Sunday 30 October 2011

Spill




i heard your sharp

gasps

saw your eyes misty,

soft lips quivering,

rush
spill

racing heart against mine  

tell me what is 
on your mind ?




you are stepping
on my foot.


Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - Poetics hosted by Claudia.  Prompt is call and response.  
This is based on an actual conversation.... reality check, okay.       
and Sunday 160 - write a post in exactly 160 characters.   
Shared with Poets United- The Poetry Pantry.




Picture credit:   http://sweetsurrender68.tumblr.com/post/8973497324

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20 comments:

  1. libithina30 October 2011 at 10:57

    lol didn't expect that Heaven ~ Ouch ~ 'hops' 'you're standing on my foot' ~ had a real moment there too :)) ~
    hugs Lib

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  2. void30 October 2011 at 10:58

    sweet!

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  3. Claudia30 October 2011 at 11:23

    haha - good one heaven..did you wear heels..? smiles

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  4. Morning30 October 2011 at 11:44

    hot, you are very good at this.
    wow.

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  5. madhumakhi30 October 2011 at 12:08

    Hilarious ending!

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  6. Anonymous30 October 2011 at 12:36

    Haha! :-D

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  7. Brian Miller30 October 2011 at 12:44

    haha....fun ending heaven...thought it might have been a leg cramp...smiles.

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  8. Pat Hatt30 October 2011 at 13:13

    hahaha loved the ending, such a fun spin

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  9. Anonymous30 October 2011 at 13:38

    I laughed out loud. That was funny.

    -H

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  10. Monkey Man30 October 2011 at 14:39

    I love this kind of humor.Thanks for making it a part of the Sunday 160.

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  11. tinkwelborn30 October 2011 at 14:41

    Ha funny piece.
    so sensuous coming in, then 'bam' the twist at the end.
    slap stick poetry, and I like the shock.
    good job.

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  12. Anonymous30 October 2011 at 14:47

    i love these ASSumption poems, when someone is assuming one thing and it's ....

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  13. The Poet30 October 2011 at 15:07

    Hello.
    Haha! You got us all with the image & the ending!

    Nice one, Heaven!
    Thanks for sharing & visiting.

    The Beautiful Winds Of India

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  14. Madeleine Begun Kane30 October 2011 at 18:17

    LOL! I loved your surprise punchline!

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  15. ayala30 October 2011 at 19:14

    You got me :) I didn't expect it...nice :)

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  16. Katherine Krige30 October 2011 at 21:52

    Like the touch with the misty eyes.
    Ouch!

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  17. Anonymous31 October 2011 at 03:38

    Ohh yeah!!! Lovely, with that end twist! :)

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  18. Rallentanda31 October 2011 at 06:05

    Highly original and creative idea of someone treading on someone else's feet, although somehow strangely familiar.Where do you get your inspiration?

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  19. Brother Ollie31 October 2011 at 11:11

    yes ...your poems move

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  20. Rosemary Nissen-Wade31 October 2011 at 17:50

    Ha ha! Oh, what a wicked undercut.

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