Tuesday, 22 May 2012

Summer flight






I leap straight into your arms
without looking down
as if I knew you would catch me:
caterpillar hands, dragonfly wings


I gaze at your lips as if I have kissed
them a thousand times in my head, slowly
my fingers travel to your waist and hips,
as if I knew them intimately, smoothly


the seas I have crossed are red
coral reefs still cling to my russet face 
I even smelled death on an old man's tears
and green is my favorite color      

my wings bring me here today 
I don't pretend to understand you wholly 
except that your words storm the shores of me, 
sailing my white tidy boats to voyages unknown  


hold my face cresting on your chest, 
it's warm as the summer grapes 


   
A poetic response to :   Your hands by Pablo Neruda 
"When your hands leap
towards mine, love,
what do they bring me in flight?"


For the D'verse Poets Pub - OpenLinkNight - every Tuesday at 3pm EST

Thanks for the visit and smiles ~   Happy summer day ~


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48 comments:

  1. Mary22 May 2012 at 07:08

    This is beautifully sensual, Heaven. You write a beautiful love poem. I especially enjoyed the image of 'caterpillar hands, dragonfly wings.'

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    1. Scarlet22 May 2012 at 12:18

      Thanks for the lovely words and visit Mary ~

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  2. Anonymous22 May 2012 at 08:39

    "except that your words storm the shores of me"
    love this line!

    gracefully pretty.

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    1. Scarlet22 May 2012 at 12:20

      I like that line too Lisa, thanks for the visit ~

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  3. Brian Miller22 May 2012 at 10:24

    caterpillar hands, dragonfly wings...love that...that line just jumps off the page...and the coral reefs still clinging to the face...your words storm the shores of me,
    sailing my white tidy boats to voyages unknown ...hot, love it...really great intimate love poem grace...

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    1. Scarlet22 May 2012 at 12:20

      I appreciate your comments and visit Brian ~ Thanks ~

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  4. Kerry O'Connor22 May 2012 at 11:38

    This is an exceptional poem, Grace. That third stanza is just staggeringly good.

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    1. Scarlet22 May 2012 at 12:21

      Thanks for the lovely words Kerry ~ I appreciate them ~

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  5. Anonymous22 May 2012 at 12:54

    "I even smelled death on an old man's tears"

    This resonated with me for some reason...

    Thank you, Heaven.

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  6. Claudia22 May 2012 at 12:56

    love the intimacy and sensuality in this...and like..I even smelled death on an old man's tears...a lot...somehow doesn't seem to fit in on first sight but grounds it in reality..i like

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  7. Unknown22 May 2012 at 15:43

    So sensual. Love "your words storm the shores of me" - and those caterpillar hands/dragonfly wings. Beautiful write.

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  8. Daydreamertoo22 May 2012 at 16:01

    Oh, this is really lovely. Sensual, and sexy without even mentioning a thing to do with sex. A fabulous write heaven!

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  9. Marbles in My Pocket22 May 2012 at 16:05

    This is beautiful! So many special lines in it, creating a vivdly sensual piece of poetry! Wonderful write!
    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/05/22/the-thunder-rolls/

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  10. hedgewitch22 May 2012 at 16:14

    A wonderful Neruda poem to spring from(but then,they all are.) The colors are vibrant but so are the images of longing and hope in this, Heaven. I especially like "...your words storm the shores of me,/
    sailing my white tidy boats..."

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  11. Louise22 May 2012 at 16:18

    Another lovely poem...sensuous, intimate & loving...beautiful :)

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  12. Mystic_Mom22 May 2012 at 17:21

    Yummy...delicious in the best way!

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  13. Wander22 May 2012 at 17:27

    Haven't been by in a while, glad I saw your link at dVerse and had a sec to come over. Through the whole poem the thing that struck me the most was the leap...

    Wander

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  14. Laurie Kolp22 May 2012 at 17:39

    As always, such a sensuous treat... I especially like:

    your words storm the shores of me,
    sailing my white tidy boats to voyages unknown

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  15. Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger22 May 2012 at 18:04

    You make me long for the feast of life--beautifully written

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  16. Anonymous22 May 2012 at 18:31

    Caterpillar hands and words storming the shores... What more could you want in such an intimate and intense poem?! Great job.

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  17. Anonymous22 May 2012 at 18:35

    Love the sailing tidy whites!

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  18. ayala22 May 2012 at 20:31

    Sensual and gorgeous...caterpillar hands, dragonfly wings...love it!

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  19. Shawna22 May 2012 at 20:43

    This is gorgeous. I love these sections:

    "as if I knew you would catch me:
    caterpillar hands, dragonfly wings"

    "and green is my favorite color
    my wings bring me here today
    I don't pretend to understand you wholly
    except that your words storm the shores of me,
    sailing my white tidy boats to voyages unknown"

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  20. Maude Lynn22 May 2012 at 21:01

    Beautiful, sensual write! I adore "your words storm the shores of me."

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  21. Rosemary Nissen-Wade22 May 2012 at 21:06

    Sweet lust indeed!

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  22. Siggi in Downeast Maine22 May 2012 at 21:29

    Very nice indeed. Thanks !
    Peace.
    Siggi in Downeast Maine

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  23. Buddah Moskowitz22 May 2012 at 21:58

    Gorgeous, just gorgeous.

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  24. steveroni22 May 2012 at 22:25

    Exactly what I'm thinking now: “..don't pretend to understand—but--your word
    storms my shore...”
    WOW! And more
    —grin!

    And this: “..smelled death on an old man's tears..”
    LOVE IT! Though I do not pretend to understand..
    May 25, Friday, I'll be 79
    I'm calling it GEMI-NINE!
    Nowhere near that death-smell.
    Don't even expect a tolling bell

    BUT Dear grace, I have been here to your blog...
    and I have smiled with you.
    Thanks!

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  25. Anonymous22 May 2012 at 22:58

    caterpillar hands and dragonfly wings I could see this happen so vivid in my mind. this was a steamy sexy write, with the depth of the sea to it. wow.
    http://leah-jamielynn.typepad.com

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  26. Alex Dissing22 May 2012 at 23:01

    Sensual and sexy, all without being TOO intimate, if you know what I mean. "and green is my favorite color" ... loved the bravery of that line.

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  27. Semaphore22 May 2012 at 23:53

    Ah, I adore Pablo Neruda, and so it is with pleasure that I devour a poem in response to one of his. I've written one of my own, but your perspective - the feminine perspective - makes this response uniquely your own.

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  28. Bradley Howington23 May 2012 at 04:08

    Beautiful, Heaven, beautiful. ♥

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  29. Ravenblack23 May 2012 at 05:48

    Very beautifully expressed emotions and feelings. Full of confidence in that love that they have. Warm like a cuddle. :)

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  30. Unknown23 May 2012 at 07:44

    This had a lyrical quality to it, would be kewl to hear it as a song

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  31. DEZMOND23 May 2012 at 08:16

    I wish someone would storm or even hurricane the shores of me :)

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  32. Steve King23 May 2012 at 08:25

    Words storming the shore/ catepillar-dragonfly/ the wonderful use of color, this has so many fine lines...All packaged so effortlessly and delivering the emotional tones perfectly. Very nice job.

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  33. Myrna R.23 May 2012 at 09:56

    This is so sensual and loving. I wish Pablo Neruda could read it. Bet he'd love it. I do.

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  34. James Rainsford23 May 2012 at 10:53

    Sensual and gently erotic. Love the picture.

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  35. Dawn23 May 2012 at 11:35

    "I don't pretend to understand you wholly
    except that your words storm the shores of me,
    sailing my white tidy boats to voyages unknown

    Wow, Heaven. WOW. The poem is gorgeous, but these lines in particular speak to me on a very personal level. Thank you so much for your beautiful words.

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  36. Anonymous23 May 2012 at 12:33

    So feathery and soft, unhurried in it's sensuality.I adored this.

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  37. Tania A23 May 2012 at 17:28

    Sensual and seductive. I want to have written this.

    Amazing.

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  38. Scarlet23 May 2012 at 17:49

    To everyone ~ Thanks so much for the lovely words and encouragement. I appreciate them all ~

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  39. Unknown23 May 2012 at 20:28

    What a delicious piece! The longing is palpable, and I felt my eyes watering up as it made me think of my own love. Just beautiful :)

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  40. Anonymous24 May 2012 at 00:10

    Love this.

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  41. Anonymous24 May 2012 at 11:28

    so sensual...you always capture this so well

    my wings bring me here today
    I don't pretend to understand you wholly
    except that your words storm the shores of me,
    sailing my white tidy boats to voyages unknown

    I really liked this line- just evokes that moment of giving yourself to someone completely

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  42. Lydia27 May 2012 at 05:25

    This is a great poem. "storms my shore" -- Wow, you write such enviable pieces!

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  43. Hannah29 May 2012 at 20:56

    "I don't pretend to understand you wholly
    except that your words storm the shores of me,"

    I love these lines all to pieces Heaven, such a great piece in it's entirety!!

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  44. Victoria9 June 2012 at 17:21

    Beautiful sensuality and I love the undertone of trust that's so important in a relationship

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