as i concentrate on cues
signalling intention, i feel
your warm breath on my skin
your sun-streaked cheeks, sky blue
smile dazzles, but i was too intent
keeping my eyes fixed
on your wide open arms
missing a mid waist turn or
skipping yellow broken lines
would not do; no you want
to keep me on my toes, curled
and pining for you, beguiled
by rolling hills and unfastened bows
harder, i press to feel your
hands stroking my thighs,
your fullness and promise on my tongue
kindred soul, how can i resist you ?
tower lights by a thousands
chase you
in smoggy 10 lane freeway
but i see
your fire-lit eyes steady on me
as i drive home
Posted for D'verse Poets Pub- Changes hosted by Sheila Moore. I have actually shared a recent big change in my life here but I thought of posting another write about driving to and from my office. I see the sun rising on my way to work, and sun setting on my way home. I welcome change and challenges in my life ~
nothing better than a sunrise on the way to work..esp. love those i see when i bike to my workplace.. and sunsets are magical for sure..smiles..great capture heaven
ReplyDeletehow do you keep the windows from fogging up on your way home? smiles...whew this one packs some heat heaven...of course this is all about the drive....smile.s
ReplyDeleteThe journey of the sun is one of the most universal measurements of change out of our control -- time goes on. Well done!
ReplyDeleteOh, this made me smile! The ending surprised me, but then it made PERFECT sense as I read back through your poem again! Sweet!
ReplyDeleteLOL Very clever inuendo. Beautiful piece from you.
ReplyDeleteeven with all the distractions on the freeway, you still find room to love.
ReplyDeleteWow more drive in this one then just the four wheels going round and round. The foggy windows must really give defrost a workout..haha
ReplyDelete"your sun-streaked cheeks, sky blue
ReplyDeletesmile dazzles, but i was too intent"
...such incredibly sensual lines full to brimming with anticipation...
'Missing a mid-waist turn' has good sound and image of imbalance.
ReplyDeleteWhere our 'physical response' goes awkward is where the reality of the need comes through most?
Trulyfool
What a sweet thing to go home to.
ReplyDeletereally liked this--very physical and very engaging...I esp love the imagery in the ninth couplet, and the strong closing lines after.
ReplyDeleteNicely done.
ReplyDeletewhat a drive. ;-)
ReplyDeletei, too, love the imagery, here.
sunrises are my favorite. i like sunsets, too. ;-)
I don't care what the above people had to say, this was a sneaky poem. :) But full of beautiful imagery.
ReplyDeleteI could not have guessed it was about driving. This daily change is more than welcoming.
ReplyDeleteHeaven,
ReplyDeleteLeisurely drive in the misty morning can be most healthy.
Hank
harder, i press to feel your
ReplyDeletehands stroking my thighs,
your fullness and promise on my tongue
kindred soul, how can i resist you ?
wow, you almost turn me on,
hot, stunning write.
Enjoyed the sensory images here, Heaven. Somehow, it felt like a dance to me. :0)
ReplyDeleteThank you for the comments. I wish my afternoon drive is as hot and entertaining as I wrote it. In reality it is a long and weary drive for me (almost an hour) and I get my entertainment listening to the music.
ReplyDeleteThis is one of my favourite pieces of yours, Heaven. I really liked the format you used and loved these words:
ReplyDeleteno you want
to keep me on my toes, curled
and pining for you, beguiled
by rolling hills and unfastened bows
and: your fullness and promise on my tongue
Wow! So sensual and lovely...I look forward to your next poem : )
-Eva ♥
romantic and fun.
ReplyDeleteyou rock, girl.
:)
Holy shmoly, Heaven! This is sooo great, and it took you to scribe a verse about driving to and from work, and what waits at home. I am in touch now with a feeling of real excitement, sensual even, in my years driving my 30-mile round trip when I was working. Thanks for bringing that memory to life for me. Very cool.
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whew! keep me on my toes, curled....that line made me smile. loved the whole thing, heaven. thanks :)
ReplyDeleteOne word... Lovely :)
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