Thursday 1 December 2011

Reality train


                  Doors close

                  Mad rush of commuters
                  Drone of train wheels
                  Listless faces,  
                  Muted headphones,
                  Newspapers screaming 
                  More job cuts  
                  Strange woman's laughter,
                  Bewailings of The End is Coming
                  Not even Christmas ads  
                  Can brighten steel walls
                  Of cold shoulders
                  As reality grips,  
                  I try to remember
                  Your wild honey kiss
                  On my lips

                  Doors open



Posted for Imaginary Garden with Real Toads and Flash Fiction Friday :  Tell a Story in 55 words.  For the G-man.  
This post was brought about by my subway ride to Toronto City this morning.   A cold winter day this 1st of December.   


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21 comments:

  1. ayala1 December 2011 at 19:57

    Lovely capture, Heaven. :)

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  2. Brian Miller1 December 2011 at 20:06

    sounds like you had an interesting trip...i always enjoy my subway trips...so much to see and take in....smiles.

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  3. Monkey Man1 December 2011 at 20:11

    Passionate as usual. Nice.

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  4. Scarlet1 December 2011 at 20:19

    Thanks for the lovely comments. I find train rides very interesting too as it reminds me of the "other faces of life".

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  5. Anonymous1 December 2011 at 20:25

    That's definitely a reality train. ;-)

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  6. Pat Hatt1 December 2011 at 20:37

    Yeah it is always interesting to see the other riders, not that I still like taking them, stop go, stop go, meh..haha...truly captured the feel with your verse.

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  7. Old Raven1 December 2011 at 21:17

    What lovely thoughts to enjoy while on a dreary subway ride ... I might have missed my stop. :)

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  8. Denise Covey 1 December 2011 at 21:51

    Must have been a whirly subway ride Heaven. Beautiful as always.

    Denise

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  9. Harshad Mehta1 December 2011 at 22:09

    I like last punch line
    "Door opens"

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  10. G-Man1 December 2011 at 22:20

    Heaven...
    I've ridden the Toronto Subway many times.
    Great inspiration!
    Most excellent 55 My Friend
    Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

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  11. Laurie Kolp1 December 2011 at 22:24

    Riding on subways always humbles me.

    Glad you had something to look forward to.

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  12. Kerry O'Connor2 December 2011 at 06:03

    This is like a sip of warm mulled wine on a cold dark day.

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  13. Daydreamertoo2 December 2011 at 07:57

    Very nice thoughts to occupy your mind instead of feeling the cold chill of winter.
    Lovely!

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  14. Ella2 December 2011 at 09:10

    I loved it, the lead in and the key words you chose to share~ Honey lips gets me, luscious n' sweet! ;D
    I enjoyed your trip~

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  15. Zeba2 December 2011 at 11:11

    This is beautiful. Simply beautiful.

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  16. 1ManView2 December 2011 at 11:31

    Lovely write heaven...

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  17. hope2 December 2011 at 14:25

    A nice end for a noisy ride. :)

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  18. Mijayami2 December 2011 at 14:25

    Very well done!

    I always picture the TTC when anyone talks about the subway -- how nice to discover my imaginings were accurate :)

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  19. author.nara.malone2 December 2011 at 15:18

    Sad and haunting details for this time of year, but the opening doors whisper of hope :)

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  20. Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson Barry2 December 2011 at 20:21

    sweet 55.

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  21. siggiofmaine3 December 2011 at 01:33

    Ohhh, nice.☺.
    Peace,
    Siggi in Downeast Maine

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