Tuesday, 8 May 2012

The moon

i draw my words
in your arms each night
sometimes the verse knots  
silver    strands  in  your  hair
sometimes the  phrases disappear
under  the  grooves  of  your cheeks
sometimes the  lines fold under the back
 of your knees or the arch of your foot
oftentimes  the   letters freely  fall
black  sea  pearls  on  your   hands


raw,     unpolished,     unmetered


your fingers touch coarse  edges 
inhaling red sea  and  oak forest 

  moon comes alive on your skin   


i write again
  




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57 comments:

  1. Very sensual, erotic and of course, lovely. :)

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    1. Thanks Bren for the visit and lovely words ~

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  2. "moon comes alive on your skin" ---wow!something different...

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    1. Thanks Ashok ~ I appreciate your comments ~

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  3. smiles...i think some times those raw and unpolished words are the most honest...we dont try to make them pretty....and sometimes its just hard to find the right ones to capture the moment....there is a nice sensuality to this both with them and the words...and then sometimes it just flows....and i feel that release there in the end of your verse...

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    1. Capturing them is a challenge, without form or structure.

      Thank you for your sharing your thoughts Brian. I appreciate them ~

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  4. Very sensual once more at your sea, but you have that down pat every time. And yeah the more raw the words, the more that can be captured I suppose as well, less thinking more ummm winking..lol

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    1. ummmm winking at you too ~

      I like switching up my posts. I just wrote a structured poem, so now I am just letting it flow. Thanks for the visit Pat ~

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    1. Thank you Sweets ~ I appreciate your support ~

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  6. Well, that's MY KIND OF POET! Write again? Why "again"? Just do not stop! PLEASE! OK, you can slow down a little.......
    a 'grin'...and PEACE!

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    1. You are sweet Steve ~ I don't always write in this manner..it takes a lot from me to write this way as my work drains me out at the end of the day ~

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  7. i draw my words in your arms each night....moon comes alive on your skin

    ...lines that just melt me...I'm now hooked on your pen

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  8. Beautiful write! Seductive and wonderful.

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  9. I'm getting an image of a Celtic knot of limbs and other world language.

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  10. Beautifully skin-tingly sensual. "Moon comes alive on your skin" - lovely words, enhanced even more by the moon we had last weekend!

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  11. Excellent writing, vivid and romantic without feeling the need to fill in all the specifics.

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  12. Sensual and beautiful, Grace.

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  13. Blimey, this took my breathe away! lol I think thats all I need to say, amazing! xoxo

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  14. Lovely, heaven--esp liked "sometimes the phrases disappear/under the grooves of your cheeks..' visuals in this are wonderful.

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  15. inhaling red sea and oak forest is awesome.

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  16. I really enjoyed the end:
    "your fingers touch coarse edges
    inhaling red sea and oak forest
    moon comes alive on your skin"

    Thanks for sharing!

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  17. You've just got this way of capturing those little observations - the little knots of hair -the lines , the arches of the feet- so delicately put..you are the master of this subject!

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    1. I am glad you like it. Because I love your dark poems..you are a master of that ~

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  18. Sensuous and a sensual offering, Heaven! As always, Ma'am!

    Hank

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  19. I, too, most love "moon comes alive on your skin".....just beautiful.

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  20. Beautiful and sensuous write, Heaven. Nice!

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  21. Exquisite. Every word, image, phrase...but the lingering last line. Mmmmmm.

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    1. Mmmmmm....thank you for the lovely comments ~ I appreciate it ~

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  22. Love the face...smooth transitioning smile

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    1. Thank you for the visit and smiles ~

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  23. Another excellente take on inspiration. I think if you ever held a training seminar on inspiration, it would be SRO. Enjoyed this always, but had to read with the window open.

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    1. window open ...sure why not. Thanks for the inspirational words Henry ~

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  24. Your words painted a picture I have never been able to articulate. Every word has a purpose. Beautiful and sensual.

    your fingers touch coarse edges
    inhaling red sea and oak forest

    Surely this is a dream. Thank you.

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  25. Damn, I think we drank from the same well for our poems at dVerse...love the last four lines and how they play between our emotions and our bone-caged placed in nature...a multiple shimmy of a poem... :)

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    1. I think we did...your poem is just so sensual. Great to meet you ~

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  26. Heaven - Enjoyed your poem..you do like to write sensual poetry..

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  27. nice...writing can be such a tactile experience...like making love and sometimes you can't even divide it from making love...inhaling red sea and oak forest...i like

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  28. Dripping with perfumed ink from the pen

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  29. your pen ( or keyboard ) oozes sensuality at every stroke ...loved this thank you so much for sharing x

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  30. now this was like making love with words :)

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  31. Love the weave of imagery - making love, making poetry, making music very close to the same emotional center. So difficult for the creative spirit to separate them. I think it's why Picasso and the artists over time regardless of their medium called themselves poets. Lovely work here!

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  32. Love the gentle eroticism of this. A great write with a perfect picture.

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  33. moon comes alive on your skin

    My favourite line... ♥

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  34. I love how "embodied" these words are - from head to toe. The simple, sensual ending: I write again. Beautiful.

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  35. What a fabulous weaving or words and passion.

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  36. Wow, so beautiful! I loved the form that you created with these wonderful words. These stood out for me:

    your fingers touch coarse edges
    inhaling red sea and oak forest

    All so lovely and sensual...well done!
    -Eva

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  37. wow. i really loved this one heaven.

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  38. Gorgeous!

    Love these:
    "the verse knots
    silver strands in your hair"

    "the lines fold under the back
    of your knees"

    "inhaling red sea and oak forest
    moon comes alive on your skin"

    rosemarymint.wordpress.com

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  39. ack. i just lost my comment on your wild thing post...smiles....

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    1. Sorry, I was still editing it and accidentally published it..eeks ~

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  40. Your words just created a magical picture. You know that, right? :)

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  41. SO gorgeous!!! I love the way you describe words here:

    "verse knots
    silver strands in your hair
    sometimes the phrases disappear
    under the grooves of your cheeks
    sometimes the lines fold under the back
    of your knees or the arch of your foot
    oftentimes the letters freely fall
    black sea pearls on your hands"

    But really I could've just put the whole thin right HERE! So well done!

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  42. I like the subtle eroticism in this beautiful imagery. Nicely done.

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