Wednesday 18 July 2012

The rivers of life




I want to be


the river
  you


  ink your pen in the morning light
  birthing your thoughts, slumbering sky 


  unfurl in the summer cornfield,
  swaying to windmills and white daffodils


the wind
  you


  trust your wings in the afternoon sun,
  lifting voice, strong and joyful 


  carrying words, of gentle rain and peace 
  stirring currents to sea color and depths       


the leaf
  you

  fold slowly with trembling hands,
  smoothing lines, touching fertile earth  

  press warm lips come evening tide,
  holding all that I am, until I turn to 


  dust  
  

Posted for Poetry Jam:  Rivers of Life
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34 comments:

  1. Just beautiful, Heaven! The three stanzas were beautiful; and the ending ---- awe-some!

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  2. Truly sweet n lovely, Heaven.
    I could feel the peace, and the ending made the song~turning into dust~ by mazzy star, play in my head, which was nice as well.
    Rick

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  3. "the leaf
    you

    fold slowly with trembling hands,
    smoothing lines, touching fertile earth"

    Love this Heaven...beautiful in its entirety!!

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  4. If you have love and share love, you really have it all because, everything else seems to follow. This is gorgeous writing Grace.

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  5. lovely heaven...i love the three choices in what you want to be for them...each one uplifting in its own way...and its a beautiful enduring love you turn to in the end...

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  6. Beautiful ~~ the river, the wind, the leaf .. yes, gorgeous writing.

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  7. Loved every line of this very beautiful poem. I love the way you laid out the poem on the page, it looks great.....I LOVE the "slumbering sky". Great poetry.

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  8. wonderful as usual.very interesting format.I would think of love till dust as love till death...eternal lifelong love...the best kind.

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  9. This is awefuckingsome good !!
    This was actually flawless !!!
    The last couple of lines were simply so cute !

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  10. Grace, this is just beautiful !

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  11. ooh, I loved the river part, it had amazing rhythm and tone and music in it.... and slumber and rain are my fave words to find in poems :)

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  12. This is just beautiful...loved the comparisons.

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  13. This "shape" poem winds through a lyrical river of thoughts! Beautiful!

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  14. You let the beauty rain down in your words once more at your shore. And when Pat turns to dust, he can be used for kitty litter, just saying haha

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  15. Such deep emotion flowing through this, love it!

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  16. Lovely Heaven. I really like the format and how it reads.

    Pamela

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  17. Oh! I want to be all of these, too! :)

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  18. Wow, I love the words here, how they weave to form such sensuality. Really nice.

    Thanks for you kind words on Poets United. Glad you read the interview.

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  19. Firstly, the set up, the way the "you's" stack up is amazing, I am a sucker for the refrain type passages that emphasize the deeper meaning , the one that is thought and not necessarily spoken all the time. Beautiful phrasing and cadence....great work Girly Q.

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  20. i simply melt when i read you.

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  21. Beautiful poem. I like the way you did the line breaks and the spacing. Also the photo is very captivating but kind of chilling as well.

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      I choose carefully my pictures, so I am glad it got a reaction from you. Thanks for the visit ~

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  22. Wow. Peggy used the word "captivating" and I agree wholeheartedly.
    K

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  23. It is amazing that a year has passed to me too Grace.. Time does fly :)

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  24. Heaven, you've done it once again! I love the stanza about carrying words, but then again, I'm all about communication =)

    Thank you.

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  25. This is just so beautiful, both in form and in the idea expressed. Wonderful poetry.

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  26. Is this a second comment? I can not tell, and my computer has been misbehaving lately.

    This is beautiful love poem, that--just when I began to think you (?) were giving too much--took also what the narrator needed:
    "the leaf
    you
    fold slowly with trembling hands,
    smoothing lines, touching fertile earth
    press warm lips come evening tide,
    holding all that I am, until I turn to
    dust "

    Yes!

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  27. beautiful sentiment beautifully expressed & enhanced by the way you formatted the poem - well done

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