Tuesday, 9 April 2013

When spring comes



Unlatched,
spring explodes - this:
 - pouring rain, river spell-     
painting a canvas, oiled & dabbed,
breathless-

Unlike
any art frame
-you in me, me in you - 
layered in light, grey & darkness,  
curled tight- 

fisted,   
where the flames lick  
the sheets, we love harder--
bonding -- and this is where language

fails us -




Posted for:   D'verse Poets Pub - OpenLinkNight - Thanks for the visit -
Poetry form:   cinquain (2-4-6-8-2 syllables)

Picture credit:   tumbler.com

50 comments:

  1. the language fails us but the tongue doesn't not :PP

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  2. hmmm..there are def. moments when language doesn't seem so important any more...whew...have to open a window now..getting hot in here...smiles

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  3. In those moments it's good when language fails us...hot :)

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  4. ha and you know...language failing in that moment it superseded by sensation and still the meaning comes across....smiles...you built the flam in this nicely grace...smiles

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  5. Yeah who needs language when you got the humpty hump going haha

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  6. Sometimes language is not necessary at all. This is one of those times. Beautiful writing, Grace.

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    1. I agree Mary, thank you for the lovely words ~

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  7. The language here is enough to set off a chain reaction in my head. Aherm. Enough said...

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  8. "where the flames lick the sheets, we love harder' is a REALLY great image. I forget the exact percentages, but isn't interpersonal communication primarily non-verbal. Yet, you captured that non-verbal exchange in words. Touché.

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    1. Non-verbal cues are definitely more powerful ~ But this is also about the challenge of writing about intimacy ~

      Thank you ~ I like that part too ~

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  9. Hard to talk with a mouth ful of.....
    Sorry, the cold shower beckons, toodle pip

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  10. Passion needs no language but its own. Great write.

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  11. great allusion in this this, very well crafted.

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  12. Dang girl... you always pen the most sensual things. I like the three cinquains, well done! Language does fail us in those moments but yours certainly doesn't in this piece. Bravo!

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  13. amazingly sensual and seductive. Lovely! Thank you for sharing!

    Bad Penny

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  14. You are one of the best writers of passion that I have ever read.

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    1. Thanks for the lovely compliment Raven ~

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  15. I like your spring - wish it would come my way...

    And I agree with Raven.

    Anna :o]

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  16. My heart was beating hard as I read these. Beautiful.

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  17. Beautiful, beautiful-- I especially love the tension between the 2nd and 3rd stanzas-- "curled tight--- fisted" -- a superb moment. Truly a great read. ~peace, Jason

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    1. I like that part too Jason ~ Thank you ~

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  18. a picture can be worth a thousand words, and you painted that picture with this one.

    fabulously sensual.

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  19. Beautiful cinquains (though I did have to reinterpret the last one, as I read "fisted" in a way I don't think you meant me to!).

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  20. Powerfully written. Especially when it is all brought home in the third stanza with the contrasting first word with its inherent violent overtones.. "fisted"

    Made me cry

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  21. Wonderful when language fails us in such a way! Very nice!

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  22. This is where language fails us... or perhaps where it is not necessary...

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  23. Who needs language at a moment like this? Hot and says it all!

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  24. Passionate write, Grace. Not an easy feat to pull off, but you did splendid.

    Pamela

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  25. language: "any system of formalized symbols, signs, sounds, gestures, or the like used or conceived as a means of communicating thought, emotion."

    I'd say language didn't fail so much as eclipse the need for words.

    a beautiful piece!

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  26. Love the form, love the poem.

    And I love it that you dare explore raw passion through structured poems ;-)

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    1. I find it challenging actually ~ Thanks Ninotaziz ~

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  27. The invigorating effect of spring is apparent. So is the emotional bonding expressing itself in the content of these lovely cinquains. There is depth to this, Grace.

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    1. We are experiencing spring showers here ~ Thank you for the visit Eusebia ~

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  28. And so the warmth of spring invades both body and soul. A lovely and sensuous piece, indeed.

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  29. Thank you all for the lovely and encouraging comments ~

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  30. Gotta love that body language. 'You say it best when you say nothing at all' as the old song goes...which I love by the way.

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  31. Love those moments when words need not exist. This is beautiful.

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  32. Absolutely amazing and sensual post Heaven, absolutely love this, it sets such a great tone and gives me some awesome vibes.

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  33. True to your username here, your phrases or poems are always full of lust. Coincidentally, Chinese sometimes describe lovemaking as turning over the clouds and rain.

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  34. hmm...I def need some inspiration to draw from to write something close to this..oh well ;) I am thankful for language here, for without your words to describe the feelings or non feelings as you have, we would not be able to relive/savor the moments for reading over again ;) K-

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  35. Yeah! when language fails us and we speak with tongues. Love the sensuality here.
    Cheers,
    Mark Butkus

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  36. I need to find a new supply of adjectives,, some that have not been used but would say how much I enjoyed this poem. The raw sensuality that lust can bring alive,, and indeed leave lovers speechless with its fruition,,, :-)

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  37. I'd say their language is just fine, fine indeed. Have a beautiful weekend!

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  38. Much is said without voice. Beautiful work.

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