines, touching fertile earth
press warm lips come evening tide,
holding all that I am, until I turn to
dust "
Yes!
beautiful sentiment beautifully expressed & enhanced by the way you formatted the poem - well done
ReplyDeleteVery seductive and loving
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