Thursday, 10 November 2011

Her arrival


anxiously

they await 
craning necks
for slightest clue
of her arrival

her icy breath
raising goose bumps

her cold stare
freezing warm intentions

feared yet admired
she is dazzling with her
fierce ardor

she would rather be
cool character than
a forgettable slip of a girl

here she comes now

ivory veil, long white gown









Posted for Poets United:   Prompt is Winter, and Flash fiction Friday - Tell a story in 55 words.  G-man, joining you today.


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27 comments:

  1. G-Man10 November 2011 at 20:24

    Yeah?
    She stuck her head in the door today and looked around. She decided NOT to come in yet..Whew!
    Loved your 55 Heaven
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  2. G-Man10 November 2011 at 20:25

    But she did yell YAHTZEE befor she backed out!!!

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  3. Laurie Kolp10 November 2011 at 20:30

    Love your words... especially:

    she would rather be
    cool character than
    a forgettable slip of a girl

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  4. Drenchxoxo10 November 2011 at 20:51

    You guide this along wonderfully. As I scrolled down, my mind went quickly to winter. Your picture was perfectly in line. Bravo!

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  5. Pat Hatt10 November 2011 at 21:12

    A Cool Character and a Cool Cat, that's just where it's at...haha..my mind went to winter too, snow..ewww...haha..great verse.

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  6. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall10 November 2011 at 21:32

    quite haunting,
    beautiful 55 on winter.

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  7. Daydreamertoo10 November 2011 at 21:45

    I am not looking forward to her arrival at all.
    Lovely, lovely, lovely.

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  8. Brian Miller10 November 2011 at 21:48

    she gives me shivers...it is so cold tonight...i am not ready...

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  9. moondustwriter10 November 2011 at 21:49

    Hmm great way of conveying winter
    she does have that icy confident glare...

    Hi hope all is well in your world
    sorry been so busy havent been about the blogsphere lately

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  10. Matt D10 November 2011 at 22:16

    Shivers.

    Very nice poem!

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  11. Barry10 November 2011 at 23:18

    I've never liked winter. Up until now.

    Beautiful, love this.

    xoxo

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  12. Anonymous10 November 2011 at 23:21

    I love this poem.

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  13. Mijayami10 November 2011 at 23:32

    Nicely written.

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  14. KB10 November 2011 at 23:35

    Beautiful poem.

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  15. void11 November 2011 at 00:18

    this is lovely :)

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  16. tarunima11 November 2011 at 02:09

    gave me goosebumps, really nice:)

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  17. Dave King11 November 2011 at 04:34

    I responded most strongly to :

    her cold stare
    freezing warm intentions

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  18. Eileen T O'Neill .....11 November 2011 at 07:45

    Your well chosen words have captured the complete image....

    Eileen

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  19. Brother Ollie11 November 2011 at 08:33

    very cool - you are a master of imagery!

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  20. Other Mary11 November 2011 at 08:33

    Outstanding personification of winter.

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  21. Bubba11 November 2011 at 10:33

    There's always a story behind a bride. Provocative 55.

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  22. ayala11 November 2011 at 10:38

    Love how you did this! simply lovely!

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  23. Monkey Man11 November 2011 at 11:33

    Best winter description I have ever read.

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  24. rch11 November 2011 at 22:15

    Nice personification but also a great description of a bride to be, exxcellent!

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  25. Lolamouse12 November 2011 at 15:38

    Love it! Who would want to be a "forgettable slip of a girl?" I love that line!

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  26. Ella12 November 2011 at 21:48

    I love the progression of your poem!
    It was beautiful~

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  27. M. A. S.15 November 2011 at 00:55

    This is a great metaphor.

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