I say goodbye now with bittersweet tears
The ten days have gone so swiftly like sands
Blown away by your golden smile. You spear
My chest with longing. Come and hold my hands
One last time. Before I board the airplane
I draw a kiss, long & deep. How my pulse
Quickens & flames with your soft touch. Insane
I am to believe 'tis love, not mad impulse
Shadows inside me, wounds long ago, flee
Doubts crippling my words, fade & disappear
With you, mornings become glorious to see
Dappled blue-pink, I dream of you so near
So close I hear you whisper a sacred
Vow, Soon ! Our lives, twining, undivided !
Inspired by Blogging Love Story by Keith & Beate - I take poetic license, smiles ~ Congrats to the engaged couple ~
Posted for D'verse Poets Pub - Shakespeare Sonnet - 14 lines with abab cdcd efef gg rhyme scheme.
This poem drips with the softness of love...
ReplyDeleteAlways a pleasure to read your pen Heaven ...
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DeleteGrace I am sitting here speechless after reading this. Literally speechless. You really captured so many of the emotions Beate and I felt before, during, and after those ten amazing days. Thank you so much for this. I am going to save this poem forever. I am sending it to Beate now as well. Absolutely beautiful :)
ReplyDeleteI am happy you are happy Keith ~ This sonnet form is tricky but I enjoyed writing it for you guys ~
DeleteWow, this is so amazingly beautiful, I'm at a loss for words, too. Thank you so much, Grace, for this wonderful gift. I'm truly blown away by the fact that we inspire such amazing creativity with our story. Thank you for this incredibly amazing poem, we will both cherish it forever, it is part of our story now!
ReplyDeleteThank you for your lovely words Beate ~ I am happy that you enjoyed this offering ~
DeleteAh.. what a wonderful sonnet.. and so great it's based on a real story.. I think it's amazing that real love is formed on blogging or twitter... and I love the two comments above.. so much happens at an airport.. and I still recall when you could follow each other to the gate which was even more amazing...
ReplyDeleteI was inspired Bjorn after reading Keith's post about his engagement ~ Virtual to real love is a priceless gift ~
Deleteoh i love a good love story - and when a couple is made for each other distance shrinks... congrats to them - and glad they don't have to board planes anymore to be able to see each other...smiles
ReplyDeleteRich with emotion such a beautiful write.
ReplyDeleteRomantic, true to form, sensual, beautiful; rocking the socks off the Sonnet, for sure. Kind of intimidating to those of us who only can dabble in Sonnetville.
ReplyDeleteVery commendable Grace. >KB
ReplyDeleteI love that this is based on something real. So beautiful penned, Grace.
ReplyDeleteYes, based on a real life love story ~ Thank you ~
DeleteRomance - there's no better use for a sonnet, and this one is lovely. Purists might quibble about your pulse/impulse rhyme and a couple of word order inversions that are there to mainitain the rhyme scheme ...
ReplyDeletebut I won't ... smiles
Rhyming verses are not my forte but I do love the theme though ~ Thanks for the challenge Tony ~
Deleteaw you def chocked this with the emotions...the parting is def sweet sorrow...and returning to one another all the more special...i love how they make the morning all the more....yes, they do...well played...
ReplyDeleteThank you Brian ~
DeleteGrace, you've captured a piece of my life in this work, written as though for me. My sweetheart lives across the country, and those airport partings are so lovingly intense... my heartbeat accelerated as I read it. My sonnet today also speaks of coming together across the distance. I enjoyed this thoroughly.
ReplyDeleteLong distance relationships are challenging and many couples have broken up because of this ~ It takes a lot of intense loving, I agree ~ Thank you ~
DeleteVery neat story. How absence makes the heart ache, but at least there is the promise of "soon" :-)
ReplyDeleteWe are waiting for their "Soon" to happen smiles ~ Thanks ~
DeleteBeautiful Grace, the clear sense of longing and the soon echoing at the end, very well done. Hope your soon arrives sooner rather than later.
ReplyDeleteThis was inspired by bloggers love story ~ Thank you for your kind visits Michaelt ~
Deletecaptured it all and more at your shore
ReplyDeleteWell you know their story too Pat ~
DeleteThere is great storytelling in your poem, and I am so happy that it is based on real life. You have given your friend a lovely gift!
ReplyDeleteWhen two hearts are close, so no matter the physical distance be, love conquers all. Great poem and story.
ReplyDeleteYou have a knack for writing very sensitive love poems. Nice sonnet, Grace.
ReplyDeletethis is so touching and sweet Grace....and 'soon' the sweetest.. :)
ReplyDeleteSuch wonderful poem, full of a longing that is palpable! *sigh* Oh, to feel that way! Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteVery cool, Grace, to write a lovely sonnet for friends. I seem to recall several others a bit more steamy of your own (ahem) experieinces. ;)
ReplyDeleteNot your usual style, I know, but so well done that you may come to like it.
ReplyDeleteSo close I hear you whisper a sacred
ReplyDeleteVow, Soon ! Our lives, twining, undivided !
Would love it, if it can come to this! Great sonnet offering Grace~
Hank
it's really refreshing when you do rhymes!
ReplyDeleteAaah, how lovely! And what a wonderful love-story :)
ReplyDeleteyou def captured the emotions
ReplyDeletebeautifully crafted. distance can be trying on love...it is nice when love managed to conquer the distance.
ReplyDeleteEverything everyone said, Grace. This is one of your most beautiful. Wow.
ReplyDeleteLove is such a wonderful thing and much love to Keith and Beate.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
A lovely sonnet Grace..
ReplyDeletea lovely romantic sonnet with a modern bent...Shakespeare would be proud I am sure!
ReplyDeleteLove this! :-) Your style fits this form so well!
ReplyDeletetraditional yet with complicated rhymes. Happy week, Grace :) ~
ReplyDeleteI cannot express how much I adore this! Their story truly is all this and so much more. I love it and I love them (without even "knowing" them) How awesome is that?! I think you writing about them is just wonderful. Thank you!!!!! xoxoxo
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