Tuesday 22 May 2012
Summer flight
I leap straight into your arms
without looking down
as if I knew you would catch me:
caterpillar hands, dragonfly wings
I gaze at your lips as if I have kissed
them a thousand times in my head, slowly
my fingers travel to your waist and hips,
as if I knew them intimately, smoothly
the seas I have crossed are red
coral reefs still cling to my russet face
I even smelled death on an old man's tears
and green is my favorite color
my wings bring me here today
I don't pretend to understand you wholly
except that your words storm the shores of me,
sailing my white tidy boats to voyages unknown
hold my face cresting on your chest,
it's warm as the summer grapes
A poetic response to : Your hands by Pablo Neruda
"When your hands leap
towards mine, love,
what do they bring me in flight?"
For the D'verse Poets Pub - OpenLinkNight - every Tuesday at 3pm EST
Thanks for the visit and smiles ~ Happy summer day ~
Picture credit: here
Subscribe to:
Post Comments (Atom)
This is beautifully sensual, Heaven. You write a beautiful love poem. I especially enjoyed the image of 'caterpillar hands, dragonfly wings.'
ReplyDeleteThanks for the lovely words and visit Mary ~
Delete"except that your words storm the shores of me"
ReplyDeletelove this line!
gracefully pretty.
I like that line too Lisa, thanks for the visit ~
Deletecaterpillar hands, dragonfly wings...love that...that line just jumps off the page...and the coral reefs still clinging to the face...your words storm the shores of me,
ReplyDeletesailing my white tidy boats to voyages unknown ...hot, love it...really great intimate love poem grace...
I appreciate your comments and visit Brian ~ Thanks ~
DeleteThis is an exceptional poem, Grace. That third stanza is just staggeringly good.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the lovely words Kerry ~ I appreciate them ~
Delete"I even smelled death on an old man's tears"
ReplyDeleteThis resonated with me for some reason...
Thank you, Heaven.
love the intimacy and sensuality in this...and like..I even smelled death on an old man's tears...a lot...somehow doesn't seem to fit in on first sight but grounds it in reality..i like
ReplyDeleteSo sensual. Love "your words storm the shores of me" - and those caterpillar hands/dragonfly wings. Beautiful write.
ReplyDeleteOh, this is really lovely. Sensual, and sexy without even mentioning a thing to do with sex. A fabulous write heaven!
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful! So many special lines in it, creating a vivdly sensual piece of poetry! Wonderful write!
ReplyDeletehttp://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/05/22/the-thunder-rolls/
A wonderful Neruda poem to spring from(but then,they all are.) The colors are vibrant but so are the images of longing and hope in this, Heaven. I especially like "...your words storm the shores of me,/
ReplyDeletesailing my white tidy boats..."
Another lovely poem...sensuous, intimate & loving...beautiful :)
ReplyDeleteYummy...delicious in the best way!
ReplyDeleteHaven't been by in a while, glad I saw your link at dVerse and had a sec to come over. Through the whole poem the thing that struck me the most was the leap...
ReplyDeleteWander
As always, such a sensuous treat... I especially like:
ReplyDeleteyour words storm the shores of me,
sailing my white tidy boats to voyages unknown
You make me long for the feast of life--beautifully written
ReplyDeleteCaterpillar hands and words storming the shores... What more could you want in such an intimate and intense poem?! Great job.
ReplyDeleteLove the sailing tidy whites!
ReplyDeleteSensual and gorgeous...caterpillar hands, dragonfly wings...love it!
ReplyDeleteThis is gorgeous. I love these sections:
ReplyDelete"as if I knew you would catch me:
caterpillar hands, dragonfly wings"
"and green is my favorite color
my wings bring me here today
I don't pretend to understand you wholly
except that your words storm the shores of me,
sailing my white tidy boats to voyages unknown"
Beautiful, sensual write! I adore "your words storm the shores of me."
ReplyDeleteSweet lust indeed!
ReplyDeleteVery nice indeed. Thanks !
ReplyDeletePeace.
Siggi in Downeast Maine
Gorgeous, just gorgeous.
ReplyDeleteExactly what I'm thinking now: “..don't pretend to understand—but--your word
ReplyDeletestorms my shore...”
WOW! And more
—grin!
And this: “..smelled death on an old man's tears..”
LOVE IT! Though I do not pretend to understand..
May 25, Friday, I'll be 79
I'm calling it GEMI-NINE!
Nowhere near that death-smell.
Don't even expect a tolling bell
BUT Dear grace, I have been here to your blog...
and I have smiled with you.
Thanks!
caterpillar hands and dragonfly wings I could see this happen so vivid in my mind. this was a steamy sexy write, with the depth of the sea to it. wow.
ReplyDeletehttp://leah-jamielynn.typepad.com
Sensual and sexy, all without being TOO intimate, if you know what I mean. "and green is my favorite color" ... loved the bravery of that line.
ReplyDeleteAh, I adore Pablo Neruda, and so it is with pleasure that I devour a poem in response to one of his. I've written one of my own, but your perspective - the feminine perspective - makes this response uniquely your own.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful, Heaven, beautiful. ♥
ReplyDeleteVery beautifully expressed emotions and feelings. Full of confidence in that love that they have. Warm like a cuddle. :)
ReplyDeleteThis had a lyrical quality to it, would be kewl to hear it as a song
ReplyDeleteI wish someone would storm or even hurricane the shores of me :)
ReplyDeleteWords storming the shore/ catepillar-dragonfly/ the wonderful use of color, this has so many fine lines...All packaged so effortlessly and delivering the emotional tones perfectly. Very nice job.
ReplyDeleteThis is so sensual and loving. I wish Pablo Neruda could read it. Bet he'd love it. I do.
ReplyDeleteSensual and gently erotic. Love the picture.
ReplyDelete"I don't pretend to understand you wholly
ReplyDeleteexcept that your words storm the shores of me,
sailing my white tidy boats to voyages unknown
Wow, Heaven. WOW. The poem is gorgeous, but these lines in particular speak to me on a very personal level. Thank you so much for your beautiful words.
So feathery and soft, unhurried in it's sensuality.I adored this.
ReplyDeleteSensual and seductive. I want to have written this.
ReplyDeleteAmazing.
To everyone ~ Thanks so much for the lovely words and encouragement. I appreciate them all ~
ReplyDeleteWhat a delicious piece! The longing is palpable, and I felt my eyes watering up as it made me think of my own love. Just beautiful :)
ReplyDeleteLove this.
ReplyDeleteso sensual...you always capture this so well
ReplyDeletemy wings bring me here today
I don't pretend to understand you wholly
except that your words storm the shores of me,
sailing my white tidy boats to voyages unknown
I really liked this line- just evokes that moment of giving yourself to someone completely
This is a great poem. "storms my shore" -- Wow, you write such enviable pieces!
ReplyDelete"I don't pretend to understand you wholly
ReplyDeleteexcept that your words storm the shores of me,"
I love these lines all to pieces Heaven, such a great piece in it's entirety!!
Beautiful sensuality and I love the undertone of trust that's so important in a relationship
ReplyDelete