we discover kinship and language:
vertical emptiness under
sky, but where
i stall at black void-
you form possibilities
upon bare autumn trees hot
dripping glue strands
your artist's hands
molding my world to snow -
glazed pristine silver
suddenly my arms
branch to write blooming roses
my feet garden
lush green, i
weave magical tales: bear-clad prince,
stolen treasures underneath
forest trees, i
tower, my eyes can ((finally)) believe
what (( i )) can be:
clouds-lifted, fearless, i
rest words on page ((& nestle close to)) you,
warm as sun
SCHNEEWEISSCHEN (Snow-White) by Catrin Welz-Stein
Poetry form: Collum lunes (3-5-3 words, mostly ha~)
i like how those different characters inspire each other and make each other fruitful.. the arms branching...so much life and growth in there...such richness and the nestling close in the end... really... i want an icebear now..
ReplyDeleteI love it when partners & artists inspire each other ~ Thanks Claudia ~
Deletenice...love the intimacy of their artist hands moulding your world of snow....love the echo ((i)) as well...cool use of punctuation...the branching arms writing blooming roses....very cool element...
ReplyDeletehappy saturday
Learning punctuation from you Brian, thanks ~
DeleteThis is lovely, Grace. The first two lines ring loud and true. There's just something about touch and hugs that connects souls.
ReplyDeleteI agree on that connection ~ Thanks Laurie ~
DeleteI do love me some collum lunes, and these are sterling. I would have gone with the Nordic legends of the bear being a prince, cursed by a witch, and only the true love of a maiden would save him; yet for me, in the painting, he is sad because the maiden is inattentive, already concentrating on elsewhere & others; that is the heartbreaking message in Art.
ReplyDeleteFunny how we see different things with the same picture, smiles ~ Thanks for the visit Glenn ~
DeleteI like how you portray the partnership between these two very different characters Grace!
ReplyDeleteI love the second verse in each stanza :)
ReplyDeleteAnd that Snow White picture is just amazing
Ah... that is lovely. A feel of a fairy-tale.
ReplyDeleteFur and skin, that could get the rednecks delighted haha like how you used the two
ReplyDeleteYou always phrase and string words so beautifully, Grace. I love this:
ReplyDelete"suddenly my arms
branch to write blooming roses
my feet garden"
Excellent tale woven. :)
This was one of my favorite images by this artist and I love how it inspired your verse. So very beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThe opening is my favorite when skin and fur touch...a special moment of connection between two realms.
ReplyDeleteI like the kinship between the young woman and the bear & the way they show warmth to one another despite their differences.
ReplyDeleteThis was a very odd image--compelling but kind of strange and I almost found it a distraction from the poem as it is almost too literal, whereas much in the poem seems imagistic. It is a super interesting poem- I especially liked the close which felt to me like a person in love with their fantastical creation, their work--quirky but very well done. Thanks, Grace. Thanks too for linking my post--I'm not sure what I did wrong, but thanks. k.
ReplyDeleteps - it's Karin from Manicddaily, still on iPad. k.
DeleteFur and skin - I'm glad you saw sweet love.. And how they will share a love together
ReplyDeleteanimal /human , fur/skin /unite/ bond. Your words have made this artwork come alive to me Grace - stunning- thank you.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful work Grace, it's absolute art, I'm as impressed as I always am!
ReplyDeleteI love these characters as well....... You are sure a true nature expressionist!
ReplyDeletesuddenly my arms
ReplyDeletebranch to write blooming roses
my feet garden
lush green, i
weave magical tales: bear-clad prince,
stolen treasures underneath
fantastic !!
chant rythm here. the closing is especially nice, the contrast of your word choices against the image. lovely.
ReplyDeleteVery dreamy and lovely Grace. Your words are perfect for the picture. I love the 'marriage' of art and inspiration.
ReplyDeleteHow well-crafted this is. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteNice duet, Grace! Enjoyed :)x
ReplyDeleteI love how you brought them together. Beautiful. Have a wonderful week!
ReplyDeleteIt's that kinship that binds even between beings poles apart. It's a tendency not common but you blend them together just the same and done it very well! Nicely Grace!
ReplyDeleteHank
Your imagery is so striking. I really like this, Grace.
ReplyDeleteA beautiful homage to collaborative creativity.
ReplyDeleteInspirational one line to the next. So well connected!
ReplyDeleteOh, how important to have someone who can see different possibilities that we can. :)
ReplyDeleteOh wow, very uplifting and inspirational...my eyes believe what I can be...Oh yes!! Wonderful!!
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