Thursday, 10 November 2011

Her arrival


anxiously

they await 
craning necks
for slightest clue
of her arrival

her icy breath
raising goose bumps

her cold stare
freezing warm intentions

feared yet admired
she is dazzling with her
fierce ardor

she would rather be
cool character than
a forgettable slip of a girl

here she comes now

ivory veil, long white gown









Posted for Poets United:   Prompt is Winter, and Flash fiction Friday - Tell a story in 55 words.  G-man, joining you today.


picture credit:   http://visioluxus.tumblr.com/post/716170748/cloud

27 comments:

  1. Yeah?
    She stuck her head in the door today and looked around. She decided NOT to come in yet..Whew!
    Loved your 55 Heaven
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  2. But she did yell YAHTZEE befor she backed out!!!

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  3. Love your words... especially:

    she would rather be
    cool character than
    a forgettable slip of a girl

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  4. You guide this along wonderfully. As I scrolled down, my mind went quickly to winter. Your picture was perfectly in line. Bravo!

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  5. A Cool Character and a Cool Cat, that's just where it's at...haha..my mind went to winter too, snow..ewww...haha..great verse.

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  6. quite haunting,
    beautiful 55 on winter.

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  7. I am not looking forward to her arrival at all.
    Lovely, lovely, lovely.

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  8. she gives me shivers...it is so cold tonight...i am not ready...

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  9. Hmm great way of conveying winter
    she does have that icy confident glare...

    Hi hope all is well in your world
    sorry been so busy havent been about the blogsphere lately

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  10. I've never liked winter. Up until now.

    Beautiful, love this.

    xoxo

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  11. gave me goosebumps, really nice:)

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  12. I responded most strongly to :

    her cold stare
    freezing warm intentions

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  13. Your well chosen words have captured the complete image....

    Eileen

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  14. very cool - you are a master of imagery!

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  15. Outstanding personification of winter.

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  16. There's always a story behind a bride. Provocative 55.

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  17. Love how you did this! simply lovely!

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  18. Best winter description I have ever read.

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  19. Nice personification but also a great description of a bride to be, exxcellent!

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  20. Love it! Who would want to be a "forgettable slip of a girl?" I love that line!

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  21. I love the progression of your poem!
    It was beautiful~

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