Saturday 19 November 2011

Warm breath

sweaty palms, though autumn
as i concentrate on cues


signalling intention, i feel 
your warm breath on my skin


your sun-streaked cheeks, sky blue 
smile dazzles, but i was too intent


keeping my eyes fixed  
on your wide open arms


missing a mid waist turn or
skipping yellow broken lines   


would not do; no you want 
to keep me on my toes, curled 


and pining for you, beguiled
by rolling hills and unfastened bows


harder, i press to feel your 
hands stroking my thighs, 


your fullness and promise on my tongue 
kindred soul, how can i resist you ? 


tower lights by a thousands
chase you 
in smoggy 10 lane freeway 


but i see 


your fire-lit eyes steady on me     


as i drive home  










Posted for D'verse Poets Pub- Changes hosted by Sheila Moore.   I have actually shared a recent big change in my life here but I thought of posting another write about driving to and from my office.   I see the sun rising on my way to work, and sun setting on my way home. I welcome change and challenges in my life  ~

25 comments:

  1. nothing better than a sunrise on the way to work..esp. love those i see when i bike to my workplace.. and sunsets are magical for sure..smiles..great capture heaven

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  2. how do you keep the windows from fogging up on your way home? smiles...whew this one packs some heat heaven...of course this is all about the drive....smile.s

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  3. The journey of the sun is one of the most universal measurements of change out of our control -- time goes on. Well done!

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  4. Oh, this made me smile! The ending surprised me, but then it made PERFECT sense as I read back through your poem again! Sweet!

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  5. LOL Very clever inuendo. Beautiful piece from you.

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  6. even with all the distractions on the freeway, you still find room to love.

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  7. Wow more drive in this one then just the four wheels going round and round. The foggy windows must really give defrost a workout..haha

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  8. "your sun-streaked cheeks, sky blue
    smile dazzles, but i was too intent"
    ...such incredibly sensual lines full to brimming with anticipation...

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  9. 'Missing a mid-waist turn' has good sound and image of imbalance.

    Where our 'physical response' goes awkward is where the reality of the need comes through most?

    Trulyfool

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  10. What a sweet thing to go home to.

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  11. really liked this--very physical and very engaging...I esp love the imagery in the ninth couplet, and the strong closing lines after.

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  12. what a drive. ;-)

    i, too, love the imagery, here.

    sunrises are my favorite. i like sunsets, too. ;-)

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  13. I don't care what the above people had to say, this was a sneaky poem. :) But full of beautiful imagery.

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  14. I could not have guessed it was about driving. This daily change is more than welcoming.

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  15. Heaven,
    Leisurely drive in the misty morning can be most healthy.

    Hank

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  16. harder, i press to feel your
    hands stroking my thighs,


    your fullness and promise on my tongue
    kindred soul, how can i resist you ?




    wow, you almost turn me on,

    hot, stunning write.

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  17. Enjoyed the sensory images here, Heaven. Somehow, it felt like a dance to me. :0)

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  18. Thank you for the comments. I wish my afternoon drive is as hot and entertaining as I wrote it. In reality it is a long and weary drive for me (almost an hour) and I get my entertainment listening to the music.

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  19. This is one of my favourite pieces of yours, Heaven. I really liked the format you used and loved these words:

    no you want
    to keep me on my toes, curled
    and pining for you, beguiled
    by rolling hills and unfastened bows

    and: your fullness and promise on my tongue

    Wow! So sensual and lovely...I look forward to your next poem : )
    -Eva ♥

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  20. Holy shmoly, Heaven! This is sooo great, and it took you to scribe a verse about driving to and from work, and what waits at home. I am in touch now with a feeling of real excitement, sensual even, in my years driving my 30-mile round trip when I was working. Thanks for bringing that memory to life for me. Very cool.

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    http://themslvh.wordpress.com/awards-2/liebster-blog-award/

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  22. whew! keep me on my toes, curled....that line made me smile. loved the whole thing, heaven. thanks :)

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