Tuesday, 29 November 2011

Stormy nights

missed turn

third chances

unexpected rain

spilled milk 

burnt toast 

rejection letter 

unanswered prayer

miscalculated step 


unpared dream

rough edges

turbulent waves

stormy nights  

unfinished us 



i am thankful too





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40 comments:

  1. It sounds like one disappointing day but it seems to have ended well. A rather reflective mood to this poem. :)

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  2. Sounds like the day from down below. But it seemed to end on a high note, that is all anyone can ask for, well maybe not ask for, but what they'll get..haha

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  3. unfinished us...nice turn of phrase there...sounds like a rather frustrating day...glad you can still be thankful...

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  4. Thank you for your lovely comments. This is my reaction to some of poems I have read last week. I think we need to be thankful not only of the good times, and the things we have, but also for the "storms" in our lives. Because they make us who we are today ~

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  5. nice style of writing...loved the way you have ended it...

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  6. it's good to be thankful in all circumstances.

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  7. Your terse lines hit the nail on the head each time.. this left me deeply pensive.

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  8. Yes, without the bad times we'd never recognise the good times when they come.
    Lovely!

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  9. Is this correct way to say,
    "All's well that ends well"???
    Nicely done!
    PEACE!

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  10. Such a beautiful description of the trevails in a relationship...and yet...and yet despite the hardships there is still love

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  11. There is a tubulence to thesed lines that's just exquisite, Heaven. Beautifully 'unfinished'...sounds like a beautiful disaster already happening with part three to come(?)

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  12. Exquisitely deceptively simple-- wonderful! xxxj

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  13. nice reminder to be thankful for those hard time, too - they make us grow.

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  14. think it's good to stay thankful in those times...hard but takes us to another level..thanks for the reminder..

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  15. Yes a thankful heart is always welcome. Even if it's for the things that break our smiles. Thanks for the reminder Heaven.

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  16. A little bit of heartache can be a good thing I think. Simple, strong images.

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  17. Maybe thankful for getting to the end of al that and surviving? This deceptively simple list poem works well.

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  18. The storms in our life definitely make us who we are-lovely!

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  19. Unfinished us... Love that.
    I think we're all unfinished, that's what makes us so interesting. :-)
    Nicely done.

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  20. It's empowering when you can find gratitude amidst disappointment.

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  21. Nice turn in the last line. I'm curious about an "unpared dream." Rejection slip jumped out at me and went well with burnt toast.

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  22. lovely finish to this - it does sometimes seem that these negative events all come in a pile, doesn't it - but as you say, there's always something to be thankful for too

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  23. I completely agree that we need to be thankful for the good and bad. They all work together for purpose in our lives. I think this is a favorite of yours for me. Thank you for helping me to give more thanks for the hard times. I do believe they are working good things in me. :)

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  24. What a great turnaround here! This is distilled and refined. Enjoyed it a great deal.

    "unpared dream

    rough edges

    turbulent waves

    stormy nights

    unfinished us"

    Very inspired and moving.

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  25. every thing that could and can go wrong.
    yet, there's recognition, acknowledgement, & appreciation that comes out in the wash.
    ...and yet, ''unfinished us.''

    nice listing poem.

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  26. I like "third chances" and "unfinished us." There's so much more to this story. :)

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  27. It's funny to be reading this, as last week I was trying to think of a "thankful" piece to post on d'Verse "Give Thanks" Never did post, because all I could think of was being "thankful" for the rough spots in my life, and figured people would wonder what I was thinking if I wrote about that, but without them I would have missed out on so many good things along the way. I really enjoyed this, thanks for sharing!

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  28. Quite stream of consciousness - the terse, two word lines propelling it on in a rapid pour of thoughts. A story beats there, still, a tale of good memories, as well as bad...well done!

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  29. We need bad times so we're thankful for the good. I'm pleased your November hasn't been too cold yet. We are having a very hot spring and summer begins tomorrow. I could go write a hot and sweaty poem right now if I had the energy, lol!

    Just a reminder that RomanticFridayWriters kicks off on Friday this week if you can share...

    Denise

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  30. The choice of phrases, the placement of each, and what each reader brings can transform this into completely different poems for each person. I like that flexibility and richness. For me, stormy nights are the best ... and just think, they could be all kinds of storms. Thanks for your visit.

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  31. As usual, an authentic and thought provoking poem. I love your economy of language and the immediacy of your chosen images. Great write.

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  32. Really enjoyed this. "unfinished us".. great line

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  33. Each line a kind of symbol - an idiom response - the whole making up sequences in a life. The journey through light and dark, seasons, and reasons. Enjoyable & creative.

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  34. Some sad moments, true! Unfinished business, true! But it'll always end up in a silver lining!

    Hank

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  35. I agree. withouth the bad times, we would be left without strength and appreciation. Nicely written!

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  36. Chaos and then Hope! Makes for the best poetry...and life.

    Hugs,

    Lady Nyo

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  37. After a life full of "No," now that some good has come along in life, I appreciate it all the more. You've captured it beautifully, Heaven.

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