Tuesday, 3 September 2013

Venus

you are looking at me

beyond messy hair 
beyond my crooked nose 
beyond scars, nicks & lines  
beyond my smudged fingernails
beyond lack, trying to fill, almost 
beyond my dry kisses
beyond tongue & spit
beyond my claws & rages
beyond light apologies & heavy silence
beyond these hands, which sometimes forget you
beyond my waistline
beyond moods & unpredictable demands 
beyond my legs 
beyond unpolished, grime & vomit
beyond my cheeks  
beyond sparkle, skin & guts
beyond my history

you are looking at me

and i feel beautiful  


49 comments:

  1. Sigh. Your words fill my soul. Thank you! (Hugs)Indigo

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  2. oh, we all yearn to be looked upon like that, Grace!

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  3. Ahh. yes to feel loved is the greatest things of all.. and I love those repetitions... very good.. :-)

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  4. This you ... and me ... proud to be ...

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  5. That is REAL love, Grace. the best of love! A lucky woman indeed.

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  6. A wonderful perspective: from the outside looking inside. Very well done.

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  7. That is one of a kind love indeed. But vomit hmmm I'd look beyond it, someone else would have to clean it lol

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  8. Awesome. I want someone like that.

    -H

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  9. It is a wonderful feeling when we find those that look not just beyond our imperfections, but also love us including those perfections :) ~peace and love, Jason

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  10. Any man who can focus on the inner beauty is a keeper; for his is soul mate, not lust buddy. This piece was a wonderful exercise in both repetition & romance.

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  11. Beauty is in the mind of the holder...lovely words from a lovely soulyouare....

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  12. Grace, I love the rhthyms that ebb and flow through this and the ending is such a great twist.>KB

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  13. lovely poem. "beyond my history"! wonderful

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  14. and beautiful, you are. this is just lovely, the way we all wish to be looked at.

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  15. Thank God for "Open Link Night" so you could post this unusual accounting of "How do I love thee? Let me count the Ways..."

    You are NOW more beautiful than ever before, my dear, in the eyes and hearts of ALL!

    I like that "crooked nose" :-)

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  16. we all hope to know how a look like that feels... sigh... nice

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  17. What we all need to feel loved and accepted...to have someone look beyond what we perceive as our imperfections. Love all of me...even my emotional scars. Lovely.

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  18. how awesome is it when they look at you and really see you, you know...beyond all the little things that make you up and see the real you....very cool use of repetition grace

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  19. and this is how it should be... often we ourselves are our strongest critics and the one that loves us looks with much more merciful eyes...

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  20. Wonderful poem Grace; both realistic and romantic!

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  21. Oh--so love this Grace!!So wonderful to really be seen--

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  22. Sigh..and you are beautiful inside and out!

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  23. Aww...who wouldn't want to be looked at that way :)

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  24. Ah yes, beyond there is this - and how it sets us free to shine... Your message is truly felt and expressed - can't ever ask for any more than that, Grace - thank you... With Best Wishes Scott www.scotthastie.com

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  25. I wonder if people who really look at eachother see all that and then look beyond it. Maybe. I know on the rare occasions that I was seen, I thought about all this stuff--but not til later. I love the sound of the word beyond, so I was glad to repeat it, beyond how we see self, self. Lovely.

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  26. Oh, wow. Then you are a lucky woman!

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  27. beyond all the superficial..you are beautiful and he saw it..lovley

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  28. ...that must've been true love, Grace... seeing beauty beyond beauty.... with high essential to accept, respect & love.... it's more than adoration... it's appreciation! loved this... smiles...

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  29. beyond, beneath, within
    to be truly seen and known
    yes!

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  30. Isn't it wonderful when someone can look beyond?

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  31. Lovely. To be loved unconditionally is a beautiful thing. Sacred. Love this.

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  32. anaphora ecstasy, Heaven, in the recognition of sublime in the quotidian.

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  33. Sweet! It reminds me of the movie "Bridgette Jone's Diary" when she is trying to cover her "wobbly bits" and he says "I happen to like your wobbly bits" (or something like that ;)

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  34. Heaven this is lovely, lovely. I have one that looks at me like that. Beautiful.

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  35. the unconditional love - the outer shell being as transparent as the glass, to see beyond, inside of and truly look at a person for who they are.. this is beautiful Grace.

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  36. Aaah, what a pleasure it must be to feel so. Completely lovely.

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  37. I feel fortunate to be looked at that way.

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  38. Hope you will always feel beautiful !

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  39. Leave it to Venus to exhude beauty and extract it from us to make us feel it. Keep looking at her Grace. Your poetry is like Venus by the way, always beautiful and loving.

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  40. I appreciate the ending not knowing where you were leading me. Love the positivity!
    Cheers,
    Mark

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  41. When one sees you beyond all that..
    a great sight :)

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  42. Not just saying this to be nice Heaven but I genuinely feel like you're one of the greatest writers I've ever came into contact with, this is just, wow and I mean that.

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  43. Grace, a wonderful list poem on the truth of true love. I enjoyed this immensely.

    Pamela

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  44. Quite the love song - with lots of grains of truth. Well done.

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  45. Wonderful to be seen and acknowledged. Great job. k.

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  46. Ah... I love, love this. :-) How beautiful the love of our beloved can make us. :-)

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  47. this has a vibrational quality i find riveting. very cool. recognition of reality is all it is. what a package and beauty this is.

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