you put this pen
in my hand & i take
flight,
far away from the icy wind-
somewhere tropical,
the distance calls. thunders
along old & rusty train
tracks, running
parallel
along the bend, promising
our paths will
cross at
distant junction. we
pull.
meeting along the
sea tide, where the sands break
the rocks into its knees. we taste
salt in our
faces, our bound-
aries clinging like weeds. we
push.
hungry for fullness of the
moon. you put a knife in my hand.
the horizon & walls slip away.
we cling. like missing
pieces across the white page.
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clinging like missing pieces across the white page..love this..and with a pen in the hand we're just able to travel anywhere...it's like having wings suddenly...smiles
ReplyDeleteThe pen is like having wings ~ Thanks Claudia ~
Deletewhew...interesting change from pen to knife...sometimes they are the same tool you know...smiles....i need to go get my pen so i can take a trip to the seaside...thats what i am saying...smiles....happy OLN grace...
ReplyDeleteSame tools, I agree ~ Thanks Brian ~
DeleteI like how everything is happening and then nothing is happening, but just a blank page. I'll re-read this many times. In writing, I can fly too.
ReplyDeleteGood perspective Mosk ~ It's all in my head actually ~
Delete" we taste
ReplyDeletesalt in our faces, our bound-
aries clinging like weeds. we push.
hungry for fullness of the
moon." LOVE THIS!
Thank you Laura ~
DeleteWhat a trip you take me through and that knife in the end... so strong.
ReplyDeleteThank you Brudberg ~
DeleteWhat I take from this is that with our pen we can take ourselves anywhere with our words and meet whatever and whoever we wish. Admittedly I am not quite sure what to make of the knife at the end....
ReplyDeleteA knife is a knife ~ Smiles ~ Thank you Mary ~
DeleteA wonderful journey!
ReplyDeleteThank you Jenny ~
DeleteI like the way Buddah sees it.
ReplyDeleteLiving in your head and then seeing the possibilities to tempt you out.
Thank you Aprille ~
DeleteThis was complx...a pen placed in your hand in stanza one, a knife in the last...felt like you cut away reality via poetry...beautifully done.
ReplyDeleteI sometimes feel that way with writing ~ Thank you for the visit ~
DeleteHi Grace,
ReplyDeleteI really liked the last two lines..nice poem
we cling. like missing
pieces across the white page.
what's with the knife, Grace?
ReplyDeleteLove the wings the pen gives us, beautiful !
ReplyDeleteI love all the places the pen takes us--and how you told it!
ReplyDelete"along old & rusty train
ReplyDeletetracks, running parallel
along the bend, promising
our paths will cross at
distant junction."
what a great picture this paints... the whole piece a great read
Yummy read as usual. I really liked this, "our bound-
ReplyDeletearies clinging like weeds".
Can sure fly away, to some far off bay, just let ones self go and away we will flow.
ReplyDeleteThis is absolutely wondrous, I wish I felt this floaty feeling more often myself.
ReplyDeletethose last few lines are amazing in meaning..so true
ReplyDeletewhere is the food when mother is not?
The pen can be like a knife... hurtful through the written word. Lots to think about here... love it!
ReplyDeleteThis is so filled with life, the life we write for ourselves, with the life we live behind it. Love.
ReplyDeleteYou took me racing along through a beautiful daydream. Your imagery is delicious.
ReplyDeleteI love this, Grace! Vivid and exciting!
ReplyDeleteGrace, I love the twisty end, I wasn't expecting a knife, whew!
ReplyDeletePamela
Very clever...so many ways to read this and every way is intriguing and exciting...all those missing pieces across a white page...Great stuff!!!
ReplyDeleteKiller ending...! a bit unexpected...clever write!
ReplyDeleteI feel cheated... I don't get the knife stanza... and the rest of it is SO GOOD...
ReplyDeletethe pen took me
ReplyDeletethe knife stopped me
I'm intrigued
I really like this:
ReplyDelete"we taste
salt in our faces, our bound-
aries clinging like weeds. we push."
Love the last stanza too. And everything you did to make this visually appealing, all the play with spacing. Very nice.
~wit, et al
I'm not sure if it was intended, but the shape of the poem also reminded me of train tracks - very cool.
ReplyDeleteI took it just as you made my eyes see it: Tristan Und Isolde. Running, pushing, pulling, and need to stop--for good!
ReplyDeleteWhatever you meant, whatever I "saw", it is terrific. Now I going to sleep well...well?
Way to go Grace..I love the way this flows..esp. sand, rocks, sea, weeds,salt...as your pen takes flight .
ReplyDeleteThe pen can create so much; the knife brings only endings - or atleast that's how I'm reading it.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is bursting with delicious imagery! Love it!
ReplyDeleteI especially like the parallel tracks seeking to cross at some point. The pen gives rise to so many compelling images that would otherwise remain dark...
ReplyDeleteA beautiful journey of a couples love. Thank you!
ReplyDeleteI'm partial to pencils, but it is amazing the journey you can take with such a simple tool. the knife took me a bit by surprise...I'll have to ponder that addition for a bit, see where it leads me. a lovely journey, I do enjoy the pen being in your hand.
ReplyDeleteI took flight with this poem - really loved the lines of the second stanza with the train and the crossing paths - lovely write! K
ReplyDeleteThrough writing and imagination, we create worlds and experiences and then share them with others. This one, filled with natural images as well as longing, love and lust, is quite a ride!
ReplyDeleteOh my goodness... the pen, the knife... we push, we pull... finding the place to be together. Beautiful.
ReplyDeletebeautiful....we cling. I love that and the images you painted....simply wonderful.
ReplyDelete"far away from the icy wind-
ReplyDeletesomewhere tropical,
the distance calls"
you say and suddenly I'm in my own long-standing fantasy to be rich and live in a tropical land.
Dizzy love sick would be nice, too, and you seem to have included that for our enjoyment, too. I even like train rides to meet mysterious strangers, so you had much to delight here.
Thanks for the fun!
Very sharp contrast ! This minute pen in hand, the next minute knife in hand!
ReplyDeleteI love this flight, I enjoy the anticipation of what could happen at that "junction" and what does happen too,,,Lovely,,
ReplyDeleteHow can you survive without frangipani and mangoustine?!This cannot be good for you,
ReplyDeleteLOVE the contrast here. Push and pull...
ReplyDeleteWhat a magical instrument -- the pen. :-)
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