Thursday, 3 November 2011

Clinging to you




kiss me anew, here
before the last maple leaf
falls, and first snowflake
wets my pale lips, stilling time 
twisted in salty drenched arms 

hurl me anew, here
before the last rose petal
dips, and first winter 
drop caresses my bare hips
unfolding, clinging to you  



Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - Form for All - Man’yoshu Poetry – Hosted today by Jane Kohut-Bartels (Lady Nyo)The challenge is to write the Somon category of  Man’yoshu Japanese Poetry. In this category, the tanka style poems refer to love and longing. 
and Poetry United: Thursday Think Tank - Waning days of Fall


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39 comments:

  1. These have such a lovely flow like the floating feeling of being in love.

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  2. Heaven, this is so delicious. Thank you.

    Denise

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  3. I agree... absolutely lovely. I especially like the first stanza.

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  4. Another great verse, I'll take that kidn of cling any time..haha

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  5. Truly beautiful autumn love poem! Sensual and sweet.

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  6. Such beautiful words to bid farewell to golden Autumn and welcome the coolness of Winter!

    Hank

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  7. i like the image of "my bare hips
    unfolding, clinging to you"

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  8. Romantic and sensual...

    Such a smooth piece to read...

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  9. mmm...nice heaven...knew this one would be right up your alley...sensual and a nice dance...

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  10. Exactly right. Nothing forced, so delicate, the touch so gentle, so loving, interspersed with seasonal images not used as metaphors, only sounds to reinforce the silky touch of the poem. Well done.

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  11. Lusciously romantic! Beautifully said.

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  12. Clinging to you; I love that~
    Really wonderful imagery! Well Done~

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  13. loves is that what is dripping and clinging..
    A nice poem to let the feel of romance grow deep as the season transits..
    Mesmerising!

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  14. Sensuality rules, and heat in autumn is always a good thing.

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  15. That's gorgeous! What a lovely, unexpected use of the prompt.

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  16. (The autumn leaf prompt, that is. Perfect for the Man'yoshu.))

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  17. You got me with the second line all the way to the end...
    wonderful wonderful poem.

    Just adore it.

    Peace,
    Siggi In Downeast Maine

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  18. I think you hit just about every right cylindar with this poem!

    Beautiful....the mention of season, the way you intertwine it and lust, well, this certainly is in the spirit of the Man'yoshu.

    Brava!

    Lady Nyo

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  19. You can really feel the desire and passion in this poem - powerful!

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  20. I love the passion! Really enjoyed this, Heaven.

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  21. All the reasons I'm not allowed to travel alone. Very romantic, sensual on content, but very well written poetically; great word choices, combinations, images, reader involement, and line work.
    a very elegantly sexy presentation of this form.

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  22. i like how you weave season and lust together..sensual and elegant

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  23. Race against time...for love is transient as the seasons...

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  24. Why did the maple leaves make me think that this was a very personal poem?

    Very fitting for both the season, and my current mood. GET OUT OF MY HEAD HEAVEN! ^_^

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  25. Beautiful and sensual, thoroughly enjoyed! :)

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  26. Wow, this section reads of incense:

    "before the last rose petal
    dips, and first winter
    drop caresses my bare hips"

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  27. Gentle sensuality in a nicely executed form.

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  28. Kind of interior rhyme here which is lovely.

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  29. this poem paints a beautiful picture in my mind! a joy to experience :)

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  30. So beautifully expressed passion....brilliant.

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  31. This poem is sumptuously erotic - I love that it is in the female voice, and that her sexuality is not under-stated.

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  32. Well, how awesome is this Heaven! I just came from Lady Nyo's. Getting a double dose of love poetry and influence by Japan.

    xo

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  33. mmm... very sensuous and delicious! ♥

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  34. Just how I love my poems...hot, short and deep!

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