Monday 5 December 2011

Wild beat

pale moon

bear me down gently
sea bed alight with copper sand
sinking stern
drowning salty spray our lips
wrapping  crescent  hips  arching


deep blue 


                                                                   


fierce sun

lift me up quickly
crimson mountain jutting teal sky
burning bow
as soft lips caress red silk skin
unfurling plump cheeks writhing

wild beat



Author's Note:   Poetry form is cameo, a purely syllabic form consisting of six lines with the following syllable count: 2, 5, 8, 3, 8, 7, 2.  Thanks Kerry, I had fun with this form ~

For the Imaginary Garden with Real Toads - OpenLinkNight - Monday
and D'verse Poets Pub - OpenLinkNight - Tuesday  - Hosted by the lovely Natasha Head.


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34 comments:

  1. Brian Miller5 December 2011 at 22:25

    drowning salty spray our lips
    wrapping crescent hips arching

    nice, love those lines...you play this well to form and still make it warm...smiles.

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  2. Kerry O'Connor5 December 2011 at 23:54

    Really gorgeous writing to compliment the beautiful picture of night kissing day. Your metaphor is handled with a subtle touch - words well-chosen.

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  3. kaykuala6 December 2011 at 00:31

    Beautiful rendition Heaven! Sensuously expressed and great play of words!

    Hank

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  4. Susie Clevenger6 December 2011 at 01:01

    Love this...you handled the cameo style well...I haven't even attempted it :)

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  5. Ravenblack6 December 2011 at 03:05

    Vivid colors and imagery. Nicely done in form. :) Enjoyed it.

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  6. Dave King6 December 2011 at 06:51

    It was very productive fun that you had. The outcome is entertaining and a joy to read.

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  7. Pat Hatt6 December 2011 at 08:56

    Wow beautifully done, really like how you played with the first bit and then hit it home with the second one.

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  8. Old raven6 December 2011 at 10:29

    Heaven ... so glad that you joined Real Toads. These two Cameos are wonderful. They are filled with gentleness and work well.

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  9. Unknown6 December 2011 at 12:37

    Even with such rules in your poetry, it seems like it just flowed out. Well written!

    Erick Flores

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  10. Margie6 December 2011 at 14:56

    Wonderful use of words!
    Loved this, Heaven.

    Margie :)

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  11. Timoteo6 December 2011 at 15:08

    I've done that on the beach...but you find sand in the strangest places for days afterward!

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  12. Mike Sutcliffe6 December 2011 at 15:49

    I can feel the longing and desire in this ~ it made my mind wander to memories ~ beautifully written

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  13. Daydreamertoo6 December 2011 at 15:54

    Phhewwwww hot hot hot! Very Nice!

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  14. Tashtoo6 December 2011 at 17:16

    Hot and sassy, yet oh so classy! You write of intimacy with such a poised pen. (One that allows me to control my blush!lol) Love the imagery woven through, and the form (a new one for me) is certainly intriguing!

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  15. ayala6 December 2011 at 17:18

    Love the lines here, lovely!

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  16. Mystic_Mom6 December 2011 at 17:20

    A very sensual use of the form, very well done!

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  17. Mary6 December 2011 at 18:56

    Oh these are beautiful, Heaven. I agree about the sensuality - the word AND the pictures. Lovely.

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  18. Anonymous6 December 2011 at 20:20

    interesting. i've never heard of cameo form before. thanks!

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  19. Victoria6 December 2011 at 20:28

    Amazing images, both words and photo. You know how to write intimacy with such beauty and figurative speech.

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  20. Anonymous6 December 2011 at 22:04

    So nice the way words and landscape parallel each other. K.

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  21. Sherry Blue Sky6 December 2011 at 23:08

    Very clever cameos. The image is quite amazing, too.

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  22. Claudia7 December 2011 at 00:55

    love the salty spray our lips...hmmmm...can feel it.. the pic is very cool too..kissed by nature..

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  23. Robert Gibson: PWES Editor7 December 2011 at 07:57

    This was a very well executed poem :) I loved it :)

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  24. Maureen Walsh7 December 2011 at 10:49

    Loved it! Sheer Heaven! X

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  25. Lady Nyo7 December 2011 at 14:18

    Lovely, sensual poem.

    I've never heard of this form....lovely, though.

    Lady Nyo

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  26. tinkwelborn7 December 2011 at 15:19

    Well! my first reading of a 'cameo' …just Heavenly.
    I like the concretism of the lines….love in the concrete.
    great job!

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  27. Laurie Kolp7 December 2011 at 15:20

    You've mastered the cameo form beautifully!

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  28. ✿7 December 2011 at 19:28

    Oh my gosh, that first section is amazing! This is my favorite:

    "bear me down gently
    sea bed alight with copper sand"

    And that image is breathtaking.

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  29. Charles Elliott/Beautyseer7 December 2011 at 22:45

    Lovely. Wonderfully sensuous. Interesting form that seems to serve this one in its symmetry. Enjoyed this!

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  30. Shashidhar Sharma8 December 2011 at 00:32

    The image got me ... and the first line and the last made it beautiful.. thanks I enjoyed it so much...


    Shashi
    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/12/whispers-buddha-song.html
    At Twitter @VerseEveryDay

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  31. Steve King8 December 2011 at 07:35

    Excellent tension/contrast here. Filled with images. I admire the way you've packed this into the form. Excellent poetry. By the way, thanks for the recommendation to the other site. I saw it too late to qualify for this week, I believe.

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  32. ashok8 December 2011 at 10:16

    Nice to see this kinda writting from you..enjoyed it.

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  33. Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson Barry8 December 2011 at 13:58

    the words, the image, they form super hot and magical imagery.

    another excellent poetry on lust and nature.

    smiles.

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  34. Anonymous8 December 2011 at 16:39

    your writing is brilliantly vivid.

    nicely done heaven! *kisses*

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